Situational Writing (Sec 3E)

Situation: To prepare a speech to persuade the Principal, in a SUITABLE tone, with possible
Suggestions for Community Involvement Projects.
Model 1: from Sec 3I7 (Adapted and Enhanced from Sajeev Suppiahs work.)
PARAGRAPHS COMMENTS
Good morning Mr Singh and members of the schools
management. My name is Sajeev and Im from class 3Inspiring7. As a
student leader, I am here today to share some suggestions for the most
ideal community involvement programme that all the students of our
school can take part in. Before I dive into more details, I would like to
mention that a group of dedicated student leaders have come together
in discussion and sourced for some local organisations that, we feel
strongly, would provide good opportunities to shape us in becoming
caring ambassadors of the community.
Start politely.
State your purpose
of speech
State briefly what
you have done and
what

Common mistakes:
Im here to persuade
you about the need for
us to do community
project. (lack
sincerity)
Have you wondered
why the previous
programmes have not
been so beneficial?
(Diesrespectful Tone)
Do NOT ask many
personal questions for
a formal audience, eg
Principal, teachers.

The Singapore Cancer Society and the Jurong Bird Park are two
establishments that are able to provide us a suitable platform for
volunteerism and contribution. Firstly, allow me to share about how
we can work hand in hand with the Cancer Society. In Singapore,
cancer has made its way to become one of the leading illnesses that
takes lives. As volunteers, we would be able to provide hope and light
up the lives of cancer patients. We could assist in the on-going
fundraising projects, research and public education of cancer. In
addition, we can render help in improving patient services and the
quality of lives of the patients. In the process, we would be able to
gain knowledge in finding out more about this perilous disease and
understand how the afflicted thinks and feels. Certainly, we can
benefit immensely through heightened awareness of the ill-fated
disease and become responsible citizens as we reach out to others
with compassion and love.


platform =
opportunity

render = provide

TIP: The last 4 lines
aim to sum up, as the
LINK, the benefits of
the involvement with
cancer society to make
it convincing. Effective
persuasion is
achieved with the use
of the BOLD,
UNDERLINED words
to enhance
persuasion.)
My second suggestion would be for us, students, to take on the
roles of ambassadors of conservation at the Jurong Bird Park. This
experience would allow us to participate as dynamic spokespeople for
the wildlife, conduct guided tours, and enjoy sharing animal facts and
information with visitors. Many of us know Singapore to be
flourishing, however to turn into a concrete jungle. While we urbanise
rapidly, it would be good for students to start demonstrating what we
can do to conserve the environment. There is a popular phrase that
goes Keep Myopia at Bay, go outside and play. We should constantly
remind ourselves that we have to take time away from the computers
to look at the greenery, plants, flowers and trees. As conservation
take on (accept)




Elaborate by
explaining (PEEL)

use of should
suggests that it is an
important thing that
ought to be done.
ambassadors, we would be able to learn how we can conserve our land
and wildlife. The guided tours would also allow us to speak with
many people. It is certain that we will be able to gain invaluable
public speaking skills and get up-close with the wildlife at Jurong
Bird Park. We would definitely be dead excited and look forward to a
unique learning experience like this.



invaluable = very
valuable
up-close = very
close, in contact with
Alternatively, we could also consider getting involved in a
Clean and Green project. This would remind us not to take our clean
and green neighbourhood for granted. Apart from cleaning up our
classrooms, corridors, and toilets, we can take a step further by
joining the National Parks (NParks) in beach cleaning efforts and
perhaps to even clean up the new park connectors that surround
our school. We could also interview the cleaners to learn about the
hardships they face as they go about their daily routine to ensure our
neighbourhood is tidy and clean. This could even double up as our
Values-In-Action (VIA) project. In addition, I would propose that we
organise a project that reaches out to the under-privileged of our
society. We need not look very far to realise that there are many
elderly in homes who need the company and love of the community.
As responsible citizens, we can organise trips to visit them, interact
with them, use our talents to perform for them, and, above all, be
their pillars of strength. This would allow us to become shining
examples as caring warriors of the community.

Use Additionally or
Alternatively to start
off a paragraph for
Other points of your
own.

Use perhaps. Dont
use maybe! A lot of
students use maybe
in writing.
Maybe is more useful
in oral communication.
Use perhaps in your
writing.

go about = to do
something/ carry out

double up = kill two
birds with one stone
(pri school idiom)

, above all, : show
overall importance of
something and serves
to persuade listener/
reader.

Summing up my speech, I hope that you would kindly
consider the suggestions that I have put forth for the benefit of our
students and the school at large. The community deserves
contribution from committed and responsible citizens and I hope that,
with the ideas mentioned, we, Serangoon secondary students, can
truly serve and build our community.
(shows positive enthusiasm and closure)
Very polite tone in
conclusion.
have put forth:
have mentioned.
(Vary: dont always use
mentioned)

Note to 3I7 students:
Ive enhanced Sajeevs well-thought-out ideas to keep them clear and succinct. The model
above serves as a guide for us to understand:
(1) The Points and method for Elaboration needed to keep the suggestions CLEAR and
easily UNDERSTOOD.

(2) Good LANGUAGE USE (underlined bold words) that would help you do better in
scoring Language Marks (20 marks)

(3) You may have your own style and flavour of writing. However, do note that the bold
words will help you achieve writing with an appropriate tone that can convince.