SERANGOON

STARS ESSAY PUBLICATION

2014

Serangoon Secondary School

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HOW TO USE THE SR StaRs ESSAY PUBLICATION
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Observe the way the writers structure their essays, develop interesting plots and hold the readers
interest throughout the essay or story. Notice how they use appropriate vocabulary, adjectives and
adverbs, humour, dialogues and other writing techniques. Do not memorise the essays, as you
may reproduce an essay that does not actually answer the question concerned, even if the topic
may appear similar. Most importantly, continue to READ good articles and PRACTISE planning
and writing essays in the time you have left before your next English Language exam. All the best!

Mr Richard Chia
Vice-Principal
Serangoon Secondary School

Contents
1

1SD2

Tan Chee Leng

Describe a time when you were proud of an achievement

1SD2

Rhea Sadasivan

A fun and meaningful event that I took part in

1SD3

Jean Ira

Planning an outing to the zoo

1SD4

Christine Audrey A. Bautista Class outing to river safari

1SD4

Leonard Low Hong Hin

Informal letter: plans for a june holiday class outing

1SD4

Toh Jiaxin

Class outing to river safari

1SD6

Danica Abuan

Write about an occasion when it was necessary to tell the truth whatever the consequences.

1SD6

Melinie Jayne Chistopher

A letter on a group outing

1SD7

Vickneswari d/oThamil
Chelvam

A time when I felt proud of myself

10

1SD7

Shahid

Write about a time when you felt proud of yourself

11

2H2

Lee Zi Rui

The Internet is a blessing to people. What are your views?

12

2H4

Ammar

Write about some of the things which make you feel proud of your country.

13

2H4

Ammar

Should we build a swimming pool?

14

2H6

Desiree Teo

Allocation of new room in community club

15

2H6

Sree Krishna Surya

Praharshitha Tallapragada

Allocation of the new room

16

2H7

Jefrey Lam

Feedback on the use of the new room

17

3I1

Nicole Kanyarat

An account of a visit to Universal Studios Singapore with my best friend.

18

3I1

Viknesh Sigamani

An informal letter to a cousin sharing your experiences participating in a talent search

competition SERANGOON STARS 2014

19

3I4

Raziq Hazim B Husin

Close monitoring of teenagers activity on the internet can help to reduce cybercrimes.
How far do you agree with this statement?

20

3I6

Rishika Pundrik

It is difficult to strike a balance between school and personal life? Do you agree?

21

3I6

TANG JIA EN

Speech: Get confident

22

3I7

Deemithra

Recommendation of effective communication workshops

23

3I7

Sumedha Pundrik

To be successful, hard work is more important than talent. Do you agree?

24

3I7

Lee Yan Yee

Get a boost for your speaking and listening skills

25

4N1

Jared Lim Jun Ze

Functional writing - writing a letter of job application

26

4N1

Justin Ng Liang Kiat

Functional writing - letter of application

27

4N2

Nafisah bte Jumat

It is entirely up to me to decide my future. Do you agree?

28

4N2

Angel Png Chin Wen

Speech: Nominating a schoolmate as head prefect

30

4N2

Nur Aqilah bte Muzini

I knew it was the right thing to do. Write about what happened when you had to make a
difficult decision which pleased some people and upset others.

31

4N3

Cynthia Jean

Speech: Annual election for head prefect

32

4N3

Nur Fatimah

I knew it was the right thing to do. Write about what happened when you had to make a
difficult decision which pleased some people and upset others.

33

4N4

Jared Goh

Report on activities organized by Public Utilities Board

34

4N4

Jirakit

What do you consider to be the most significant change in your life. How has this change
helped you in your personal growth?

35

4N5

Charmaine Goh Shi Min

Proposal for promoting June holidays activities for students to encourage participation in
conservation programmes

36

4N6

Ethan Liu

Should young people take care of their parents when they are old?

38

4N6

Jini Teo

What do you consider to be the most significant change in your life? How has this change
helped you in your personal growth?

40

4N6

NG GUO HAO

Should children take care of their parents when they are old?

42

4N7

Czaryna Kaye Mendoza

Clemente

Character development is the most important aspect of education in this modern society.
Do you agree?

43

4N7

Yang Nanyang

Character development is the most important aspect of education in this modern society.
Do you agree?

44

5E1

Lee Zhi Wei

Character development is the most important aspect of education in this modern society.
Do you agree?

45

5E2

Beverly Aw

What do you consider to be the most significant change in your life. How has this change
helped you in your personal growth?

1SD2

Tan Chee Leng

Describe a time when you were proud of an achievement

My friend, Kelly and I, were the only ones from our class on the running track. We
were running for our class and we were in the second place. In the first place was a
girl from another class. She could run so fast that we could not catch up with her. We
were perspiring a lot as we had run quite a long distance. It was the school sports day
and our Physical Education teacher had chosen 6 girls from our class to take part in
this competition. Kelly and I were two of the six, there were three others still trailing trailing:
at the back, trying as hard as they could to catch up like how Kelly and I were trying left behind
desperately to catch up with the girl in the pole position.
Kelly and I communicated via hand signals to speed up so that we could catch up with
the girl ahead of us. We sped up a little as we wanted to leave some energy for the
last dash. Finally, the girl who was leading slowed down to a grinding halt as she was grinding halt:
already out of breath. Kelly and I were both in the first place and our running pace were an abrupt stop
the same. We used all our energy and sped up even faster as we were reaching the
finishing line. The teachers at the finishing line were all encouraging us to not give up
intense: exciting
as we were already reaching the end of the intense race.
Finally, Kelly and I reached the finishing line. Surprisingly, both of us came in at the
same time. So, both of us were in the first place. The girl from the first class came in
second and one of our classmates came in third. The teachers at the finishing line
passed us some cold drinks and tissues to cool ourselves down.
When all the competitors had arrived, we had to shake hands and say thank you to
one another as a sign of sportsmanship. Then it was time for the trophies to be given
out. The teacher announced Kellys and my name over the microphone and we stood
proudly at the platform where our school principal gave us our trophies and shook our
hands, congratulating us.
After the prizes were given out we headed back to school. When we reached our
classroom, everyone was talking about the race and we were all very happy because our
class had won the first place in the level. Our form teacher gave out some refreshments
and settled us down. Finally, our form teacher praised the six girls, including Kelly and
me. We were allowed to enjoy more snacks as rewards.
When our form teacher released the whole class, we rushed home to tell our parents
the good news. I proudly showed my parents the trophy that I had won. They were all
very proud and elated. I was very proud and I found the event very memorable and elated:
enjoyable as I got to learn more about sportsmanship and have fun and exercise at the very happy
same time.
Teachers Comment
Good vocabulary use makes the excitement of the race palpable: it could be readily seen, heard, sensed
and felt because of the language that is used to create the atmosphere. Chee Leng also addressed her
emotions before, during and after the race. Good effort.

1SD2

Rhea Sadasivan

A fun and meaningful event that I took part in

Finally, the day arrived! I was so excited for this day. It was the school event that my
friends and I had signed up for. It was the car washing event. My friends and I thought
that we should sign up for this school event because it sounded really exciting. This
event was held to raise funds for the school.
When I reached my school, no one was there at all. It was quiet like a graveyard. I
was way too excited for this event. I quickly went over to the area where the car wash
was going to being held. I saw all my friends waiting for me. The teacher-in-charge
of this event was telling us about how we can wash a car properly. Soon, we started
washing cars that were already there.

quiet like a
graveyard:
to describe
extreme quietness

One by one, cars kept coming in. There was a meet-the-parents session going on at
the same time. Soon, I felt really very exhausted. Washing the cars was not as easy
as I thought. My friend took a hose and started spraying water at me. I was drenched
from head to toe. The teacher-in-charge saw us fooling around and reprimanded us,
telling us that we did not have much time left. It was fun washing the cars but, at the
same time, tiring too.
Time just flew by ever so quickly. Two hours were over. The number of cars coming in
started to decrease. In exahastion, all of us heaved a sigh of relief. I was happy that
this car event was finally over! The teacher-in-charge applauded us for our hard work.
Parents also wrote in good feedback on how clean their cars were after the car wash.

heaved a sigh
of relief: To
suddenly feel very
happy because
something
It was indeed a fun experience! I have learnt that washing cars was not a piece of cake unpleasant has
and that sheer determination is important for anyone to achieve their goals.
not happened or
has happened.
sheer: absolute

Teachers Comments
Good use of some phrases like heaved a sigh of relief and words like applauded which gave a
richness to the text that simpler words just cannot. In addition, idiomatic phrase such as quiet as a
graveyard was used as a suitable description of the surroundings. Good effort made in recounting
an event.

1SD3

Jean Ira

Planning an outing to the zoo

Blk 397 Hougang Ave 3
Singapore 530397
#06-241
30 May 2014
Dear Aunt Jane
How are you? Are you doing well? How are Amin and Andy? Are they doing well
in their studies? I miss them very much! By the way, I am writing to suggest an
outing as a birthday treat for Amin and Andy at the zoo for Jungle Breakfast
with wild life.
We can meet at the zoo on 5 June 2014 which is a day before their birthday.
The visit will take about 1 hour and 30 minutes. See? Its worth it. I know Amin
and Andy have not had the experience of having a breakfast with an orang
utan, right? This is an award-winning breakfast programme, appropriately set
at the zoos timber lodge inspired by Ah Meng Restaurant which promises inspired by:
a truly eye-opening experience. The breakfast includes international and local derived from
favourites, tropical fruits and juices and plenty of fresh air and greenery. The
orang utan family will make a spectacular entrance! Isnt that amazing?
eye-opening:
Amin and Andy are surely going to be pleased to go there as I know they love
orang utans! They even have a collection of stuffed toys right? They will also get
an opportunity to learn more about each and every member of the wild forest
family. Believe or not, you can even have a family photo with the charming apes!

refreshing and
unforgettable
Appropriate and
good use of tone
for the context

I really hope that you would come for this outing. The outing can also serve as
a family reunion! Isnt that great? I look forward to seeing you! Bye!
Best regards
Jean Ira
Teachers Comments:
This informal letter has fulfilled the task requirements clearly with sufficient elaboration. The tone set
out by the student is inviting and persuasive, meeting the objectives of wrting with an appropriate
purpose and awareness of context and audience.

1SD4

Christine Audrey A. Bautista

Class outing to river safari

Blk 200 Hougang Avenue 9
#07-70
Singapore 330 200
8 May 2014
Dear John
Hi! How are you? I hope that you are doing well in your studies. I am writing this letter to
share with you more about an outing that I have planned for the coming June holidays.
As you know, the June holidays are round the corner and I think that it will be a great
opportunity for us to meet up with our ex-classmates. I have decided on the newly
opened River Safari as the venue for our outing because most of us are nature
enthusiasts. We can meet on Wednesday, 15th of June 2014, at 9 am. It would be
good for us to meet at Ang Mo Kio Bus Interchange and, from there, we can board the
bus 138 together.
We must ensure that we are hydrated well by drinking lots of water. All of us should
wear a comfortable attire as we will be on foot most of the time. Bring along your on foot:
sunglasses, sunblock lotion to protect yourself from the suns rays. If it rains, bring walking
along your umbrella or poncho. Remember not to share your food with the animals! It
is harmful to feed the animals and we should avoid doing so.
The first attraction that we could explore during the outing is the Amazon Flooded
Forest aquarium. We can take in the beautiful scenery of the different kinds of fishes take in:
and aquatic animals in the aquarium. We could also take pictures of ourselves with to absorb and
the fishes inside. Im sure we will be able to share our thoughts and opinions with our appreciate
friends on the various fishes found in the aquarium.
The second attraction that we could explore is the Amazon River Quest boat ride. We
can admire the beautiful scenery surrounding us while we are on a boat. We could also
catch a glimpse of different kinds of animals, including some endangered species catch a glimpse:
while we are on the boat. It would also be a perfect opportunity for us to chit-chat and get to see/ catch
catch up with our classmates. While having fun, we should be prepared to get wet at sight of
the Amazon River Quest boat ride!
I hope that you are just as excited as I am. Do join us! I look forward to hearing your
opinion about the outing. I am sure that we will have a whale of a time there! See you!
Bye.
Regards
Christine
Teachers Comments:
Christine has written a letter that is clear and succinct. Intended to persuade the reader, she skilfully some
words appropriately to her advantage. In addition, her letter is focused on the requirements of the question
to convince her friend of the clear advantages of her selection of the place of visit. Overall, she has shown
full awareness of the purpose, audience and context of the question to fulfil the task well.

1SD4

Leonard Low Hong Hin

Informal letter: Plans for a june holiday class outing

Block 336C, Hougang Avenue 9
#18-882
Singapore 530965
15 May 2014
Dear John,
I hope this letter finds you well. I have planned an outing that might be of interest to
you as the June holidays are fast approaching. Not long ago, a newly established place
which we could visit captured my attention and Im glad to share this with you. I do hope
that all of our classmates will join us.

This effective intro

briefly includes
the main aim and
purpose as stated
in the question.

