Joseph Najera
De Piero - Writing 2
4 November, 2015
From Tutus to Lockers: Hazing in Sports
Rookie linemen being left with expensive dinner bills, September call-ups in the MLB
forced to wear a tutu on the next plane ride, new draftees in the NBA forced to carry a doll
around. Hazing is sometimes seen as an inevitable consequence that comes with playing sports,
with the notion of the more you advance in your respective sport, the more hazing that will
occur. Seen from a sociology standpoint, hazing is performed because it is a strong part of the
sports and masculinity culture that the US promotes, whereas from a psychology standpoint,
hazing is looked more as something that can potentially have a negative and harmful effect on
the mental aspect of the hazee. Certain media outlets, like Vice News, see hazing as a form of
bullying that is beginning to get out of control, and believe it needs to be stopped. Overall,
depending on the genre, an author must use different moves, must conform to different
conventions, and must know their audience so as to better connect to the reader and drive their
points home.
Although each genre looks at hazing differently, one similarity can be found between
each article that links the genres together at a level deeper than just the topic. One such similarity
that exists in each source, is the use of first hand accounts from those who have been hazed.
These first-hand accounts that each source is able to provide helps to expand on their argument,
employing a tactic called ethos that was covered in an article entitled Steps towards Rhetorical
Analysis by Laura Carroll. The technique of ethos is being used to [help the reader] trust the
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[authors] credibility and to believe the messages they send (Caroll 47). The reader then sees
each author as more credible and is thus more likely to believe and support the authors claim.
The article titled Making the Team: Threats to Health and Wellness within Sport Hazing
Cultures, by Jessica Chin and Jay Johnson, is a Sociology paper that was posted within the
International Journal of Health, Wellness & Society. Its main focus is centered on why hazing
occurs, believing that the culture of American Sports is the main culprit for the recurrences of
hazing across the country.
The authors use various moves within their paper that allow them to effectively argue
their point. To begin, there is a constant call-to-action theme that is present throughout the
paper that works in various ways. By the authors offering a variety of ways by which [a policy
on hazing] can be successfully implemented (Chin, Johnson 33), this helps give the paper a
sense of so-what, and doesnt leave readers pondering questions like Hazing is bad, but now
what do I do now? after theyre done reading. This also ties in with the audience and their
expectations for a piece like this. Those reading a Sociology/Cultural Anthropology paper about
hazing and its culture are likely to be interested in why hazing happens, and what can be done to
prevent future incidents. Thus, the call-to-action coincides with the audiences expectations of
learning why hazing occurs, as well as providing a solution or two that the reader can take with
them.
Chin and Johnson also use a move of expansion within their paper to show how big of a
problem hazing actually is. Through examples and references, Chin and Johnson demonstrate
that While [hazing is] historically associated with fraternity pranks and rites of passage for
group membership, over time they have been adopted within other realms of team-based
activities (military, sports teams, e.g.) and have increased in both number and variety (Allan &
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Madden, 2008; Nuwer, 1999; Waldron & Kowalski, 2009) (Chin, Johnson 30). Showing that
hazing is more than just confined to sports, Chin and Johnson view hazing as a result of the
social reproduction of the sport culture, that expands to [the] sport/university/cultural
organization (Chin, Johnson 31). The authors then begin indicate how bad of a problem hazing
is becoming as fraternities, sororities and even the military have been known to experience
hazing in the past. This move also provides the reader with more examples which may lead to the
reader experiencing a better connection with one example than they would the other, causing the
point to be driven home more than it normally would if just one example had been given.
Hazing is known to sometimes bring about negative psychological impacts that are severe
enough to leave the hazee traumatized for extended lengths of time. In the psychology research
paper Crossing the Line by Jennifer Waldron and Christopher Kowalski, the psychological
impacts of hazing and why some athletes still feel the need to participate in hazing are looked at
closely. Waldron & Kowalskis data was gathered from interviewing eleven athletes who
reported being hazed during their time in high school and/or collegiate sports.
With the data collected from all 11 athletes being so overwhelming, yet serving at the
base of their argument, Waldron and Kowalski were able to [analyze] 455 data chunks
producing 44 categories, 7 lower order themes, and 2 higher order themes (Waldron, Kowalski,
295). The manner in which they organized these findings is an important move that allows the
paper to flow and stay cohesive. Using easy to read charts, separate subheadings, and
individualized paragraphs that are easy for the reader to pick up on, this move helps to showcase
the importance that lies within each subtopic by using visual aids that stand out while reading.
This gives the authors the ability to convey information more precisely than before, while still
taking up less space on the page. The precision comes in the form of laying out what each point
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is, and being as direct as possible while supporting the claim with charts and visual aids. This is
an important move in the scope of the entire paper because the authors are able to show how
much data theyve collected--proving that their research was thorough and well done--yet still
being able to not overwhelm the reader with information.
Vice News is an internet-based company that takes pride in covering events that arent as
well covered by other news sources. The Vice news article entitled Inside an Elite High
School's Culture of Hazing and Bullying by Danielle Elliot covers a story from early 2015 in
which a young boy in High School stepped in to defend his classmate and soon become the
target of the harassment instead.
