Date: December 11, 2015

To:
Elizabeth Benedict
From: Yesenia Mendez
Subject: Reflective Revision Memo
Revising these two documents has allowed me to understand what makes the actual document
look and be professional. Also, it allowed me to correct some grammatical errors.
The Proposal was revised by using instructor feedback and a review from a friend. The revision
focuses primarily on the content and one small change on the design of a graph. The instructor
feedback was helpful by offering possible suggestion on the content such as in the Project Plan
and Qualifications. Some of the changes made on the Project Plan were adding and extra step
that talks about programs such as rehabilitation for the homeless. Also, I added a few more
sentence to this section to clarify a bit why they are important steps. On the Qualifications
section I decided to add some of the projects, that Joy Junctions has done previously and explain
in one sentence what it is. I also included the staff members name to give them some credibility
to them and the actual document. The line graph that I changed is currently under the section
Current Situation. The only difference is that it has dots on the number line. This changes were
made to make it easier to understand/read and it creates a more professional document. For
example. When I added the project of Joy Junction they are in bullet points. This makes the
document more organized which allows the audience to easily find what Joy Junction does to
help homelessness around Albuquerque.
The Recommendation Report was revised using comments from instructor, and peer review. The
first step was to revise the documents taking the instructor advice and recommendations, which I
did. Some of the changes I made were on the result of study, and discussion of results, and
editing any grammatical errors. These changes were primarily on the content of the document.
The reason for the changes were because of two things, first it helps clarify things, and second it
creates a more professional document. For example, before I did not discuss my personal
experience on the Result of Study section, adding this section clarifies exactly what my results
were. I also added more content such as Conduct more Surveys, and New and Improve
Policies to the Discussion of Results section. They offer more multiple and different
suggestions before the final recommendation. Once I apply those changes, a peer was able to
review my document for any grammatical errors and check if the sentences flow naturally and
fluently. These changes make more sense to the audience because it allowed me to be more open
to different suggestions and not be biased.
Overall, this changes/revision were made to better improve my documents and to make them as
clear as possible for the audience.