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The term discourse community can be tricky to define; however, John Swales figured out a way to properly define

the complicated term. A discourse community has a broadly agreed set of common public goals, mechanisms of intercommunication among its members, uses its participatory mechanisms primarily to provide information and feedback, utilizes and hence possesses one or more genres in the communicative furtherance if its aims has specific lexis, and a threshold level of members with a suitable degree of relevant content and discoursal expertise. When I read that this is what a discourse community really was, I immediately thought of my gospel choir. It held every aspect of a discourse community. Before explaining how my gospel choir is a discourse, let me first explain what my gospel choir is. We call ourselves Voices of Eden. We are an open choir that is easy to join. We consist of many different people, and do not prey fall to the typical stereotypes that all we do is preach at people about God and only sing gospel. This is my discourse community because: 1. We all share a broadly agreed set of common public goals In V.O.E we all want to bring people, particularly young people closer to God through song. When I observed the choir I noticed how much fun everyone would have singing and praising the Lord. I recently went on tour with the group and at the last event they sang for a younger gospel choir consisting of members the age of twelve through eighteen. I noticed that at first the younger choir did not want to stand, I figured they thought we were going to be boring. However when the upbeat music started to play and V.O.E because to dance and praise God in a more fun and youthful way, the younger choir began to stand up and sing and dance along. This is exactly what Voices of Eden wants and stands for. 2. Voices of Eden has mechanisms of intercommunication among its member Voices of Eden meets every Monday and Tuesday. Even though we meet regularly, theres always

Commented [RT1]: MLA format Commented [RT2]: Maybe use a quote when Swales describes his view on discourse community Commented [RT3]: This is a really long sentence. Try shortening it a bit by separating those commas into more sentences.

Commented [RT4]: I see what your trying to say, but not sure if its a word

Commented [RT5]: Here maybe go into more depth into the history of the gospel choir Commented [RT6]: Explain how to join. Process?

Commented [RT7]: I think you should go with a more standard paragraph form instead of trying the whole number/list thing. It seems as though its more of an essay that I have to read as opposed to want to read. I feel a story would be a better way to go.

Commented [RT8]: Go into depth about your personal experience when you got started with the group. Since you are in the group, make the essay a little more personal.

Commented [RT9]: This sentence is kind of weird. Rephrase

something that needs to be expressed whether thats songs for the next concert, or concerns. These emails keep our group very organized and running smoothly. Our emails are usually very detailed and reflects the choirs values of structure, communication, preparedness, and ability to follow directions. These values are always stressed in the emails. 3. We use our participatory mechanisms primarily to provide information and feedback Voices of Eden is like a family. When one of us mess up, its like we all mess up. We help and guide one another. When one of us is off, someone will usually figure out a way to tell them that its them without being mean or embarrassing them
Commented [RT10]: Tell more about this. It would be interesting to hear how you connect with the group it self and individual members.

Commented [RT11]: Im hoping this isnt the end. Even thought we talked about this in class, I feel like you are very capable of going very far into depth about something you are so close to.