This piece takes a different approach towards hazing than the other two articles as it tries
to tell a story and bring about awareness of a specific event, rather than focusing on hazing as a
whole. Being considered a non-scholarly piece of writing, this article is able to perform moves
that the other papers are unable to incorporate because it would go against the conventions of
their genre. One move--that isnt even text based--that results in a huge amount of effectiveness,
are the pictures that the author chose to include all throughout the article. Drawn by Maddison
Bond, the pictures focus on specific parts of the article and serve as a way to indicate which parts
of the story are more important. They also serve as a way to communicate a topic by showcasing
that topic through art, rather than just describing it. And because some of the pictures do have a
shock value to them, the reader may be better adept to visualizing the struggle that the author is
trying to reiterate throughout.
Another move that is specific to this genre, is the storytelling that Elliot is allowed to do
as she begins the article with the entire story of bullying/hazing so that the reader may have some
background and wont be completely lost while reading. And context is one of the most
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important places to begin a rhetorical assault on the reader as One of the first places to start is
context. Rhetorical messages always occur in a specific situation or context (Carroll 4*). As
mentioned in Steps towards Rhetorical Analysis, the use of quotes, narration, and some
background all establish a background story that sets up the rest of the paper as well. Not only is
it a building tool, but the story also works as an anecdote and a hook, immediately drawing a
reader in as it dives straight into the encounter.
Different audiences prefer different things. In writing, this is evident with the differences
between the two academic papers and the Vice News Article. Each genre is effective in its own
way because the audiences of both are looking for specific, familiar conventions that separates
each genre from the rest. For example, someone who were to be reading Vice News would
generally be someone younger who probably spends a good amount of time on the internet. This
person would generally be someone who isnt a huge fan of structure or too many rules, likes
pictures to break up the sometimes dense reading, and generally doesnt really like censorship.
And because of the freedom that is available within this genre, the Vice News article is able to be
more effective when reaching out to this audience because it is allowed to use foul language so
as to get a point across, can have pictures that spark different emotions, and can follow any
format the author chooses really.
On the other hand, the academic articles would appeal successfully to a different kind of
audience than would the Vice article. Those reading a scientific journal, or astute magazine filled
with writings from nobel laureates prefer the structure and professionalism that is the norm
within the genres of the Sociology essay and the Psychology essay. A reader from this audience
would come to expect the structure that is present in research papers. If an article were to stray
from this convention, the reader would be likely be displeased with the jumbled mess presented
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before them. Also, the reader may like the citations that are present throughout every academic
paper, because it provides a sense of ethos and credibility to the paper theyre reading. The
article Navigating Genres by Kerry Dirk helps to elaborate on why knowing who the audience
is, is such a vital part of the writing process. Dirk begins by mentioning that this was my first
time writing an essay to you, a composition student and because of this, she must figure out
certain things like what features...should go into this essay or How personal could I get?
(250). Dirks process of writing shows that when knowing the audience, the author is able to
know their expectations and in turn, can connect better to the audience, allowing points to be
driven.
In the end, moves and how each author goes about writing for a specific genre varies like
fishing for different fish. In order to catch a specific type of fish, you need to go to a certain
location, use a specific lure or tactic, and have a general idea of where youre trying to cast.
When writing for a different genre, you must know your audience (like how youd know what
fish you want), you must formulate a plan on how to reel in the audience (pick your lure) and
you must write until the paper is able to successfully communicate its point (cast in different
locations until you find them). Overall, writing for different genres, even when covering the
same topic, requires a change in approach and a different set of goals that must be accomplished
in order to successfully argue the point.
Citations
Carroll, Laura Bolin. "Backpacks vs. Briefcases: Steps Toward Rhetorical Analysis."
Backpacks vs. Briefcases: Steps Toward Rhetorical Analysis. N.p., n.d. Web. 11 Oct.
2015.
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Chin, Jessica, and Jay Johnson. "Making the Team: Threats to Health and Wellness within Sport
Hazing Cultures." International Journal of Health, Wellness & Society 1.2 (2011): 29-38.
Print.
Dirk, Kerry. "Navigating Genres." Writing Spaces: Readings on Writing. By Charles Lowe and
Pavel Zemliansky. West Lafayette, IN: Parlor, 2010. N. pag. Print.
Elliot, Danielle. "Inside an Elite High School's Culture of Hazing and Bullying | VICE Sports."
VICE Sports RSS. 26 Jan. 2015. Web. 2 Nov. 2015.
Waldron, Jennifer, and Christopher Kowalski. "Crossing the Line."Research Quarterly for
Exercise and Sport 80.2 (2013). Print.
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Use of Course
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Analysis
Organization/Structure
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Genre/Conventions
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Slider Joe,
Awesome work here. To take this to the next level, here are
some ideas:
-Spend a bit more time breaking down what kinds of
data/evidence these different sources are using and what kinds
of research questions theyre asking
-I thought you did a great job of using/explaining moves, and
id like to read even more about it
-Try to sharpen up that thesis statement a bit more so it
previews what, exactly, your argument is and what youre basing
it on
-Work in a transition/transitional phrase between some of your
paragraphs -- find out how theyre connected to each other, and
then explicitly build that in.
All that said, way to go, brother.
Z
9/10