This new attraction, The River Safari, has a great diversity of wildlife species. There
are various activities which would surely beckon us to try them out. The approaching beckon: to lure,
holidays would certainly serve as a great opportunity for our class to catch up with one entice someone
another and to strengthen friendships.
I do know that some of us are nature enthusiasts and Im sure most of us would not
mind experiencing the unique environment and surroundings. The brushing of leaves,
awe-inspiring animals and wildlife will surely enchant and keep us excited. What do
you think?
The price of the tickets is affordable with an on-going promotion for bulk ticket
purchases; we could grab this perfect opportunity to organise our class outing. The
River Safari opens its doors at 9am and closes at 6pm. The quickest way to get to there
is to ride the MRT, taking the circle line, alighting at Ang Mo Kio station and transfer to
a bus service number 138 that takes us directly to the attraction.
There are several choices of attractions that we could consider visiting. Since we
would probably have insufficient time to experience all of them, picking two will be
most appropriate. Four popular attractions include the Amazon River Quest boat ride,
Giant Panda Forest, Rivers of the World Strolls and the Amazon Flooded Forest
Aquarium.

bulk: bundled,
with a number of
something
takes us:
transports you to
somewhere else.
Note:
(It is wrong to use
bring us there)

I would pick Amazon River Quest boat ride and Giant Panda Forest exhibit as they
offer unique boat-riding experience and eye-catching pandas that would probably
enthrall everyone. I am sure that you have many friends, right, John? Bring them along enthrall: to
at your own freewill, more so the nature lovers.
captivate and
charm people
We can take this discussion further. It would be nice to hear your thoughts about
what Ive suggested thus far. Ultimately, we should make decisions based on what take this
is good for the majority of our classmates! I am hopeful that we can make the most discussion
suitable choice from the many activities and options available. May we enjoy our time
together and relish the precious memories and valuable moments that we await us.
further: talk more
about something
Do not forget to reply me. Hear from you soon.
relish: appreciate
Best regards,
something with
Leonard Low
pleasure and
Class 6A (2013)
enjoyment
Teachers Comments:
Leonard has written an effective personal/ informal letter to bring his suggestions across to his friend (or
the reader) persuasively with the use of good choice of words, register, and tone. Taking on the role of the
friend of Leonard, one can certainly identify a sense of anticipation and excitement that run through the
content when reading the letter. Ideas are presented succinctly, to the point, and the reminder to plan for a
meaningful class outing experience was cleverly mentioned in the conclusion which does not harshly force
nor insist on the ideas that were suggested. This is indeed a good model with words/ phrases that can be
considered for other contexts of informal letter.
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1SD4

Toh Jiaxin

Class outing to river safari

Blk 556 Hougang Avenue 7
#07-701
901225

Dear John,

The June holidays are approaching. I would like to plan an outing with our friends as
we have not met for a really long time. We will be going to the River Safari for our
excursion. It is really easy to get there and there will be two attractions I am sure that,
like me, you would surely be keen to explore.
To get to the River Safari, we would just need to take Bus 138 from Ang Mo Kio bus
interchange or bus 927 from Choa Chu Kang interchange. Dont forget to bring a water
bottle to keep yourself hydrated and wear comfortable foot wear as we will be walking a
lot. If you do not want to get a sun burn, remember to bring your sunglasses, sunblock
or sunscreen. In case of bad weather, bring along an umbrella or poncho. Sharing of
food with the animals is strictly not allowed.
At River Safari, we will be exploring the Amazon River Quest boat ride and the Amazon
Flooded Forest aquarium exhibit. Be prepared to get wet at the Amazon River Quest
boat ride. It would be really fun to take the Amazon River Quest boat ride with close
friends. We could chat with one another about how life has been while enjoying the
beautiful scenery. We will also get to appreciate the outdoors and see a multitude multitude: a
of different types of plants. The best thing of all is that I will finally get to use my new huge number of
camera to capture the moment. At Amazon flooded forest aquarium exhibit, there something
would be a lot of different fishes. There will be fishes which are colourful, fishes which
are creepy and dangerous, and many more.
I really cannot wait for the June holidays to approach. I have always wanted to do this
for such a long time and now my dream is finally going to come true. Please reply as
soon as possible.
Regards,
Jiaxin
Teachers Comments:
All of the required points were addressed and elaborated sufficiently. The tone is lively and warm. There is
a personalised feel to the way Jia Xin addresses her friends. There is a variety of sentence structures that
make the context and purpose come alive.

1SD6

Danica Abuan

Write about an occasion when it was necessary to tell the truth whatever the
consequences.
Chirp! Chirp! Chirped the birds. I woke up, my eyes half-opened. I tossed and turned
on my bed, still dazed. The sun rays shone through the curtains, the white faint fluffy dazed: distracted
clouds blending nicely with the bright, blue sky. Suddenly, the door busted open and I
was pulled towards the kitchen.
Mary! How long are you going to sleep? my mother scolded me. I remembered that
today, I had a meeting with my best friend. I was already late. I quickly finished my
breakfast and hurriedly dressed myself. I gave my mother a peck on the cheek and left
the house. The soft breeze of the wind brushed through my hair. I had never felt this
comfortable before.
My friend, Sarah, was eagerly begging me, Sarah! Forgive me as I was late... I said sheepish: with
guilt, embarassed
sheepishly.
It is okay, I do not mind. Sarah smiled at me. Sarah and I have been friends for a long
time. She was the only friend I had in my school. No one bothered to befriend me. I was
always in the shadow but when Sarah talked to me, there was light in front of me and I
knew that there was hope that I would have a friend.
Mary! Look! It is so beautiful! I can see the sparkles in her eyes. It was a necklace
with a pendant where you can put a picture inside. I looked at the price and it was very
costly. I did not have the money to buy it. I wanted to give her a necklace so that she will
always remember our friendship. Instantly, a dark thought came from my mind. Sarah
was waiting for me to finish looking around.
Sarah, can you wait outside for a bit? I asked.
Sure, take your time. Sarah replied and left the store. I walked around the shop to
avoid suspicion. I went back to the area where the necklace was. I opened my bag and
took the pendant secretly. I looked around to see if there was someone around me. The
area was clear and I left the store.
I saw Sarah at the distance. She was looking at a cute teddy bear. I was glad that I left
the store without anyone suspecting that I stole the necklace, or so I thought. As I ran
to her, someone gripped my wrist. At that moment, the smallest guilt in my heart grew
big. I knew that I was caught. I called to Sarah. Sarah turned to search for me and she
was shocked with horror. The cashier had a vexed expression. Her eyebrows were
creased together. Sweat started trickling down my cheeks.

or so I thought:
something that
you are mistaken
with

vexed: irritated
Madam, please take out the thing that you stole, she said with a stern voice. The door and annoyed
busted open and Sarah was standing there. I was panic-stricken. I was hesitant but I
took out the necklace. I was so terrified. I explained the whole thing to the both of them. creased: became
wrinkled
Madam, please do not steal next time or I will have to call the police. I asked for
forgiveness and luckily, I was forgiven. Sarah and I rushed out of the store. There was
a tense atmosphere. I looked at Sarah who seemed displeased. I thought that our
friendship was going to shatter at this moment but, miraculously, it did not.
Mary, I do not want to have a friend who steals, she explained.
She hugged me and whispered, It is alright, I will always remember our friendship. But
do not attempt to steal next time! Those words made me burst out to tears. I felt so
regretful. Sarah looked at me with a smile. I wiped off my tears and smiled back.
I have learnt an important lesson. Do not do reckless things that will shatter your
friendship with others.
Teachers Comments
Many vivid descriptions were used, especially in describing thoughts and emotions when the writer was
caught for stealing. It is a simply story that is straight to the point, yet effective and straight forward.
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1SD6

Melinie Jayne Chistopher

A letter on a group outing

Blk 123 Hougang Avenue 2
#09-456
Singapore 530123
8 May 2014
Dear John
How have you been? You have not been attending school for the past two days. Hope
you are fine. Anyway, since you have not been in school, I thought I will write to you
about my plan! I hope to have a class outing during the June holidays! Fun right? Let
me tell you more about it.

Introduction
includes asking
after the other
person before
mentioning the
Guess where we are going to? River Safari! I chose this place as most of us like nature, purpose of letter.
so we can go there for a unique experience. The date and time of this outing will be on Tone is informal
the 15 June 2014 from 10am to 5pm. All of us could meet at Ang Mo Kio train station at too.
9.30am before we board the bus 910 together to go to our destination.
The first activity I chose is the Amazon River Quest Boat Ride. I chose this as it will be
fun and we will get to see the different species of animals. Secondly, we will be going
on a boat. Many people in our class have never been on a boat before. So this will be
a first-time experience for them. Also, we would need to remember to bring an extra set
of clothes as we might get wet during the ride.

Activity with
detailed
elaboration of
reasons.

The next activity I selected is the Rivers of The World Strolls. Sounds fun right? I
chose this as we would get to see the different types of sea creatures. Havent you
been telling me that you have always wanted to see a jelly-fish? This will be a good
experience for you to see it. This stroll will also help us with our June Holiday project
about sea creatures.
Do you like all my ideas? Hope you do! Anyway, remember to bring sunblock to avoid
getting tanned and also an umbrella or a poncho just in case it rains. Hope you would
come for this outing and all the best for your exams! Take care! Bye!
Sincerely
Melinie
Teachers Comments
Elaboration of reasons for each activity is detailed and relevant. The tone used throughout letter is informal,
with the use of conversation markers to create a warm and friendly tone. There is awareness of the purpose
of writing which is to persuade a friend to go along with the ideas proposed, and the audience a close
friend.

1SD7

Vickneswari d/oThamil Chelvam

A time when I felt proud of myself

I was on my bed, reading my diary. My house was quiet and everyone was asleep. I
could hear my clock ticking. I squinted at the tiny words on the page, muttering, I was squinted:
so proud of myself . The unforgettable incident flooded through my mind
tolookwith
theeyespartly
The school bell rang loudly. My friends were all very happy as it was time for dismissal. closed.
Okay class! Remember to do your homework and have a great weekend! Thank you!
my teacher Ms Tay said aloud. We thanked our teacher. It was a good day for the rest
of my friends, but not for me. My teacher had scolded me for something which I did
not do. I tried to explain to the teacher but she stopped me. Adding to that, none of my
friends stood up for me. They did not even console me. I had a bad day. I was already
walking to the bus stop to go home. As I was thinking about what happened on that
thud:
day, I heard a loud thud!
a sound of a
What was that? I asked myself in shock. I turned my head to see what it was. To my heavy blow or fall
horror, I saw an elderly woman on the floor with all her fruits scattered around her! From
her facial expression, I could tell that she was in pain. No one went over to help her. I Vivid description
had learnt that we must help people when they are in need. So, without any hesitation, of scene engages
I rushed to her with my fully-loaded bag. I knelt down to talk to her. She was trying to reader and moves
help herself get up. When I held her hands to assist her, I was astonished to see that the plot along
blood was oozing out from her elbow. I took a second to analyse the situation. She was
rushing to get on her bus! If not, she would have missed it! My eyes widened and my
jaws dropped in astonishment! I immediately fished out my Nokia hand phone from
my bag and dialled 995 with shaky hands. She tried to stop me. But I said to her No
grandma! You are in pain! I cannot let you go like that! . She was groaning in pain.
The ambulance arrived in ten minutes. The paramedics applied first aid and pulled out
the stretcher. While they were doing that, I helped grandma to pick up her fruits and put
it back into the plastic bag. Soon, the paramedics were done with the first aid and took
down my name, school and address, by that time, only three people came to help me
out. The rest of them were watching. People surrounded the area and whispers could
be heard.
Soon, the crowd dispersed after the ambulance left with grandma in it. Once put on
the stretcher, she was unconscious. I thought that she had lost a lot of blood and I was
filled with pity for her. Soon, everything just went back to normal. My bus came in a few
minutes and I left for home. When I reached home, I narrated the story to my parents,
explaining why I was late. When they understood that I helped an elderly woman,
they hugged and kissed me on my cheeks. They said they were touched by the act of
kindness. That compliment made my day! My bad day had turned around! However, I
still could not forget the old grandmas excruciating pain. I still could not believe the excruciating:
drama which unfolded before my eyes. Time flew past. The next day came.
deep and extreme
pain
As per normal, I went to school and for morning assembly the next day. Suddenly, a
teacher called me, Are you Vicknes? Please sit near the stage. I replied and I was unfolded: took
nervous by then. Why are they asking me to go there? Am I going to be punished? I place
questioned myself as I walked near the stage. The morning assembly started.
Pupils! Today I want to tell you something which touched my heart, the principal said.
I knew that it was about me. I smiled brightly as the principal called me up. He praised
me in front of the school! That made my day. It was the first time that I felt this proud of
myself. The feeling I experienced at that moment could not simply be expressed by mere
words. Once I went back to my class, my friends shook my hands and congratulated
me. Well done! they said. I asked my teacher how the principal heard of the news.
She said it was a member of the public who witnessed it and informed the principal. I
elated:
felt elated at that point of time.
very happy/
Memory of that day lingered in my mind for a long time. I learnt that it is true that What overjoyed
goes around, comes around. If you help a person or do good things, good things will
come in search of you.
Teachers Comments
Vicknes has written a narrative essay that is clear and succinct. The plot is engaging. There is clear and vivid
description of the scenes in her narration. She can further improve by using a variety of sentence structures.
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1SD7 Shahid
Write about a time when you felt proud of yourself
I was clearing the things in my bedroom when I found an old newspaper which had
yellowed with age. I read the headlines Boy helped to prevent robbery. After reading
the headlines, I recalled an incident which happened ten years ago.
A golden glow spread across the sky as the sun chased the clouds away. Shadows
of all shapes and sizes could be seen on the ground as the trees lent shade to the
pedestrians walking to and fro. I was on my way to the market with my mother to buy
some groceries.
When we reached our destination, my mother went over to the vegetables section. The
sounds of people bargaining with the vegetable seller were very loud.
While people were busy, a suspicious man walked slowly towards an elderly lady. I
noticed that he was standing too close to the elderly lady. She was so busy browsing
through the vegetables that she was oblivious to her surroundings. The man slowly
put his hand into her handbag and fished out her wallet. It dawned on me that he was
stealing her wallet.
I immediately shouted, That man stole the ladys wallet! Everyone turned and looked
at him. His face turned as white as a sheet of paper. With the wallet in his hands, he
turned and dashed away. I took out my mobile phone from my pocket and called the
police. They arrived within minutes. The pickpocket had been caught by some of the
men who gave chase. They took the wallet from him and returned it to the elderly lady.
The pickpocket was then brought to the police. They apprehended him and brought apprehended:
him into a police car. A policeman came over to me and thanked me for my vigilance. to take into custody
The elderly lady thanked me countless times. I felt very proud of myself that day.
vigilance:
Harry, are you done clearing your bedroom? My mothers voice could be heard. I watchfulness
realised that I had been daydreaming. I will be done soon! I answered my mother.
That incident makes me proud to this day. I continued clearing my things with a grinning
ear to ear.

