Editorial was also developed with its audience and purpose (SLO 1) in mind. Subsequently, the editorial
aims to persuade (SLO 3) the Los Angeles Times and you, Dr. Bruce, of potential water shortages in the
event of an earthquake in Los Angeles. A discussion of this nature is of great relevance to Southern
California residents. Further the paper is organized (SLO 4) to first develop a background of Los Angeles
seismic activity. Following this background the editorial addresses the nature of Los Angeles water
supply and how this supply may be affected by and earthquake. This logical progression aims to provide a
clear, persuasive argument for the reader.
My final document, a revised editorial, utilizes your feedback to improve upon weaknesses of the
original document regarding organization, rhetorical focus, persuasiveness, as well as language and
design. To provide a more clear organization (SLO 4) and aide the persuasive (SLO 3) aims of the
editorial, separate topics were assigned to their own appropriate headings. The term aqueduct was
defined in the 2nd paragraph, to better meet the needs of the audience (SLO 1). Throughout the paper a
concerted effort was made to remove or smooth awkward sentences, in an attempt to better use clear and
concise language (SLO 5). Finally, my thesis statement was reworked to include a call to action, a
suggestion made by you, Dr. Bruce, and my classmate. This revision allows the thesis to better capture
the persuasive nature of my editorial.
Thank you for your time and consideration of my portfolio.
Sincerely,
Bradford Pepping