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Oscar Herrera
Pro: Voorhis
English 28, Section # 3223
03/30/2014
Exercise # 4

Thesis 1: I think everyone should be required to purchase health care.

Topic Sentence 1: Having healthcare can prevent many illnesses from reaching a point of no
return if its detected at an early stage.
Topic Sentence 2: Having healthcare means everyone gets regular check-ups.
Concrete detail 1a: Beneficiaries will be able to have a Family Doctor that can be seen by them
for certain small illness.
Concrete Detail 1b: A key factor to overcoming many deadly diseases is to catch them when they
are in the infancy stages; indeed early diagnostics can greatly improve the overall survival rate
from some serious diseases like Cancer, Diabetes, and Heart diseases among many more.
Concrete Detail 2a: The poorest and richest will now equally have a chance to live a longer
healthier life.
Concrete Detail 2b: Making healthcare affordable on income can make it affordable for
everyone.
Commentary 1a: Making Healthcare mandatory might be impossible for some living on an
income below national levels can make be impossible for some to afford.
Commentary 2a: With this in mind politicians will need to keep State and Federal funded
programs like medical and medi-care available for those who just cannot afford it.

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Commentary 1b: All of us would like to be in the best health condition possible no one wants to
be sick or feeling ill. As a result of a familys limited income; it might make it impossible to see
a doctor on a regular basis.
Commentary 2b: Having Healthcare gives everyone a chance to have regular checkups and to
reduce the chances of mortality by catching a serious illness early on.
Commentary 1a: Making Healthcare mandatory might be easier said than done because many
families just wont be able to afford it but just like car registration fees and mandatory auto
insurance. It works best in the long run for everyone.
Commentary 2a: The poorest and richest of people will have an equal chance to visit a doctor
even if they are not feeling ill routine check-ups many times catch diseases that appear with no
specific symptoms but are caught by blood work. Many cancer battles are won if caught and
dealt with in their first stages of forming.
Commentary 1b: Not seeing a doctor routinely can have many worse consequences, like the loss
of life.
Commentary 2b: Additionally, requiring healthcare for everyone can save countless lives every
day.
Transition 1: Along with reducing the loss of lives every day, mandatory healthcare requirement
will give many people and families a chance to have loved ones with them for a longer time if
they are healthier.
Transition 2: Besides reducing the annual fatality rate from preventive illnesses, healthcare will
allow many families to have their father, mother, sister, brother, friend or loved one by their side.
Early detection in some serious diseases give people a better chance to fight off the disease or
prolonged death that otherwise would have been the end of their loved one; as a result of their

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disease being too far advanced to be treated successfully. Healthcare will save many lives in the
long run.

I think everyone should be required to purchase health care.