Teachers Comments:
Appropriate words and phrases were used in describing the emotions and actions of the characters. This
story has clear narrative components and an interesting plot.

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Lee Zi Rui

The Internet is a blessing to people. What are your views?

Today, many people use the Internet for a variety of reasons. They find it convenient, Listing give 3
free and useful. They visit the websites to conduct businesses, chat with friends and examples
play online games. However, users must remember that the Internet is not entirely a
blessing. It has its pros and cons.
Firstly, the Internet is accessible to a wide audience. Students access websites such
as Asknlearn or LEAD.com for their homework and school projects. Research work for
projects is easy with the use of the Internet as information can be obtained quickly. On
the other hand, there are websites which are not suitable for children and teenagers.
These include adult-rated websites on pornography, gambling and violence. Such
disturbing websites, when accessed intentionally or accidentally by children and
youths, can become traumatic experiences for them. Therefore, the Internet is not traumatic- If
entirely safe.
an experience
is traumatic,
Another attraction of the Internet is the availability of entertainment. Many users, young it causes one
and old, relax themselves by listening to music, playing online games and watching severe emotional
videos. The Internet has relieved boredom of many youths and brought much pleasure shock and upset
to them. Unfortunately, an increasingly noticeable number of them become addicted to
the online games on the Internet. These youths are so obsessed with the games that obsessed
they forgo their sleep. Consequently, their academic results and relationships with their - unable to stop
friends and family members suffer greatly. It is important that Internet users make an thinking about
effort to bond more with their peers and families in the real world. Hence, entertainment something; too
interested in
from the Internet must be enjoyed with caution and self-discipline.
something
Lastly, the Internet has many social networks for people to make more friends.
Facebook, Instagram ,Twitter, Whatsapp and Tumblr are well-known. These sites are Simile-like
of great help when people feel lonely or bored as they can just chat with their friends wildfire- If
online. They do not need to be together in a particular location to keep in touch. Many news spreads
close ties are forged through the social networks but many relationships are being like wildfire, it
abused too. Cyberbullying has led to suicides of innocent victims. Personal information quickly affects or
can spread like wildfire online. Bank accounts can be hacked and lives are ruined by becomes known
rumours that became viral on the Internet. Thus social networks are not always a boon by more and more
people
but a bane too.
In conclusion, I believe that the Internet has its advantages and disadvantages. People boon- something
must use it correctly and wisely so that it is a blessing and not a curse in their daily that is very helpful
and improves the
lives.
quality of life
bane- a cause of
continuous trouble
or unhappiness
Teachers Comments
Zi Rui has presented the pros and cons on the use of the Internet convincingly. The essay is well organised
each paragraph contains a topic sentence, followed by two sides of the issue concerned and a suitable
link to conclude the paragraph. Good range of connectors used which adds to the coherence of the essay.

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2H4 Ammar
Write about some of the things which make you feel proud of your country.
There are many things that make me feel proud of my country, Singapore. Singapore
is home to many races and various religious and cultural groups who live in harmony.
The greenery makes me feel proud. The aroma from the flowers makes me rejuvenated.
The flowers remind me of the beautiful paradise. The rose especially makes me think of
the feelings of the heart of the people I love. The green trees are the source of energy
for everyone. The green trees provide us air to breathe. The fruits from trees also
remind me that I was the one who planted the tree. That is why greenery makes me
feel proud of my country.
Tourist attractions like the Singapore Flyer, the Merlion and especially Marina Bay
Sands. The Singapore Flyer is a wheel that turns around and is humongous. The
sightings from the Singapore Flyer itself are beautiful. The Merlion the shows people
that Singapore is a country with pride and the ability to succeed. The Marina Bay Sands
is the largest and most number of tourist attractions. It is a building with a huge ship on
it. It makes me proud that people from all around the world visits Singapore.

aroma: a
distinctive
pleasant smell
rejuvenated:
make (someone)
feel better.

The last thing that makes me proud of my country is the National Day celebration.
Everyone is hooked on it for a day. It makes me feel that everyone is proud of their
country and wants to celebrate it.
The National Day Parade consists of marching, jet planes, flying, parachutists and
many more. The marching is from the band, the army, SCDF, police and tanks. Besides
marching, jet planes are the best. There will be a smoked flag of Singapore and the jet
planes will fly through it.
Parachutists are the most enjoyable to watch. Four parachutists will jump down a
helicopter and will pull their parachute when they are reaching the ground. There will
be camera on one of the parachutists and we will be able to watch the parachutists
having to reach the ground in a safe but fun way.
This is why I am proud of my country.

Teachers Comments
Ammar was able to present his points systematically. He would score higher if he included more sophisticated
words to replace words such as fun as these words generally do not show the depth of the feelings

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2H4 Ammar
Block 919 Hougang Avenue 4
#03 451
Singapore 530919
8 May 2014
The Principal
11 Upper Serangoon View
Singapore 119311
Dear Mr Singh
Should we build a swimming pool?
I am Ammar Hammani from class 2H4, President of the Prefectorial Board. I heard the
news about the proposing to build an indoor swimming pool within the school. I would
like to express my opinion that I agree on the construction of the indoor swimming pool.
I agree on the construction of the indoor swimming pool because students can stay
fit. Students will not get sick easily as they are healthy and are active. For example,
students will be exposed to more activities instead of merely following a regimented regimented: very
routine that they do in the school gym during their Physical Education (P.E.) lessons. strictly organized
or controlled
Hence, an indoor swimming pool should be constructed.
Another reason is that students will not need to go to a public swimming pool to practise
for a swimming competition. It will be more convenient for students to go to the one
in the school than a public swimming pool. Students do not need to pay for a ticket at
the school as the students can save money when they need the money anytime. For
example, students can swim anytime in the school as the public swimming pool only
opens for two to three days only. Public swimming pools do not open for the whole day
but a school does. Therefore, an indoor swimming pool should be constructed in the
school.
Students who do not wish for an indoor swimming pool can be understood as they
seldom swim in school. The students may not like to swim and disagree with the
construction of the swimming pool. For example, some students may think that it is a
waste of money to construct an indoor swimming pool. Hence, the students disagree
on the construction of the swimming pool.
While it is true that not many students swim in the school, students will love to swim
if they try it for their PE lessons. If swimming is part of P.E. lessons, students who do
not usually swim can now learn how to swim. As the students grow to love swimming
during their P.E. lessons, they will begin to take the initiative to swim in their free time,
thus contributing to a healthier lifestyle. Hence, students who do not swim will continue
swimming.
In conclusion, I think that the indoor swimming pool should be constructed. This would
benefit more students and encourage them to swim as the students will be active and
not get sick easily. Swimming will help them stay fit and healthy. Teachers are also
able to swim and students can bond with their teachers. Hence, I think that the indoor
swimming pool should be constructed.
Yours sincerely
Ammar

Teachers Comments
Ammar has demonstrated clear understanding of the requirements. He is able to construct his argument
systematically. He could do better if he could include more sophisticated vocabulary.
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Desiree Teo

Blk 385 Bukit Biru Crescent

#02-381
Singapore 250385
8 May 2014
The Chairman
Bukit Biru Town Council
25 Bukit Biru Crescent
#01-250
Singapore 254025
Dear Sir

Allocation of new room in community club

I am Desiree Teo, a resident living in Bukit Biru Crescent. My purpose of writing to you
is to tell you the benefits of allocating the new room to the Bukit Biru Youth Club.
Firstly, I believe that the Youth Cub will provide a more conducive environment for
youths to revise their work. This will encourage more youths to study as there is an
air-conditioned study room with computers which students can use to look up useful
information. Furthermore, there are also youth leaders in the club whom they can
approach when they in need.
In addition, Youth Leaders would have a venue to organise more useful activities for
the youths. This will increase interest among youths to join the club and prevent them
from loitering in the malls after school. If youths are occupied with engaging activities,
their tendency to wander aimlessly around the neighbourhood after school will reduce
drastically. This would allow students to focus and concentrate better on their studies.
They would also be able to pick up new skills such as social skills and communication
skills. They would get to meet other youths of the same interests as them. This would
also help to widen their social circle, so that they would have more friends to confide in
when they are in need of help.
While it is true that having a womens society would help women of different nationalities
and races to get together, I believe that the adults can find another place to meet up
regularly as they are old enough to travel around while some of the youths may not be
able to. The women can always meet up at a nearby caf and chat over some tea or
lunch.
In addition, having a Youth Club in the community would provide convenience for many
of the residents. Parents would be able to drop their children off at the youth club
without worrying as there would be mature young adults such as the youth leaders to
take care of them. It can also ease the burden of parents who are concerned about ease:
their teenage children.
reduce or lessen
In conclusion, I hope you would take my idea into consideration as the youth club
will benefit both youths and parents. Youths will have a place to study and carry out
activities while parents need not worry about their children.
Yours sincerely
Desiree Teo
Teachers Comments
Desiree has substantiated her points with valid arguments and strong evidence.
Perhaps she can include more sophisticated vocabulary to score higher for the language component.
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Sree Krishna Surya Praharshitha Tallapragada

Blk 296C Bukit Biru

#14-229
Singapore 534296
8 May 2014
The Chairman
Bukit Biru Housing Town Council
Bukit Biru Road 56
Singapore 534056
Dear Sir

Allocation of the new room

I am Sarah Lim, a current resident of Bukit Biru Housing Estate. The Town Council has
informed all residents of its plan to add a one-storey block to the existing community
club. One new room will be allocated to either the Bukit Biru Womens Society or Bukit
Biru Youth club. I am in favour for the Bukit Biru Youth club.
Firstly, the allocation of the new room to the Bukit Biru Youth club will enable youths
to maintain an active lifestyle. There will be opportunities for youths to carry out
activities such as sailing and camping. Here, it will encourage youths to be active
through adventurous activities. Moreover, Youth Leader, Andy Lau, stated that they
could organise more activities for youths. This implies that Youth leaders are given
opportunities to organise activities where they can display leadership skills such as
inculcating a sense of responsibility. Additionally, it will mould them into inspiring inculcating: to fix
leaders. They also have to plan activities such that youths will be enthusiastic to take beliefs or ideas in
part in it. Hence, it promotes an active lifestyle amongst teenagers.
someones mind
, especially by
Secondly, it provides a conducive environment for youths to study. Youths can gather repeating them
at the Youth club to revise their work instead of loitering at shopping malls. Revika d/o often
Sunil, a 15-year-old student, said that an air- conditioned study room with computers
will be ideal for students in the neighbourhood. This means that youth can study and
concentrate better especially during the hot sunny days where they will be perspiring a
lot and will have difficulty focusing.
Some residents believe that Womens Society is a place for social interaction. For
instance, Mrs Tan Kwee Cheng, Chairman of Womens Society stated that it will be
easier for women of different races and nationalities in the neighbourhood to meet
regularly. This shows that it will increase social interaction among women.
Perhaps the room may increase social interaction, however, I believe that allocating the
room to Youth club will increase social interaction more. In addition, youths of different
race, gender, and age can gather and interact with one another. Moreover, it will also
increase family bonds as mothers and children can interact and learn together, as
noted by Mdm Sunita, a mother. It will also forge strong bonds between mother and
daughter or mother and son unlike the Womens Society which is only for females.
Therefore, Youth club can increases the level social interaction among youths.
In conclusion, the Youth club is a boon as it fosters strong ties with the Bukit Biru boon: advantage
community. The advantages of Youth club far outweigh the disadvantages. I hope you
would consider my suggestion about the allocation of new room.
bane:
disadvantage
Yours faithfully
Sarah
Sarah Lim

Teachers Comments
Praharshitha has demonstrated a clear understanding of the questions requirements, as shown in her
elaboration.
To improve, she can consider experimenting with more variety of sentence structures, as well as include
more sophisticated vocabulary.
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Jefrey Lam

Blk 126 Bukit Biru Road

Bukit Biru Housing Estate
#09-117
Singapore 553126
8 May 2014
Chairman
Bukit Biru Town Council
Blk 122 Bukit Biru Rd
#01-067
Singapore 553122
Dear Chairman

Feedback on the use of the new room

I am Jeff Lam, a resident currently living in Bukit Biru Housing Estate. The town council
has urged residents to provide feedback on which group should be given the use of
the new room. Personally, I am in favour of giving the use of the new room to the Bukit
Biru Youth Club.
Firstly, the room can be used as a study room with computers. Students who are looking
for a quiet place to relax and study can make their way to the new room.
Students nowadays are complaining that there is no conducive environment in which
they can study in. Since the closest library is quite far away, this new room would help
youths around the neighbourhood to study as they now have a closer place to study
at. In addition, the computers can give students free internet access for e-learning or
simply just for research. Therefore, the new room can be used to help youths around
the neighbourhood to study.

