9/22/2015 Agenda!

Learning Target: I can correctly identify

and fix redundancy in my writing.

Brain Buzzer: What is redundancy? Give an

example.

FINISHING FROM YESTERDAY:

You try it review

*Sarah was tired.
*She took a nap.
Make the above sentences into a
compound sentence and a complex
sentence.

Redundancy can happen in many forms.

Yesterday we talked about redundancy at
the beginning of sentences.
However, redundancy can happen in the
middle of sentences too.

Heather whispered quietly in the library.

You dont need to describe whispered

with the word quietly. Its
redundant.

The meaning of whisper involves

something done quietly.
The dishonest man cheated on the
college exam. He wasnt truthful at all.

Dishonest = wasnt truthful.

No need to say it twice.
Thats being redundant.

The boy shouted and hollered on the

playground.

Shouted is the same thing as hollered.

Dont need to say it twice in the same
sentence.

The huge giant towered over me.

Giants are huge. No need to be

redundant.

Kids sometimes use adjectives to

describe nouns in the same way. This can
also lead to redundancy.
The plump fat cow mooed at me.

My dirty, unclean room annoyed my

mother.
Dirty and unclean are the same thing.

You try itIf the

sentence does NOT contain an example of
redundancy, write Correct. If it DOES
contain an example of redundancy,
rewrite the sentence correctly.
1) The teacher screamed loudly at the
principal.
2) John bought a glistening, sparkling
car in his dream.
3) The slippery, newly-shined floor
caused problems for the students.

4) The new, unused marker lay on the

floor.
5) The dead grass was surprisingly soft
on my feet.
6) The old, ancient teacher needed to
retire yesterday.
7) The wet water drenched my clothes.
8) The grumpy and cranky troll
frightened me.
9) My intimidating father scolded me
for missing my curfew twice in a row.
10) The speakers buzzed in my ears.

Once you establish that the two

adjectives are not redundant, you need to
make sure you punctuate them correctly.
Coordinate adjectives: two adjectives
side by side that appear near (usually in
front of) a noun.
Examples:
The fluffy, cute puppy made me giggle.
Tall, handsome Tim made the girls melt.
The hot, windy day irritated me.

You try it.Where

would you put the comma????

1) The tall thin man walked through

the park.
2) The sticky yellow glue dripped on
my arm.
3) The evil brown snake hid in the
garden.
4) The old dusty keyboard had
smoke billowing from it.

5) The football team wore shiny

black helmets.
6) The moldy gross paper fell from
the students desk.
7) Kevin wore a flashing circular
button on his jacket.
8) The magical colorful sunset sent
chills up my spine.

You try it

Write two sentences with coordinate

adjectives punctuated correctly.