Name: _______________________________________________

Classmate 1: ______________________________
1. Formatting
- Is the header (Name, Ms. Regan, English 1, November 27, 2013) correct?
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- Do they have a title that is more creative than Enders Game Essay?
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2. Introduction
- Do they have a hook? Does it make sense?
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- Is there enough background information? Does it relate to the topic?

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Does the thesis statement have an opinion (anti-war OR pro-war) and 3 supporting
points _______________________________________________________________

- Is the thesis ONE sentence at the end of the introduction? __________________________

3. Body Paragraphs
- Are there 3 body paragraphs? __________________________________________________________
- Is the first sentence of each body paragraph a topic sentence? (Yes or No)
1.
2.
3.
- Does each topic sentence relate to one of the three main points listed in the
thesis? Is it in the correct order? (Ex: 1st point in thesis is topic of 1st body
paragraph, 2nd point/2nd paragraph, etc.) (Yes or No)
1.
2.
3.
- Does each body paragraph have at least two quotes? (Yes or No)
1.
2.
3.
- Is the way paved for each quote? And, is each quote fully explained? Yes or No
for each quote. If you answered no, explain what can be improved.
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
- Are the quotes properly cited? (First quote: (Card, 87). All others: (98).
***These page numbers are examples. The page numbers should be the page the
quote is found on***)
_____________________________________________________________________________________________

Does each body paragraph make sense and support the claims of the thesis and
specific topic sentence? Provide at least 3 FULL sentences of constructive
feedback.
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4. Conclusion
- Do they restate the thesis? (Yes or No) ________________________________________________
- Are the three main points summarized? (Yes or No) _________________________________
- Do they have an end hook? (Yes or No) ________________________________________________
- Does the end hook make sense? If no, explain why.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
5. Grammar
- Are there any major or repeated errors (typos, comma usage, spelling,
capitalization, subject-verb agreement)? List errors and suggestions for
correcting.

6. Overall Feedback
- What are the biggest strengths in this essay? 3-4 FULL SENTENCES
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Where is the biggest need for improvement in this essay? 3-4 FULL SENTENCES
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
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_____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________

Name: ______________________________________________
Classmate 2: ______________________________
1. Formatting
- Is the header (Name, Ms. Regan, English 1, November 27, 2013) correct?
_____________________________________________________________________
- Do they have a title that is more creative than Enders Game Essay?
_____________________________________________________________________
2. Introduction
- Do they have a hook? Does it make sense?
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
- Is there enough background information? Does it relate to the topic?

3.
-

_____________________________________________________________________________________________
Does the thesis statement have an opinion (anti-war OR pro-war) and 3 supporting
points _______________________________________________________________
Is the thesis ONE sentence at the end of the introduction? __________________________
Body Paragraphs
Are there 3 body paragraphs? __________________________________________________________
Is the first sentence of each body paragraph a topic sentence? (Yes or No)
1.
2.
3.
Does each topic sentence relate to one of the three main points listed in the
thesis? Is it in the correct order? (Ex: 1st point in thesis is topic of 1st body
paragraph, 2nd point/2nd paragraph, etc.) (Yes or No)
1.
2.
3.
Does each body paragraph have at least two quotes? (Yes or No)
1.
2.
3.
Is the way paved for each quote? And, is each quote fully explained? Yes or No
for each quote. If not, explain what can be improved.
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
- Are the quotes properly cited? (First quote: (Card, 87). All others: (98).
***These page numbers are examples. The page numbers should be the page the
quote is found on***)

4.
5.
-

6.
-

_____________________________________________________________________________________________
Does each body paragraph make sense and support the claims of the thesis and
specific topic sentence? Provide at least 3 FULL sentences of constructive
feedback.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
Conclusion
Do they restate the thesis? (Yes or No) ________________________________________________
Are the three main points summarized? (Yes or No) _________________________________
Do they have an end hook? (Yes or No) ________________________________________________
Does the end hook make sense? If no, explain why.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
Grammar
Are there any major or repeated errors (typos, comma usage, spelling,
capitalization, subject-verb agreement)? List errors and suggestions for
correcting.

Overall Feedback
What are the biggest strengths in this essay? 3-4 FULL SENTENCES
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
Where is the biggest need for improvement in this essay? 3-4 FULL SENTENCES
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
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