Purpose of room
is stated clearly.
It is followed
by appropriate
elaboration and
examples.

Secondly, the room can be used for parents and children to interact with each other. A
recent study has shown that parents in Singapore are so busy that they do not spend
enough time interacting with their children. The new room can help promote family time
when parents tutor their children. In addition, the environment of the new room would
be perfect for interaction. Parents can spend time interacting with their children. This
helps strengthen relationships and forge stronger bonds between parent and child. forge: create
Some parents may feel that they can also interact with their child at home.
Some residents feel that the use of the new room should be given to the Bukit Biru
Womens Society. They believe that it encourages women from different races and
religions to meet regularly. This promotes anti-racism as different races of women
understand others.
However, I believe that the priority should still be given to the Youth Club. The Womens
Society can socialise at places less central since they are adults, unlike the youths,
who need a convenient and safe environment to study and interact in. If the room is
dedicated to youths, I believe that it would be beneficial for their academic results since
they now revise together with their peers or family.
In conclusion, I believe that the use of the new room should be given to the Youth Club
as there are better benefits, like having a better environment to study and interact.
Therefore, I feel that the town council should give the use of the new room to the Bukit
Biru Youth Club.
Yours sincerely
Jeff Lam
Teachers Comments
Jefrey has stated his reasons clearly in each paragraph and substantiated them with strong evidence.
A suggestion for improvement is to use a variety of sentence structures, which will help him score higher
marks in the language component.
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Nicole Kanyarat

An account of a visit to Universal Studios Singapore with my best friend.

Recently, I won the Serangoon Stars 2014 talent contest. The reward was a trip for
two to Universal Studios Singapore(USS).
I decided to bring my best friend, Kenny, to share what would be an amazing experience.
We travelled to the Resorts World Sentosa, where USS is located, by MRT. The trip
itself was an enjoyable one, full of anticipation of what Universal Studios has got to
suppress: to hold
offer. We simply could not suppress our excitement.
back or prevent
Resorts World Sentosa is packed with thrilling rides and a dazzling array of leisure from showing (a
attractions offering fascinating experiences. It is the regions first Universal Studios feeling, smile)
theme park that boasts 24 newly designed attractions, not found in any other Universal
dazzling: exciting
Studio in the world .
My best friend Kenny and I visited the Far Far Away theme-zone. We had lots of fun
watching the 3-D movies and thoroughly enjoyed the thrilling rides.
We visited Marine Life Parks magnificent oceanarium. I got to see, touch and interact
with the sea creatures. The multi-sensory experience was indeed out of this world!
multi-sensory:
different senses
It was non-stop amazing entertainment along Festive Walk. We enjoyed the Crane (sight, hearing,
Dance the most. The Crane Dance features pyrotechnics and cleverly choreographed smell and touch)
laser-lights, sounds and water effects. The experience was simply breath taking. I had
an exciting day with my best friend, Kenny. We ended the wonderful day with a dinner breath taking:
at a nearby restaurant before heading home.
causing
amazement
I would definitely share this experience with my other friends and would encourage
them to visit Resorts World Sentosa. It is an enchanting place to go to. With the seven enchanting:
themed zones as well as the Maritime Xperiental Museum, the first in the region that having a magical
celebrates the diversity and richness of Asias maritime history, you will never run out effect
of things to do at Universal Studios. It is as if you are entering a different dimension. I
cannot wait for my next visit to Resorts World Sentosa.

Teachers Comments
Student used a selection of simple and relevant vocabulary based on her experience visiting Universal
Studios Singapore. She scored on task fulfilment effectively through the usage of emotive vocabulary and
varied sentence structures.

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Viknesh Sigamani

An informal letter to a cousin sharing your experiences participating in a talent

search competition SERANGOON STARS 2014
Dear cousin
How are you? I am feeling great! I just had one of the best experiences ever. It was
also a challenging one. I want to share with you the struggles that I went through at
a recent talent search competition called the Serangoon Stars 2014. Have you ever
experienced taking part in a competition? You will know after I share my experience.
The competition was organised by my school, Serangoon Secondary School. Everyone
has the chance to be a star in my school. The talent search competition provides a
showcase:
good opportunity for us to showcase our hidden talents.
display or exhibit
As you would have already known, I am not the kind of person who likes to show something at its
off. I just wanted to share my talent. I hope that is not considered as showing off? I best
showcased my talent in parkour. It is a kind of sport which requires you to move rapidly
through an area, overcoming obstacles by running, jumping, and climbing. Luckily for
me, the judges selected me for the finals. I thought it was easy, but I could see how
good the other participants were. At that moment, I decided to give my best shot.
I practised hard every day after school. I got injured many times. However, I was never
disheartened. My teachers, my parents, my friends also believed in me and never disheartened:
discouraged
gave up on me.
The moment of truth came during the finals. I was scared but I persevered through
the performance routines. I performed the parkour like a possessed person. You
know what I mean. The crowd applaused and the judges liked it. It was breathtaking. I
couldnt believe it when I was announced as the second prize winner.

persevered:
maintained a
purpose in spite of
difficulties

The position was not important. Whats more important is that I did my best and I am
happy that I got the award too. Give it a try, participate in a competition. You can do
it! The best thing that you can do for yourself is to participate in a competition and
overcome your fears. Till we meet again. All the best!
Teachers Comments
An informal letter that gives an apt snapshot of students positive personal experience in a talent search
competition. Appropriate tone and register were used together with simple vocabulary. This reinforces the
informal nature of the letter and at the same time, getting all the relevant points across. Good Effort!

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Raziq Hazim B Husin

Close monitoring of teenagers activity on the internet can help to reduce

cybercrimes. How far do you agree with this statement?
Most teenagers today spend much time browsing the internet, especially so because
of the widespread use of smart phones. Many of them do not think before they post
comments online and are nave and unaware that the world can what they post.
News these days travels very fast and goes viral in a matter of minutes and seconds. goes viral to
Besides, teenagers like to make new friends online and this most of the time leads spread quickly to
to more trouble and even cybercrimes. Now, this is where problems start to manifest many people
themselves.
First of all, parents should pay attention to what their teenager children do online.
For all we know, they might be bullying someone or might be bullied by someone in
cyberspace. Cyberbullying can cause the victim to become depressed. Depression
could result in not eating, sleeping or studying well. This can be bad for teenagers who
at their age must be active and living their lives to the fullest. However all this could be
avoided if parents know what they are doing on the internet. For example, a victim of
cyberbullying may attempt suicide as he could think it is the only way out, but it is not.
Therefore parents should keep a close watch on their teenagers.
Moreover, if a parent is not to check on what his teenage child is doing on the internet,
the teen can take the liberty to do what he pleases. Enforcing rules and restricting
access to websites are some things parents put in place easily. Parents can take
disciplinary action before the situation gets out of hand. Hence parents must remain
vigilant about what teenagers are doing in cyber space.
On the flip side, teenagers might argue that they should have the right to do what
they want on the internet. They could retort that it is not necessary for their parents
to always know what they are doing on the internet. However, not all teenagers are
mature enough to sense what is right and wrong. They might commit cybercrimes and
may not even know that they are doing so. Hence, parents have the duty to always
monitor them
In conclusion, in the cyber world today, more cybercrimes are committed by irresponsible
teenagers, whether it is intended or not. Whatever the case might be, close monitoring
of teenagers activities on the internet can help reduce cybercrimes. This would avoid
problems for youth, their parents and society at large.

Teachers Comment
Raziq has neatly presented arguments for and against his stand. He could consider the use of examples in
support of his arguments and provide more interesting details of cybercrime, the perpetrators and victims.

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Rishika Pundrik

It is difficult to strike a balance between school and personal life? Do you agree?
Students are overloaded with school work, co-curricular activities and other activities
they take part in. They have to juggle their school homework, daily revision and tuition. juggle: manage
Students are so mentally and physically exhausted to the point that it becomes nearly
impossible for them to strike a balance between school and personal life. Todays
generation is very competitive and as time passes, the competition is getting tougher.
In order to make a mark and excel, students have to work unbelievably hard. When
they do that, they have little or no time left for themselves.
Firstly, students have to keep up with their daily school work. Nowadays, students have
a lot of subjects to study and for each subject, they are also assigned quite a lot of work.
If for each subject they take, they were to be assigned that much work, students would
not even have time for their daily revision, let alone, personal life. What is worse is that
for every assignment, they may not be given ample time to finish the task and students ample: sufficient
are then overburdened as they now have to finish all the work in that short period of
time. For instance, I see my own sister, who is taking eight subjects, struggling to finish
her homework. She stays up till the wee hours of the morning to finish her homework
and do a bit of revision. By the time she finishes, it is already past two in the morning.
She barely gets four hours of sleep and then she has to attend school, go home and
do her homework, thus the cycle continues. Due to this, she has little time for herself.
In addition, students have their co-curricular activities (CCA) in school. Some students,
like me, have two CCAs. I am part of the Red Cross Youth and the Debate team in our
school. Every day, I stay back in school for debate training until the school closes at
seven in the evening, and every Friday, I stay back for Red Cross training. By the time
I get home, it is a quarter to eight. I am already exhausted after studying and the days
activities, but I still have to finish my homework, do my daily revision and some work
which I was assigned during my debate training. It is usually around one in the morning
when I turn in. It is such an exhaustive cycle that I do not have enough energy to carry
on the next day. My attention span is shorter and I do not learn anything in school this
way. Many students have training sessions more than once a week and coupled with
homework, it lessens the time for personal matters.
However, critics may argue that if students draw up a timetable, follow it strictly and
manage their time well, they would be able to strike a balance between their school
and personal life. This is not true, as drawing up a timetable would not help to lessen
the workload students have. It might help with time management, but students would
still be stressed as they still have the same amount of work to complete in the time
allocated to them. Following the time-table would ensure quantity but not quality. Thus,
students still have very little personal time left.
Cumulatively, it is difficult to strike a balance between personal and school life as
students have to consider their homework, CCA and other activities. Students are
overly stressed due to all these factors, and may not be able to enjoy more leisurely
activities.

Teachers Comment
This is an interesting piece of writing as the writer has used a variety of examples to support her points.
There has been a great attempt at using more sophisticated vocabulary as well, and the writer has presented
a balanced viewpoint on the issue.

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TANG JIA EN

Speech: Get confident

Good morning Mr. Singh, teachers and fellow students. I am Miyo Tang from 3I6 and
today I would like to tell you about how we can communicate well with confidence.
Speaking and communicating might seem unimportant to you but it is very important for
students to speak well. If you are shy, you wont be able to unleash your full potential, unleash: release/
and without achieving your full potential, you wouldnt know what you can do. You set free
might be a shy person now, but after attending a few of the Listening and Speaking
workshops, I assure you that it would certainly boost your confidence and help you to
overcome your shyness.
Most of us here arent really confident or fond of public speaking, am I right? Well, even
though I am from our English Language Debate Team, I am not always that confident
either. I tend to get really nervous when I go for competitions. So, to get rid of our fear,
we can all attend the Speak with Confidence & Expression workshop! This workshop
will help you to gain confidence and speak in a good manner. Public speaking wont
be a problem anymore! You do not have to be shy anymore, instead you will be able to
step up and express yourself confidently. In addition, for those who are interested and
aspire to be a news broadcaster, this workshop is perfect for you as attending it could aspire: seek
bring you one step closer to your dream. If you are too scared to attend the workshop
alone, you can always ask your friend to come along or you could just approach me as
I would be happy to attend it with you! Dont worry, it will be fun and this workshop will
also boost your confidence at the same time. The price for the workshop is $720, but
it is now at a discounted price of $600. It is extremely worth it because the workshop
not only allows you to speak confidently, but it will also help to improve your English,
enabling you to speak proper English. They even identify and correct individual speech
issues. These workshops are organized by two renowned companies, which is why
its little expensive. However, I wouldnt mind spending my money on something that
is beneficial for me. So, lets all go together and have fun while improving ourselves!
Other than speaking confidently, we also need to listen carefully. Have you ever argued
with a friend just because of a misunderstanding from not listening well enough? Its not
worth it at all, therefore you should attend this How to Listen Effectively workshop. At
times, you may misinterpret signals from others, and this may negatively affect your misinterpret:
relationships Thus, to prevent this, the workshop will teach you how to identify and misunderstand
analyse a speakers tone, so that you know whether someone is upset with you, or
perhaps just plain tired. This workshop will also help you to learn how to respond the
right way so that there wont be any misunderstandings between you and your friends
or family. To make the workshop more fun and exciting, there are many role-plays and
interactive games with the actors from the club! Also, not forgetting that it will help you
improve your English since there is a wide pool of vocabulary provided during this
workshop. I encourage you to go for the workshop! Further details will be given to you
by your form teachers.
If youre not fond of these two workshops I have just mentioned, you can always come
to our CCA room and join us for a great event! My debate team members and I will be
organising a special event just for you. There will be food given and you will get to play
games which will help you overcome your shyness. The games will be very exciting
and you will have to do a mini speech if you lose. But dont worry, there is nothing bad
about giving a speech! You can talk about anything you like and we will all be listening
attentively to you. So join us now! It will be after school today and we wont be charging
you like the other workshops. Come over today and have fun with us, and as the
Chairman of the debate team, I ensure that you will have a wonderful experience. So,
if youre not ready for the workshops yet, you can start slow with us!
Boost your confidence by attending these workshops or our special event! I guarantee
that you will have a wonderful time at any one that you attend, while learning about
useful skills. All the best in gaining confidence and speaking well.
Thank you!
Teachers Comments
The writer has adopted a very bright and enthusiastic tone in persuading others to attend the workshops,
which make this piece enjoyable to read. Original and refreshing ideas in addition to information provided in
the visual and attempt to elaborate has been quite successful.
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3I7 Deemithra
Recommendation of effective communication workshops
Good morning Mr Singh, Mr Chia, teachers and friends. Im Deemithra from class 3I7
and Im also the Chairman of the English Language Debate Team. Communication is
an important part of our lives. It allows us to connect with other people - your friends and
family - but how close-knit our relationships are like with other people also depends on
how effective our communication skill is. Have you ever felt frustrated when no matter
how many times you try repeating an idea to your friend, he or she still does not fully
understand you? We could well attribute this to ineffective speaking skills and I am
here today to share with you how we can overcome this obstacle.

