Reviewer(s):Brandon White

Writer: Anit Patel

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Writing to Investigate a Cause Peer Review

Directions: Answer the following questions in as much detail as possible, quoting or referencing the text
specifically to support your feedback. Focus on striking a balance of supportive and critical feedback.
Authors: list two or three questions or concerns you have about your draft that youd like to discuss with
your group. (Reviewers: Be sure to respond to writers questions here)
Do you support minimum wage to be increased?

If it was increased how would it help people?

Clarity
1. Point out any confusing sentences or passages and note them here. Were you able to follow the
general direction of the essay easily? Explain how the essay was organized and why it was
effective (or not).
The size of the Businnes will determine how long they have to increase their minimum wage to
15$ an hour Why would the size matter
Topic
2. Does the essay clearly describe an effect or phenomenon and its various possible causes?
Yes it does
Evidence
3. Does the writer utilize sufficient and appropriately scholarly evidence to support his or her
claims? Explain.
Yes, facts were in quotes with a works cited at the end
4. Does the essay give equal attention to at least two perspectives?
Yes, describes the effects to the company.
5.

Are there quotations from proponents of different causes? In other words, are the different
communities representing themselves in this essay?
Yes in some parts

Structure
6. Are there sentences or paragraphs that veer off-topic? Explain.
Not that I know of
7. Are the various sources clearly connected? Do the ideas fit together logically and are the
transitions between ideas smooth? Explain.
All the sources are from the same topic
Strength of Introduction and Conclusion
8. Does the hook create genuine interest? How? And does the introduction provide sufficient context
on the phenomenon? Explain.
Its an interesting topic but the attention grabber could be better
9. Does the conclusion describe the implications of the debate? How?
Yes
Style
10. Long sentences are fine if they move well, but point out any parts that seem choppy or pretentious
(long and wordy).

11. Characterize the style: enthusiastic, ponderous, critical, or something totally different. Does it fit
the writers message? Explain.
The style is very informative. A lot of facts.
Evidence
12. Does the essay cite three appropriately scholarly sources? Does it have in-text citations and a
Works Cited page?
Yes
Editing
13. Dont do a complete editing job, but do point out the most distracting slips in usage and
mechanics. Summarize the patterns of grammatical error here (ie run-on sentences, spelling, etc.)
Other
14. Note any other questions or feedback you have for the writer here. This is important: since every
paper is unique, they will each have their own successes and concerns that may not be addressed
above.