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Price Mrs. Caruso ENGL 1102 February 15, 2012

Sinking of the Titanic: Behind the Scenes

The well-known story of the Titanic is one preserved through the years, and for good reason. Most memories of the Titanic are those of sorrow, pain and remorse. The unsinkable ship was much more than a cruise across the vast waters, but an opportunity for many to start a new life in America. The ship carried multiple classes, many families rich in culture and those with potential to establish a new beginning. The captain of the Titanic was Edward John Smith. Many people seem to blame Edward for the sinking of the Titanic. They say Edward should have been more aware of the iceberg. In reality, who is really to blame? A ships crew consists of not just a captain, but also an entire crew who play off each other to ensure a safe journey. Similar to a team of any sport, each individual works off another for the overall success.
Alex 2/16/12 10:13 AM
Comment [2]: Keep elaborating on how the crew ensures a safe journey. Maybe include a few jobs of a few crew members.

Alex 2/16/12 10:16 AM

Comment [1]: Let me know what the multiple classes were. How many were there, what did each represent as regards to wealth and where they stayed.

Alex 2/16/12 10:18 AM

Comment [3]: Maybe elaborate how each individual would work off another, like say the captain got bearings from the cartographer and he got his bearings from the guy on the watchtower.

Alex 2/16/12 10:19 AM

Comment [4]: Overall, this is a great way to start off a paper, elaborate more in some of your points and the reader will be able to understand the topic better and maybe even be able to relate.