close-knit: tightly
united

attribute this
to: link this to
(mention the
There are various workshops you can attend to improve your communication skills. cause)
One of such workshops is the How to Listen Effectively workshop organised by the
Toastmasters Club of Singapore. If you find that you sometimes misinterpret what misinterpret:
your friends are saying, it could be because of the lack of proper vocabulary or the misunderstand an
inability to identify proper tone through a speech. This workshop aims to improve our issue
listening skills and Im sure that you would find this workshop useful as the tips in this
workshop can come in handy in sharpening our listening skills and help us better come in handy:
understand our teachers during lessons.
to be useful in a
specific situation
Another available option would be the Speak with Confidence and Expression
workshop organised by The Art Voice. Many of us, teenagers, face the issue of fear
of public speaking. Through the workshop, you can gain exposure, confidence and
overcome this of speaking in public to a general audience. Also, you would be able to
enjoy interacting with your friends in the process and learn to pronounce difficult words,
correcting mistakes made in your speech.
Alternatively, you can practise effective communication skills at home with your family
or at school with your teachers and friends. At home, you can share candidly with your
family about your day at school and you can also strengthen your family ties as well!
During lessons, at school, you can arrange for group discussions with your friends
about class or group work. These are just some of the possible activities you can do.

Alternatively:
good linker to
add in more
idea(s), other
than In addition /
However

Before I end my speech, I would like to thank you for your attention. I hope you would take
part in the workshops that I have highlighted. Let us keep in mind how communication candidly: frankly/
is a key role in our lives and how both speaking and listening skills play a significant honestly
part in establishing meaningful relationships with the people close to us.
keep in mind:
Thank You.
good substitute for
remember
establishing:
good substitute for
forming/ starting
Teachers Comment
Deemithra has been able to draw a fine distinction between formal and informal tone and register in speech.
This question, in particular, required the student to deliver a formal speech (in the presence of many unknown
peers in the level- as well as Principal, vice-principal, and teachers. However, at junctures, Deemithra
managed to be persuasive and convincing in presenting facts to peers through examples and language
used. He also includes himself in his bid to convince by using our to refer to himself and audience who
are students like himself. Some words have been used strategically to engage the listener and to convince.
There is a considered effort to achieve buy-in from the audience/ listener.

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Sumedha Pundrik

To be successful, hard work is more important than talent. Do you agree?

People often complain about how certain people always succeed in different fields
of life, be it studies, sports, making friends or just their personal lives because they
are born gifted or talented. People often label these groups of people as special or
pure genius. However, I believe in the exact opposite. People just fail to understand
how much hard work is being put in by the so-called gifted person to actually succeed
in whatever they are doing. People use these labels as an excuse for themselves,
for putting in that extra hour of effort before the test or not training enough for the
race. In my opinion, success comes with sheer hard work, passion, having a clear
understanding of what you are doing and being visionary.
To start off, to reach success, you must be excellent in whatever you do. To reach
that mark of excellence, one must be passionate about it, have a clear understanding
of whatever they are required to do and must be consistent. With that, the person is
preparing to compete with the others. Consistency and being passionate are forms
of hard work which can only be achieved with a goal in mind to be excellent and to
win. For instance, if an individual is weak in Mathematics, he or she should practice
enough, ask questions and seek help when unsure instead of lazing around and being
oblivious to the fact that they are actually weak. This comes with consistency and the oblivious: lacking
passion to do well, despite the fact that they are weak. Again, most people choose to awareness of
ignore this and do not put in the work and effort, but instead, they allow the talented something
ones to overtake them, without even trying to compete.
Moreover, being visionary and self-disciplined are forms of hard work as well. Hard
work does not only refer to studying round the clock, seven days a week. Hard work is
when one is aware and conscious of task requirements and works towards it to achieve
success. Planning ahead and putting in the extra effort is the work of visionary people,
or else known as the gifted people. Not only that, when one is determined to win and
overtake the gifted people, the person would be willing to go to great lengths to do
so and it all starts with self-discipline. If we train ourselves and adjust ourselves to
practising and making each day fruitful, nothing would stop us from achieving success.
Admittedly, there are numerous child-prodigies in this world and they are proven
to be born gifted. But, the number is not great enough. Again, it is not proven that
we cannot overtake them or be as good as them. As aforementioned, with the right
amount of effort, passion, understanding and self-discipline, it would be a piece of cake
to overtake child-prodigies.

Admittedly: as
acknowledged/
confessed

aforementioned:
something that
To conclude, hard work comes in many forms and it is up to the individual if he or is mentioned
she adopts such a lifestyle where they put in extra effort non-stop, every day of their beforehand
lives. Hard work requires the disciplining of oneself, learning to be visionary and setting
your goals right. Compared to hard work, talent is no match. As Albert Einstein said, Beautiful and
Success is 99% hard work and 1% talent. With that, I truly believe that hard work is apt phrase to
the root of success, not talent.
conclude.
Teachers Comment
This is an interesting piece of writing as the writer has used a variety of examples to support her points.
There has been a great attempt at using more sophisticated vocabulary as well, and the writer has presented
a balanced viewpoint on the issue. Discourse markers were used appropriately to transit between ideas.

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Lee Yan Yee

Get a boost for your speaking and listening skills

Good morning Mr Singh, Mr Chia, Mr Chiang, teachers and fellow schoolmates. I am
Lee Yan Yee from 3 Inspiring 7 and I am the chairman of the English Language Debate
Team of our school. I want to thank my teacher, Mr Wong, for the opportunity in letting
me to stand up here to speak to you. Have you ever misunderstood somebodys words
and offended people in the process? Or have you spoken something wrongly and made
a bad impression of yourself? If your answer is yes, do not be discouraged. I was
once like that too. Research from Yale University has shown that 78% of the worlds
teenagers often misunderstood what people said and as much as 95% of them have
issue, of one kind or another, speaking in front of a crowd. Here are some workshops
and activities for us to participate in, thereby boosting our speaking and listening skills.
Firstly, the Toastmasters Club of Singapore is organising a workshop, How to listen
effectively, for people who would like to improve their listening skills. From this
workshop, we will get to learn how to identify ones tone when speaking and analysing
it. By that, we get to respond in an appropriate way without sounding offensive. We
would also get to pick up a handful of new vocabulary from this workshop and improve
our English. Other than that, we will get to role-play and interact with the actors from the
club via games. All the fun enjoyed in just three hours! In three hours, we get to learn
how to speak and interact in a more engaging way.
After learning how to listen, we can learn how to speak correctly and confidently. How
can we do it? We could sign up for the Speak with clarity & rhythm workshop. It is
a 2-day workshop from 9am to 2.30pm and it is instructed by Jessica Seet, a news
broadcaster at Mediacorp Singapore. From this amazing workshop, we will get to pick
up effective speaking skills by using some techniques. For example, we can certainly
learn how to control our facial expression when speaking, becoming aware of our body
language, as well as being careful about our tone. I personally attended this workshop
in the past and it stirred me up, leaving a massive impact, thereby shaping the way I
speak today. I learned how to speak clearly in front of people and, at the same time,
deliver my message in an appropriate way. As a bonus, we get to try out recording in a
professional studio with our newly acquired speaking skills. Fun, effective and useful at
the same time, why not consider it?

Question is asked
to get audience to
tune in to details
and content of
speech more
effectively
stirred: to be
charged with
emotions or
being emotionally
aroused

Other than the above-mentioned ideas, our school recently launched a new programme, Clear and suitable
Stars-In-Conversations. It is a programme in which students take turns to deliver a description that is
speech in front of their peers. Other than speaking, we also get to be an audience part of elboration
and listen to how our peers speak. From this activity, we get to learn how to deliver
a powerful speech and hone the ability to listen closely to others opinions as well.
Subsequently, we also get to learn new knowledge from our friends speeches and this
allows us to apply as role models when it comes to speaking and improving our oral
skills.
In the past few minutes, I have suggested various ways to improve both our listening
and speaking skills. Through the How to listen effectively workshop, Speak with
clarity and rhythm and Stars-in-Conversation workshops, we have some effective
means to enhance our listening and speaking skills by being a proactive participant.
Now, I encourage all of us to participate in the activities mentioned above to boost our
speaking and listening skills. Before I end my speech, remember this - dont be afraid
to talk to people, dont be afraid to listen to people and dont be afraid to speak in front
of a large crowd! Thank you!

Effective use
of repetition
to emphasise
an idea and
to conclude a
speech

Teachers Comment
Clarity and focus on the task requirements make this letter shine and stand out from the rest. There is a
suitable transition of ideas, coupled with the good use of the repetition technique in the last 3 lines. This
serves as a reminder of the importance for us to engage the reader in order to persuade effectively and
purposefully.
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Jared Lim Jun Ze

Functional writing - writing a letter of job application

Dear Miss Sally Lim,

Application for Play Crew

I came across your advertisement on vacancies for Play Crew and I am interested in
the position. I have just completed my N Level and am currently waiting for my results
to be released in December. Thus, I have decided to apply for a part-time job to spend
my time meaningfully.
As I studied Customer Service in Elements of Business Skill (EBS) in my upper
secondary education, I am equipped with the skills and knowledge to interact with
guests. I not only have the confidence in interacting well with people, but also a passion
to serve and interact with children. Thus, I am ready to assist in the front line and guest
service. In addition, I attended a basic first aid Elective Module in March 2014 and I am
a certified first aider. I can also be trusted with the responsibility to ensure the safety of
users of the play pool as well as to maintain orderliness in the pool.
I can work five days a week as stated in my application form and on some Sundays,
as well as on public holidays. I am fully committed to giving my best in performing my
duties and will be a responsible worker if given the post of a Play Crew member. I am
available for an interview any time. I am also contactable at 91234567.
I hope to join the Play Crew and look forward to your favourable reply. Thank you.
Yours sincerely
Jared Lim Jun Ze

Teachers Comments
Jared has fulfilled the requirements of the task and provided relevant additional information in a coherent
manner to present himself as a potential job applicant.

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Justin Ng Liang Kiat

Functional writing - letter of application

Dear Miss Sally Lee
I came across your online advertisement and I would like to apply for the position as a
play crew member.
I am good at interacting with others. Besides having a passion for service, I am very
good with children. I am also a Red Cross cadet in my school. I attended a basic
first aid course in March, this year and have a life-saving certificate as proof of my
achievement.
Although I am only a student, I am sure that I can please the guests at Wildlife Reserves
Singapore with my enthusiasm and sincerity. Also, I feel that this is a meaningful
experience while waiting for my N-level results. Thus, I can start work as soon as
possible.
I hope you would consider my application. I look forward to your favourable reply.
Thank you.

Yours sincerely
Justin

Teachers Comments
Justin has fulfilled the requirements of the task and used a variety of sentence structures to present his
ideas.

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Nafisah bte Jumat

It is entirely up to me to decide my future. Do you agree?

Teenagers these days are given the opportunity to make their own decisions. Rather
than be the decision-makers, parents of the twenty-first century have taken on the role
of advisors to help their teenage children make informed choices. Decisions concerning
their childrens future, like education paths have fallen into the hands of their children.
In short, teenagers are empowered to make most decisions themselves and chart empowered:
their own future. As a teenager, I agree that it is entirely up to me to decide my future. gave control and
power to
Firstly, I have to learn to be responsible. I have the right to make any decision whether
it is negative or positive. Things that I possibly do not want like what career to pursue
should not be forced on me. Advice is helpful but ultimately, giving me the choice to
decide will teach me to take responsibility of my own actions.
Secondly, I will be the one facing the challenges in the future. If I make a wrong decision
now that will affect my future, I must learn to be accountable and not expect anyone
to bear that responsibility. This means that no one has to take the blame for me. I will
have to accept the outcomes of my actions and learn from my mistakes. I have to learn
to face the obstacles and overcome them myself. Thus, it is entirely up to me to decide,
accept the consequences and take charge of my future.

accountable:
responsible for
your decisions
or actions and
expected to
explain them
Finally, no one will be able to pick a perfect path for me that will determine my future. when you are
No one will have the same passion or the personality that I have. They do not know asked
how I feel about certain things. For instance, my passion is in the creative arts but
my parents want me to be a bank accountant. I will bear in mind their preference but
eventually I will have to decide based on my likes and dislikes about what I want to be
when I grow up. I am positively sure that I must be in control because I am living my life.
I admit that making decisions is not as easy as it looks as I have to consider many
factors. Currently, I am facing problems and I am aware of the challenges. I am taking
my GCE N-Level examination this year and I am not ready at all. However, I have
set my goals and taken actions. I know what I want to be, even if my parents are not
convinced. I am sure I will make them proud of me one day. It is because they have
taught me the values and have always been supportive. Thus, I trust that I am able to
make wise decisions which will shape my future.

Teachers Comment
Nafisah makes clear her stance and support it with sound arguments. There is a clear attempt to apply the
PEEL approach. Each paragraph is introduced with a valid main sentence and supporting sentences. More
personal anecdotes can be included to amplify the ideas provided. There is appropriate use of signal words
to guide the reader. Efforts to use a variety of sentence structures are commendable.

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Angel Png Chin Wen

Speech: Nominating a schoolmate as head prefect

Good afternoon, Classmates. The annual election for our schools Head Prefect is here Clear choice
again. Have you thought about who should be elected? Does that person have the made
ability to lead our school forward? Well, I have to say that this years nominees are a
really competitive bunch to choose from. We have Krishnan who is very hardworking
student and Ai Zhen who is a very smart and compassionate student. However, I
strongly believe that Carissa is the one that has the ability to lead our school forward
and I am sure you will agree with me.
First of all, Carissa is a confident communicator. In my opinion, she will be able to
lead us and maintain harmony in times of adversity. It is a really big step forward
because not many people have this ability the ability to speak in front of a huge
crowd so confidently and persuasively. In addition, she has represented our school in
community events that required her to speak on behalf of the school, which she has
proudly delivered. Therefore, she will do us proud and without a doubt, lead us forward
with her confidence.
Secondly, Carissa is a very self-directed learner who has served as class chairperson
in lower secondary. Armed with her leadership experience and her self-directedness,
she is able to take control of the duties she is entrusted with to serve and make
improvements to the school. As she is able to bring out the best in herself and strive
for excellence, she will inspire others to give their best too. We need successful and
inspiring leaders like Carissa. She is one of those who are willing to do their best and
is equipped with the skills and ability to lead. Thus, she is the one who will be able to
lead us forward.

entrusted: given
the responsibility
to do an important
job

Effective
comparison to
highlight Carissas
Last of all, Carissa is also very sociable person, who makes friends easily. Her friendly strength
personality makes it easy for us to talk to her about concerns and problems. Krishnan,
who has a humble personality, is likeable but I do not think he has the friendly disposition
to make people feel comfortable enough to tell him their problems and troubles. Even
though Ai Zhen is highly resourceful and has strong problem-solving skills, we may
not find her approachable and may feel uncomfortable sharing our issues with her.
We need a warm and approachable leader whom people can connect with easily.
Therefore, I strongly encourage all of you to vote for Carissa and elect her as the new
head prefect to lead us forward.
Knowing that we expect more from an exemplary student like Carissa, she has set
high expectations of herself. She expects herself to bring out the best in all of us. She
even has plans for our schools upcoming 85th anniversary. She wants to bring all of
us together and help us recognise that our school is a wonderful place after all. She
wants us to understand the importance of education and to learn to appreciate what
we have. To achieve her goals, she knows a boring speech is not effective. She knows
that students, being teenagers, may resist and will not be inspired easily. She adopts
ways like showing us videos and participating in activities together to bond us. Isnt it
creative? Isnt she amazing? She has spontaneously planned such surprises for us
and this reveals her strong leadership qualities. Thus, we should elect Carissa as the
new head prefect to lead us forward.
You are convinced, arent you? Make up your mind now. With Carissas ability to lead,
her willingness to serve, her approachable personality and interesting plans for our
school, she is the right head prefect for Serangoon Secondary School. Carissa will
bring us forward. Go cast your vote for the one and only Carissa, and make her our
next head prefect!
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Teachers Comment
Angel has effectively used signal words to convey the flow of her ideas. She has clearly expressed her ideas
and provided adequate elaboration to support each point. She is able to develop her essay coherently and
effectively to meet the requirements of the task. Original and convincing additional information effectively
constructed increases her persuasive ability. A range of adjectives is used to enable listeners to fully
understand Carissas strengths.

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Nur Aqilah bte Muzini

I knew it was the right thing to do.

Write about what happened when you had to make a difficult decision which
pleased some people and upset others.
Getting a scholarship is definitely something overwhelming. That one chance can
change someones future. Thus, when I was given the opportunity to study in a university
overseas for free, I was over the moon.
Harvard University, a prestigious university in the United States, was my dream
destination since I was ten. How could I refuse the once in a lifetime offer to go to my
dream university to study? Fully paid education, I might add. Of course I was on cloud
nine when I received the amazing news. Even my parents were elated when they read
the letter. However, not everyone was too pleased when I shared my joy with them.
It was not like Tiffany, my best friend, to become jealous, I hoped. However, she was
like a volcano waiting to erupt when I informed her about my chance. Her response
was definitely something I did not expect. Right there and then, she objected to my
decision to study overseas. Questions were swimming in my head. Why did she not
agree? Was she jealous? Wasnt she my best friend? She was supposed to support
me! She chided me for being selfish, snobbish and abandoning her. I brushed off her
offensive remarks about my wanting to study in Harvard.

prestigious:
admired and
respected by
people

effective use of
simile to show
anger

offensive:
unpleasant and
I was expecting a different reaction from my cousins about my scholarship, but I was insulting
disappointed. Unlike Tiffany, they are my flesh and blood! Should they not feel elated
by the exciting news? I was beyond frustration when only a few people supported me,
so few that I could count on one hand. I decided it was hard trying to please everyone.
My classmates, however, gave me a heart-warming answer. Happy was an
understatement. They supported my decision although I was having second thoughts
by then. I made up my mind. I would seize the opportunity and not let it go to waste.
The only thing in my brains was I hope I have made the right decision as I handed in
my confirmation form.

understatement:
making it seem
less important
than it really is

I knew it was the right thing to do. Now, here I am, sitting in my very own office, writing
novels and achieving my dreams. Indeed, some people were upset by my decision
although I never knew why. I am glad I followed my instincts rather than listened to
people whom I considered important but turned out to stumbling blocks. It might have
taken me ages to make them accept that it was a right decision, but I had never felt
more satisfied and accomplished.

Teachers Comments
Atiqah has aptly used questions to express her feelings for the negative responses from other people and
created a degree of suspense that kept the reader wondering about the reasons for their objections.

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Cynthia Jean

Speech: Annual election for head prefect

Good afternoon fellow Serangoon Stars. My name is Cynthia Jean, your vice-chairman.
As all of you know by now, each year our schools Head prefect is carefully selected.
Well, that time of the year has arrived and it is up to you to choose the brightest and
most persevering Head Prefect to lead our school. So, I am here today to encourage persevering
continuing with
each and every one of you seated here to vote for Ai Zhen.
something even
My choice remains unwavering for Ai Zhen as she meets all the criteria. She is a though it is difficult
selfless community volunteer and she is relentless in giving back to the society. Apart
from being the humble person that she is, she is also diligent and organised in her unwavering
studies as well. She does not procrastinate or make a fuss when faced with challenges. Very firm in
Instead she pushes forward, testing her own limits at all times. Topping her class in ones opinion or
every subject, she is an-round role model. All the teachers have nothing but excellent decision
comments about her.
The main reason why, in my opinion, Ai Zhen is the best candidate is that she is highly
resourceful and excels in problem solving. Ai Zhen always gives us results and she
gets work done, whereas for Carrisa, she is a confident and charming young women
but she does not put in the extra hours like Ai Zhen. She depends on her charismatic charismatic
(of) having great
charm to rally her friends to work together.
charm or appeal
In fact, I was torn between choosing Krishnan or Ai Zhen as Krishnan is responsible to others
and he has proven himself as the leader of our school Band. What made AI Zhen stand
out though was the fact that she exemplifies what our school motto is all about Seek,
Strive, Serve. She seeks knowledge to diversify her understanding in various situations
to solve problems. She constantly strives for perfection and excellence in whatever
she takes on. She serves us with her unwavering values and put into actions what she
believes in!
I had a small conversation with her a few moments ago and this is what she said. I
may not be the most sociable candidate. Standing alongside Carrisa and Krishnan is
a huge honour as they have always been the most popular and reputable students.
However, if I am elected as the Head Prefect, I will take into consideration each and
everyones opinion and will definitely make studying in Serangoon Secondary School
a much more enriching experience by broadening our mind-sets and taking the stress
out of studying. Since homework and revision can be rather stressful, she will propose
to our Principal to set aside a room for the students recreation.

reputable
Respected and
trusted by most
people

Dont you think she is perfect for the role of a Head Prefect? I am absolutely rooting for
her! I hope I have given each and every one of you enough reasons to make her your
Head Prefect! I am sure she will turn Serangoon Secondary School into a place where
parents would want their children to attend. Thank you!
Teachers Comment
Cynthia presented her points in a very organised and clear manner. Each paragraph adopted the P-E-E-L
structure precisely to bring each argument across in an easily understood manner. Her use of language
shows strong persuasive techniques and also a varied range of vocabulary.
Another reason why this speech stands out is that Cynthia has amplified the points using her own words.

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Nur Fatimah

I knew it was the right thing to do.

Write about what happened when you had to make a difficult decision which
pleased some people and upset others.
I jolted out of my bed. Looking around my now familiar room with wide eyes. I sighed,
knowing it was just a bad dream. Those days were still in my head, bringing me back
to how it all started. My name is Tanya Summers and I am eighteen years old. I moved
to California recently because of what had happened. It felt like it was just yesterday.
Ring! The school bell rang, indicating the start of the school day. I was standing at
the entrance of my new school, Roseville High. I was from New York and had recently
come here because of my dads job. My thoughts were broken by a girl with red hair
and blue eyes staring into mine with a big smile on her face. She started blabbering blabbering:
and I could not catch what she was saying. All I heard were new student, office and to talk foolishly or
pretty. I looked up and realised that we were outside the office. I guess she was of excessively
much help.
I went to the counter and saw a lady with grey hair and glasses. She looked up at me
and asked for my name which I gladly gave. Then, she gave me all the necessary items
and rushed me to my class. Soon, I stood in front of my new class and all eyes were
on me. I wanted to hide from the attention when the same redhead pushed me to the
front. The teacher was waiting for my introduction. I cleared my throat and looked up at
the questioning glances. Hi! My name is Tanya Summers and I am from New York. I
then scurried to my desk to see a very good looking guy staring at me.
scurried:
To move quickly
His name was Aiden and the redhead that spoke to me was his sister, Brittany. I got with short steps
along with Brittany very well and school was not that bad. However, I was very annoyed
whenever Aiden threatened any guy who talked to me. It was so unnecessary because
this was my life and I was pretty sure I was not five years old. Four months flew by and
everything was fine until Aiden decided to pick a fight with the guy who put a rose in my
locker. I pulled Aiden off my admirer with the help from other students and saw Aidens
bloodshot eyes. I looked at him in the eye and told him to calm down. He dragged me
to a janitors closet and said, I love you.
I could not control my reactions. I opened my eyes wide and stared at him with my jaw
hanging. To say I was shocked would be an understatement. Who would have guessed
that Aiden liked me? He was jealous all along and I could not help but chuckled. He
became furious, thinking that I thought he was lying. I quickly pulled him close and said
that I like him too. I meant who would not? He grinned widely and told me to leave
with him to California. I left the closet in a rush to find Brittany. I told her everything and
she warned me not to go. Everyone knew that Aiden was really hot-tempered and they
were afraid he would hit me if he gets too angry.
You would have guessed what I did. I went to California with Aiden. He was overly
excited but my friends and especially my parents were really disappointed in me. They
felt scared for me. In the end, my feelings were what mattered the most and I was never
going to change that. I left a year ago and no one from home talked to me since. It hurt
a lot but I am happy to be with Aiden. I convinced him to go to a psychiatrist to manage
his anger issues. He did and he is doing better. I lost the love of my friends and family
just for Aiden. In the end, I knew it was the right thing to do.

understatement
To say that
something is less
important than it
really is
grinned:
To smile and
show the teeth
especially in
amusement or
laughter

Teachers Comment:
Fatimah is a strong and creative writer. This piece demonstrates her skills in using words to help the readers
paint mental pictures in their heads as she expressed the emotions and details of the story by narrating with
a wide range of vocabulary.
The plot was kept simple and the use of the given phrase right at the end was a clever weave of her wits to
fit the requirement of the question.
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Jared Goh

From: Jared Goh

Head of the Green Club
Serangoon Secondary School
To: Mrs Lee
Teacher-in-charge
Serangoon Secondary School
7 May, 2014

Report on activities organized by Public Utilities Board

Thank you for the chance to suggest some activities organised by the Public Utilities
Board for my schoolmates to take part in. After much consideration, I have shortlisted
two activities: MacRitchie Reservoir Nature Trail and ABC Waters Nature Trail. I believe
inculcate: to
these activities will inculcate environmental learning in our students.
cause somebody
First of all, the MacRitchie Reservoir Nature Trail is a free environmental education to learn and
programme so students will not have to worry about having to pay a large sum of remember ideas,
money for the activity and the school will not have to worry about the finances. Also, moral principles,
it is a guided nature trail so students will get to learn about the flora and fauna in the etc, especially by
reservoir and at the same time, have a tranquil walk in the reservoir together as a class. repeating them
To add to the excitement, the nature trail falls on the first and last Saturday of June so often
classes will not be affected and they can use the time to enjoy themselves after their
examinations.
In addition, the students will the ABC Waters Learning Trail. They will get to learn about
water sustainability and the water cycle from student facilitators so when they use water
in the future, they will use their knowledge to consume water in an environmentally
friendly way. On top of that, students will also learn about the concept of ABC Waters
Programme and ABC Waters design features so they will be aware of where water
comes from and how they should conserve water.
Furthermore, our club will be going around the school during our free periods to share
tips on saving and conserving water. Presently, people are wasting water in school by
leaving taps running, spilling water all over the floor and using water excessively. This
shows that our students do not know how precious water is so we hope we can help to
raise awareness on the value of water.
I believe through these activities, students will be more aware of the importance of
water resources and will also then use water more wisely.
I thank you again for the opportunity to play a role in our schools conservation efforts
and look forward to helping to make the school a greener place for all.
Reported by
Jared
Teachers Comments
Jared demonstrates good understanding the PACC and the requirements of the situational task. He sets
out the purpose of his report early on in a polite and respectful manner. The same tone is maintained when
he states his choices. He proceeds to give persuasive arguments with a firm focus on the purpose and
requirements spelt out in the rubric. He ends by reiterating his thesis statement and expressing his desire
to help in the schools conservation efforts.

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4N4 Jirakit
What do you consider to be the most significant change in your life. How has
this change helped you in your personal growth?
Change is the only constant. Almost everyone knows and accepts this basic principle
of life. However, not many people appreciate it. They are afraid of the uncertainties in
life, such as their jobs, health and finances in the future. However, I hold the opposite
view that change is a good thing in life. It forces me to adapt and improve myself when
the unexpected happens. Through the changes in my life, I learn to be strong and
obstacles:
overcome obstacles which help me to grow as a person.
situations, events,
Changes occur almost every day in peoples lives. It can be as simple as your mother etc. that make it
replacing the broken vase or as complicated as the change in the structure of an difficult for you
organization. People usually do not have much issue with minor changes, but when to do or achieve
major changes come and affect their livelihoods, they can be very unpleasant. I was something
one of those who did not like big changes. I used to think that life is a bed of roses
everything can be accomplished without much effort. Before I moved to Singapore
for my studies, I had a good life in Thailand the sort that most people would envy. envy:
If I wanted anything, all I had to do was to tell my mother. I was one pampered child the feeling of
and my life seemed easy and effortless. Just when I thought that life was perfect, my wanting to be in
mother told me that she had decided to send me to Singapore to pursue my studies in the same situation
a secondary school. My heart sank. I was reluctant and objected to the idea. However, as somebody
I had no choice but to follow my mothers order although I fought her tooth and nail else; the feeling
to continue staying in Thailand. Moving to another country alone for my studies is the of wanting
something that
most significant change in my life.
somebody else
When I first arrived in Singapore, I missed my family and the familiar environment of has; jealousy
home. Back then, I could barely speak English and found it difficult to communicate.
Sometimes, I opened my mouth but no words came out because I was too nervous
to speak. Nonetheless, all these difficulties helped me to grow. After a while, I settled
down to life in Singapore. I became more independent and learnt to take care of
myself. I also learnt to be responsible as I had to handle many tasks myself without my
parents help. Within a few months, I learnt to communicate and express my thoughts
to others. Although it was a difficult time, I am now very proud of myself that I managed
to overcome all the challenges this change brought about in my life. The change has
made me a better person. Nowadays, some people would not even believe me when
I tell them that I am a seventeen-year-old living out an adventure in a foreign country
by myself.
On the whole, the most significant change was moving to Singapore. It meant leaving
my parents protection and becoming independent in a foreign country. It has shaped
my character and brought about much personal growth. I am grateful for it despite
the fact that it was a very tough and unforgettable experience when I first arrived in
Singapore. I believe that people should not be intimidated by the uncertainties of life.
We should take changes as opportunities to learn and improve ourselves. We should
not be disheartened by change. Instead, we should put a hundred percent effort in disheartened:
everything that that we do despite the uncertain future as nobody knows what tomorrow discouraged
might bring!

Teachers Comment
Jirakit has written a very personal reflection on his experience. He begins with what change means to him
before getting into his story. By weaving his thoughts and feelings into his story, he has achieved a good
balance between narration and reflection, answering both parts of the question. His has good control of
tense, switching skilfully between the past and the present. Finally, his choice of words makes this a heartfelt
piece. This essay can also work for Write about the biggest challenge in your life and what you have learnt
from it with some revisions to the introduction, paragraph two and the conclusion.

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Charmaine Goh Shi Min

Situational Writing Report

To: Ms Sofia Low
Teacher-in-Charge of Green Club
Serangoon Secondary School
From: Charmaine Goh
Head of Green Club
Serangoon Secondary School
Date: 7 May 2014

Proposal for promoting June holidays activities for students to encourage

participation in conservation programmes
I am writing to propose the promotion of conservation programmes and efforts in our
school. During the June holidays, the Public Utilities Board (PUB) will be organising
some events which our pupils can attend to better understand the importance of
conserving water. I have often noticed that students in our school take the availability
of water for granted, and thus, we should encourage a change.
Firstly, adventurous students will enjoy the nature trail available at MacRitichie Reservoir.
Here, they can join the free guided natural trail held on the first and last Saturdays of
the June holidays. The guided trail will provide them with explanations and help them
better understand the need to conserve water on a tiny island like Singapore which has
no natural water resources. The students will also get to explore forest streams and
discover freshwater plants. It will be a rare and exciting experience! What is even more
adventurous about the entire trail is that students get to walk through the level dirt path.
I am sure students who attend this activity will have a lot of fun and at the same time,
learn the need for conserving water.
Secondly, what they have for us at the ABC Waters learning trail at Sengkang Floating
Wetland is the discovery of biodiversity of the flora and fauna. Students will also learn
about water sustainability and the water cycle, as well as the concept of ABC water
programme and its water design features. This learning experience will be led by
student facilitators and the activity will be held every Friday afternoon in June. This will
be a great experience for our students as they will be able to learn about the difficulties
and strong need to conserve water.
Thirdly, our school can organise a trip to the Singapore NEWater Centre during the
June holidays. The students will be able to see for themselves how water is recycled in
Singapore due to the limited water resources. In the world today, more than 700 million
people do not have access to clean water. With such technology, where we are able
to recycle used, unclean water, students will learn to appreciate the potable water they
have access to every day. In turn, they will be encouraged to use water wisely.
In conclusion, these activities are great for students in encouraging them to conserve
water. As an added bonus, activities at the MacRitchie Reservoir, Sengkang Floating
Wetland and the Singapore NEWater Centre are all free for students. Through these
activities, students will be more aware of the need to reduce water usage. Thank you.
Teachers Comment
The writer has shown that she is very clear about the PACC of this situational writing piece. She writes in an
appropriate tone and has clearly organised her well-elaborated points. There is use of more sophisticated
vocabulary and good variation in sentence structures.

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Ethan Liu

Should young people take care of their parents when they are old?
Picture a world where many senior citizens are sitting all over the street, begging for
money or food; or imagine them in an old folks home, where some are treated fairly,
while others are mistreated. Does the sight of these haunt you? In a highly globalised mistreated:
country like Singapore, more and more people are sending their parents to nursing treated cruelly or
homes or even abandoning them, which should not be the case as it shows a lack of unfairly
respect and filial piety in the children. Instead of doing these, children should take care
of their parents when they are old as it shows that they still respect their parents. There
will not be a loss of cultural identity and it shows that they are responsible enough to take
care of their own families.
Children should take care of their elderly parents if they feel respect and feel gratitude.
Our parents brought us up, took care of us, sheltered us, fed us and gave us education
until we reached adulthood. Yet, our parents might not have had the opportunity to
have such luxuries when they were young as during their time, many from the older
generation were still living in poverty. However, as they worked hard and put in effort,
they were able to afford a better life for us, so it is correct that we repay them by taking
care of them when they are old, just like how they took care of us when we were still
young. This shows that we, the children, still have respect for them and are filial as we
undergo hardships just like our parents when they were taking care of us.
Taking care of our elderly parents will also help to reduce the loss of culture in the next
generation. In a highly globalised society, many things such as food, music, television
shows or dramas will trend easily due to the development of information technology
products. Teenagers today will get into these trends easily and even lose their cultural
roots as a result. If children are able to take care of their parents when they are old,
grandparents will be able to tell their grandchildren a few of their life stories, or even
teach the new generation dialects so that they will be able to communicate in the native
tongues of their forefathers. By doing this, the new generation will learn and pass down
these stories to the next generation.
Furthermore, they will live by these cultural rules like their ancestors did before, thus
reducing cultural loss in the newer generations. The values of filial piety and respect will
also be passed down, thus further enriching each generation to follow.
Taking care of our parents when they are older is like a test of responsibility. When we
grow up, we will have to manage between job and family, where we will need to earn a
stable income in order to support our families, including our children and our parents;
and quite a lot of time and patience is required. Then again, our parents would have
worked hard to earn an income that is able to support their parents and their children,
just like what we, the children today, will have to do in order to take care of our families.
This shows that our parents were persistent and determined to do a good job, which is
what we can do and what we must be to take care of our parents. This shows that we
are responsible children in the future, since our parents did it, so can we.
It is notable that in this highly globalised society, many adults send their parents to
nursing homes as they claim that they do not have the time to take care of them. From
this, it is clear that these children are unable to strike a balance between work and family
as they are showing less care and concern for their parents by spending more time at
work, since they believe that money makes the world go round; which is not such a
good solution to this problem. There are some adults that hire maids to take care of their
parents as well as the house for them as they are at work. This might be a better solution
as they will still be able to interact with their parents after work and take care of them
with the help of the maid.
In this highly globalised world, children are still able to take care of their parents as
they are respectful and filial, they want to reduce culture loss and because they are
responsible children. Our parents are important, even in their twilight years; as they
brought us up through the hardships they faced. Thus, it is right that we give back to
society by taking care of them when they are older as well.
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Teachers Comment
The writer uses a scenario as a hook. He also develops all points fully using a clear P.E.E.L structure in
his body paragraphs. The writer has also presented a counter-argument, providing a balanced view of this
topic. Overall, adequate justification was given to each point. It is interesting to note the idea of cultural
preservation gained by taking care of ones parents. Perhaps one area of improvement is word choice that
demonstrates shades of meaning, as well as to rephrase a highly globalised society which was repeated
in the essay.

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Jini Teo

What do you consider to be the most significant change in your life? How has
this change helped you in your personal growth?
What is the most significant change in your life? That is a good question. You might
wonder how, at my age, could I possibly have experienced a significant change? Nothing
has even happened, I have not lived. Well, I can see some truth in that. However it does
not apply to me. Have you ever wondered what life would be or would not be if that
change did not happen? Would you be happier, more content or the polar opposite? I polar:
used to describe
think about this day and night, would I still be who I am today?
something that
The most significant change happened to me when I entered secondary school. This is the complete
may sound cheesy and corny but no matter, I still consider it a huge change. Ever opposite of
since I entered primary school, I was a shrinking violet. I kept to myself, made just a something else
few friends, and did not stand out the least bit. Whenever the teacher would ask, Who
does not understand the question? I would keep mum albeit I did not understand. That
was the beginning of my downfall. No matter how often my mother drilled it into my
head to ask questions when I did not understand, her words would fall on deaf ears.
Through the painfully long six years of primary education I stayed the same, never
changing.
Then it all changed when I stepped through the threshold of secondary school life. My
mother had wanted me to step out of my comfort zone and enter a co-ed school. It was
not that I was afraid of boys, it was just that I was haunted by the thought of having to
make new friends, having to start all over again. I certainly did not want that. However,
there was only so much I could do, my mothers word was the law. Amidst all the
negative thoughts, a ray of positive light peeked through the shadows. I thought maybe
it would do me good. I have always been taught to see the good in the bad, to see the
glass half full. Little did I know, my life was about to be changed.
I was still shy on the very first day of school. But subsequently, I managed to open up,
though I was still wary. Thankfully, my friends stood by me, they did not leave me even
though they knew I would require some work. The boys in the class were friendly too.
Everyone was nice to each other. That was one thing I did not expect. I had thought
that people would be cold and distant and possibly mean. I honestly do not know what
made me think that way. From then on, I have never turned back to the way I once was.
I have proudly blossomed from a shrinking violet to an outspoken girl who is confident shrinking violet:
in voicing her thoughts. For that, I am grateful to my very first class in my secondary a way of
describing a very
school.
shy person
As time flew by in a heartbeat, I noticed myself slowly and steadily changing, evolving
even. I was no longer that timid pushover that people could take advantage of. I am
now a strong lady that will not take any nonsense. I learnt to be more vocal, more
forthright and, more assertive, not to mention, friendlier. These are just a few of the
superb values I have taken away from this whole experience. It has armed me with
some invaluable and indispensable values in life. For that, my gratitude cannot be put indispensable:
essential
into words.
Now, as I enter my fourth and final year of secondary school, I realised how much
I would miss my precious friends. I get teary-eyed whenever I think about it. These
are the people that have stuck by me all this time, these are the people that have
brought me up when I was down, these are the people that have always believed in
me. Looking back, no matter what happens, I hope that we would still remain friends,
even until we turn grey with age.

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Teachers Comments:
The writer has a strong personal voice. Mental verbs such as realised, thought and believed convey her
innermost thoughts on school life. She has reflected on her personal growth and transition over the years.
Even though school life may seem mundane and routine, her observations display a keen analytical eye.
There is also skilful use of figurative language such as a ray of positive light peeked through the shadows
and to see the glass half full that express an optimistic outlook on school life. She has used repetition
to great effect, repeating structures like For that at the end of paragraphs 4 and 5 to highlight her
thankfulness. The same stylistic device is employed again in the final paragraph, These are the people,
to emphasise her appreciation for friends who have helped her emerge from her shell.

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NG GUO HAO

Should children take care of their parents when they are old?
Family is not an important thing, it is everything. These words came from Michael J.
Fox, an American-Canadian actor and producer. However, it is clear from the actions
of some individuals today, not everyone live by his words entirely. Whether it is the
challenge of differences in idealism, or disagreements in culture and customs, youths
have become estranged from their parents due to these differences. However, what is
family? Is it simply people who are related by bloodline and inheritance living together?
Or is there a more emotional, deeper relationship behind what makes a family? This
brings us back to the question: Should children take care of their parents when they are
old? In my opinion, children should take care of their parents, regardless of age, as it is
morally right, it brings the family together and helps construct a more grateful society.

idealism:
the pursuit of
noble principles or
purposes

estranged:
no longer living
with, in contact
It is morally right to take care of our parents. The proverb goes, Blood is thicker than with, or friendly
water. Yet, the unconditional love and affection from our parents cannot be expressed with someone
by mere words. They are our pillars of support, our umbrellas that cover us through the
storms of life, through thick and thin. In fact, most of us would not even be where we are
now without them. To repay their compassionate love for us by supporting them when
they most need it is it such an esoteric concept? Is it humane to abandon our parents esoteric:
when they become old and a burden to us? Kindness begets kindness, and as such, obscure
when we are showered with kindness, it is only natural to return the favour.
Caring for our parents when they are old can also tighten the bonds of family. The
plethora of fights that happen around the house is commonly caused by a lack of
understanding or distrust for one another. When the fights break out, unhappiness is
the only outcome, leaving behind a trail of regret and unspoken apologies. When a child
takes care of his parents, he begins to understand them better, value the times they
have together and become more emotionally attached to each other. This will ingrain
in both parties minds the importance of staying together. In return, happiness radiates
like the fragrance of a flower, and thus, the other family members will be influenced by
this positivity, and get along well with one another.

plethora:
excess
ingrain:
instil

From taking care of our parents, a more grateful society may flourish. We all respect
and care for our parents, and more importantly, respect others who do so.
Make it an iron rule to prioritise the welfare of our parents. In a society where we are iron rule:
so heavily influenced by the media and where there are daily reports of people sending a rule that cannot
their parents to nursing homes, a good influence can be fire to kerosene. Others will be overturned
start to see that the unity of a family with nothing but tranquil expressions can be
forged, not by doing what we think is best for them, but what in fact is best for them.
One may think that elderly parents should be able to support themselves because they
are now only left with the problem of caring for themselves. Sure, without the burden of
taking care of their children, taking care of themselves would seem like a easy matter in
comparison. However, if we take into consideration that our bodily functions lose stride
and performance as we age, we can dismiss this argument. When we grow older, we
are less alert and our body functions no longer operate as well as before, like when
we are ill. With this knowledge, ask yourself this question: Who was it that took care of
you when you were sick? We should not neglect taking care of someone who is unwell,
which in this case would be our parents.
In summary, children should be taking care of their parents as it is the right thing to do.
It bridges the gaps of a family and can influence others to be more grateful. Our parents
were given the responsibility to see that we would walk the right path in life. So, let us
walk with them, the paths of their lives, until their final moments.

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Teachers Comments
The writer uses a quotation as a hook before moving on to pose a though-provoking question on what
defines a family. The body paragraphs were very well-elaborated and supported with relevant examples.
The writer demonstrates flair in the use of similes and metaphors such as pillars of support, our umbrellas
that cover us, storms of life and happiness radiates like the fragrance of a flower. It is a very interesting
and engaging read for the reader. Finally, the conclusion ends with an imperative sentence that calls on
action from the reader. In a very subtle way, the conclusion actually reinforces his stand and unites with the
introduction in bringing across the message.

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Czaryna Kaye Mendoza Clemente

Character development is the most important aspect of education in this modern

society. Do you agree?
Education. A term that has varying definitions, be it study-wise or character
development. In todays modern society, most of us still define academic excellence
as the only important aspect of education as many people think it is the only thing
that will propel us to have a successful life. In my opinion, I am completely against
that. I think that it is character development instead that is the most important aspect
of education as nothing is more important than ones self-worth and how we react to
certain situations based on our attitudes and values. Having a good character will help
us to cultivate values for life, be more civic-minded and have the ability to socialise socialise:
well in our communities.
behave in a way
that is socially
Firstly, character development will help us cultivate values that we will take with us to acceptable to
our graves values that no amount of studying can ever achieve, values that will be people
with us until we die and values that we will pass on to the next generation. They are
values that remain with us for life.
Furthermore, character development will help the society to become more civic-minded
people. We will be more gracious citizens, offering our help to those who need it more.
For example, when we see elderly people on the bus, some of us will naturally give up
our seats to them and when they see a pregnant lady crossing the road with groceries,
we will help her to carry them. These are the little things that cannot be learnt in the
classroom. The daily acts of kindness people do can never be picked up by reading
books; these are feelings of sympathy and empathy, something we can never feel by empathy:
studying. Thus, character development is very important.
the ability to
understand and
Thirdly, it can help us to socialise well. By developing character, we will be able to share the feelings
communicate effectively with other people. In this society, in order to succeed, we need of others
to talk and mingle with other people. The way we act cannot be defined by books either.
In order to learn it, we need to develop our character. Hence, it is very important.
Some people might say that in a competitive place like Singapore, the key to survival
is to study and obtain good grades which will secure a good future. While I have to
concede to the fact that academic results are important, the truth still remains that our concede:
self-worth is the most important. The values we have and pass on are more important to admit that
than any result slip in the world.
something is true,
logical, etc
In conclusion, character development is still the most important aspect as it will help us
cultivate values for life, help us become more civic-minded citizens and gain the ability
to socialise well in this society.
Teachers Comment
The structure of an argumentative essay is evident with points developed in a clear P.E.E.L framework.
A balanced viewpoint is achieved through the skilful use of a counter-argument. Overall, both sides were
explored and adequate justification was given to each point. Perhaps one area of improvement could be
to engage the reader through a more interesting hook. Another area to explore is the conclusion where the
writer can restate her stand with varied vocabulary and leave her readers with a thought for the future.

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Yang Nanyang

Character development is the most important aspect of education in this modern

society. Do you agree?
Education is the most powerful weapon that one can use to change the world, is a
sagacious quote by Nelson Mandela. Yes, education is a pivotal part in everyones life.
However, the question is which aspect of an education has the most deterministic effect
on ones life? From my own perspective, I do not agree that character development
is the most important part of education in todays society. Each development, be it
academic, physical or aesthetic, play an equal role in students holistic development.
First and foremost, good character traits do not necessarily provide a student with the
means to make a living. In this competitive world, highly skilled talents are in strong
demand. Having a good character does not mean that one would definitely have good
academic results, which stands him or her in good stead when one steps into the
working world. By the way, it is also difficult to assess ones morality within just a short
period of a job interview. In this case, the significance of having a notable academic
performance reflected on a resume might overweigh the hidden personalities that one
has. Clearly, an excellent academic background matters when it comes to the future
pursuit of a career.

sagacious:
perceptive
insightful, wise
pivotal: vital
aesthetic:
concerned with
beauty and
art and the
understanding of
beautiful things

pursuit:
the act of looking
In addition, physical education also plays a critical part in our curriculum. Not only for or trying to find
should one strive for good grades in the examinations, one also needs to maintain a something
good health condition. It is commonly held that having a healthy body is the foundation
of successful living. Significantly, one needs to learn to have a healthy lifestyle by
learning health tips and exercise during physical education lessons. In other words, a
robust body serves to be an advantage to scaling greater heights. If one cannot even robust:
protect himself, who can guarantee his survival in this fast-evolving and unpredictable strong and healthy
world? This manifests the importance of physical development in a modern education
system.
manifests:
clearly shows
Moreover, aesthetic appreciation and skills to create art remain an emphasis of the
education system. Encouraged to be well-rounded, students should not solely focus on
a limited range of developments, it is important for them to embrace a variety of artistic
expressions as no amount of technology on the globe can match the aesthetic beauty
presented by a work of art, such as the drawings by Leonardo Da Vinci or the music
of Beethoven. This necessitates in students, the ability to appreciate the arts through necessitates:
the art lessons in schools which instil them with a different way to explore and discover requires
various aspects of the world.
To conclude, though education has revolutionised constantly to keep up the changing
needs in our modern society, many aspects of education remain essential in this system.
No single aspect of education can dominate the whole landscape of education. All parts
of education should work collaboratively to benefit the well-being of the student. After
all, the crux still lies in the individuals own priority in his or her life. This reinforces my the crux:
stand that character building does not play the most superior role in todays education. the most important
or difficult part of
a problem or an
issue
Teachers Comment
Nanyang sets out a clear stand and lays out an overview of his arguments in his introduction, giving his
essay focus and direction. He goes on to explain why the other aspects of education are equally important.
This is a mature and insightful piece with considerable thought given to justify opinion. In addition, many
instances of good vocabulary demonstrate the writers language flair.

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5E1

Lee Zhi Wei

Character development is the most important aspect of education in this modern

society. Do you agree?
In todays society, education is all about preparing students with practical skills to
solve real-life problems. The question is how do we decide what goes into the lifeskills set we equip our children with at school. Which type of skills should be given
more prominence? Should character development be the most important aspect of our
modern education? To me, its a straight no.
First and foremost, character development is best handled by parents. Everyones
behaviour is a reflection of their parents actions. Even with the emphasis on character
development in education, it is challenging to change the values and attitudes ingrained ingrained:
in children at home. Hence, character development should not be the most important describes
aspect in education, as it is the duty of parents to mould the character of their children. something that
has existed for a
In addition, todays companies look at the results of the students as an indication long time and is
of their ability to perform on the job they are employed for. Education should then therefore difficult
focus on the academic progress of the students. For instance, learning history trains to change
students to develop a certain degree of objectivity when one is confronted with different
situations. History students are taught to detect bias, and to consider the perspectives
of antagonists, in order to get a full picture of the events. This is an important job skill, for
example, to an analyst or a journalist. Because employers perceive academic results
as more important than character, education should thus focus mainly on teaching the
necessary skills to prepare students for their examinations.
On the other hand, critics may argue that without character development, students will
not achieve much success despite having perfect academic results. This may be true
to a certain extent. However, one must know that schools have finite resources and
time, therefore resources should be allocated according to the level of importance.
Schools should then prioritise academic results as they ensure the future employability
of their charges. As for character development, parents can manage it at home where
they have control over which values to inculcate in their children.

finite:
having a definite
limit or fixed size

inculcate:
to cause
In conclusion, at the end of the day, character development should not be the most somebody to learn
important part of education as what our society really needs today are results.
and remember
ideas, moral
principles, etc,
especially by
repeating them
often
Teachers Comment
Zhi Weis essay demonstrates a clear line of argument. Coherence is achieved through good organisation
and structure. In the introduction, he defines the purpose of education to help steer his argument. He sets
out his stand clearly in the first paragraph before presenting persuasive arguments to support his stand. A
balanced approach is achieved in the penultimate paragraph where he examines the opposing view before
a convincing defence of his stand.

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Beverly Aw

What do you consider to be the most significant change in your life. How has
this change helped you in your personal growth?
The only thing that is constant in life is change. Throughout my life, this saying has
been instilled in my mind. No matter what, change will occur, be it a positive or a
negative change. A few years ago, I have decided to go vegan. Through that, I have vegan: a
vegetarian who
learnt many new things.
omits all animal
Since I was young, I have always dreamt of having a farm filled with animals when I products from the
grow up. It has never struck me how people can be so cruel to animals. I have been diet
vegan for three years and I have never felt better. It is very challenging to be a vegan in
Singapore. There are not many food outlets that offer vegan food. And being surrounded
by people who are not vegan also contributes to the challenge.
Being a vegan means not consuming dairy products, meat or anything related to animals.
This narrows down a lot of food options. Fortunately, there are always alternatives.
Why consume products that cause animals to suffer when it is not necessary? Many
people believe that meat is essential for growth. However, research has shown that
most vegans are surprisingly healthier than people who consume meat and dairy
products. Furthermore, animals are tortured and put under excruciating pain in the
food industry. In order to be able to feed the population of today, food industries inject
animals with substances that cause them to be much bigger in size to produce more
meat or more milk.

excruciating:
extremely painful,
causing intense
suffering

When I was thirteen years old, I was obese. No matter how much I exercised, I could
not lose any weight. At that point of time, I was not a vegan yet. I was unaware of the
cruelty to animals in food industries. My parents tried consulting doctors on whether
there was any way for me to lose weight in a healthy manner. Almost every doctor told
me to exercise more and eat less. But one of them said Try going vegan. My parents
thought the doctor was not being serious. However, I decided to give it a shot. Within a
month, I noticed a significant difference. I have a lot of weight and also, I became much
more optimistic about life. It is indeed true that you are what you eat.
Becoming vegan has made me realise that no matter how hard a challenge is, there
will always be a way. As long as one has the determination to accomplish a task, it can
always be done. Everything is in the mind. If you refuse to believe that you can do it,
you will most likely fail. However, once you set your mind to accomplish something, you
will achieve it.
Teachers Comments
Beverly started well with an apt quote that provided the context of her essay. Her essay took on a systematic
structure where she related past experiences on her change. Her passionate belief is evident in her words.
She ended nicely with the reflective component of lessons learnt from her experience and even offered
advice to motivate others. It is a well-written piece of work with a personal touch.

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Inside Back Cover (Bank)

The art work for Cover Anime Drawing was done by Gan Wei Shuen of Class ISD4 (2014)