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TYPE : CLASSIFYING ESSAY

TITLE : DIABETES AND TYPES

ORGANIZATION OF ESSAY

This essay have introductory paragraph which have 4 sentences , body paragraph 1 which have
13 sentences , body paragraph 2 which have 9 sentences , body paragraph 3 have 26 sentences ,
body paragraph 4 have 9 sentences , body paragraph 4 have 9 sentences , body paragraph 5 have
9 sentences , body paragraph 6 have 12 sentences , body paragraph 4 have 9 sentences , and for
the concluding paragraph , it have 8 sentences.

This is a complete essay which has all the organization of the essay starting from introduction to
conclusion. The essay is the classification essay, the author categorize or organize various things
or views in different groups or categories.

The author classified diabetes in type 1 , type 2 and type 3 diabetes. In each classified, there are
category in each classified . The author using common classification transition , which is type 1 ,
type 2 and type 3 . The author give examples of things that fit into each category.

PARAGRAPH

Most of the paragraph in the essay, the author write the topic sentence . I can see the author
states the topic sentence that generally introduces the information that follow in the supporting
sentences in the paragraph. The author mention the type of the diabetes in the different
paragraph. The author also explain each type of diabetes. Lastly, the concluding paragraph , the
author summarize all the types of diabetes and mention again the essay outline in concluding
paragraph.

Introductory Paragraph (4 Sentences)


Present Situation : problems Diabetes is little or no ability to move glucose out of
the blood into the red blood cells
Present Situation : definition Nearly 16 million people have diabetes in the United
States, which narrows it down to about 1 out of every
seventeen people.
Present Situation : illustrate About 2,150 new cases are diagnosed each day.
The essay will (Essay outline) 1 Many of us do not clearly know what diabetes is and
the different categories that it is classified in.
Body Paragraph 1 (13 Sentences)
First type (Topic sentence) Risk factors for type 1 diabetes are a family history of
the disease, the white race and being at an age less
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than 20.
Example 1 Half the people diagnosed with type 1 diabetes are
under the age of 20.
Example 2 One of the causes of type 1 diabetes are genetics.
Scientist suspect that heredity plays a major role in
type 1 diabetes and researchers have found several
genes that appear to increase the risk of type 1 .
Example 3 Another cause is viruses.
Type 1 diabetes often strikes shortly after a viral
infection.
The viruses that cause this are mumps, German
measles, and a close relative of the virus that causes
polio
Example 4 Another cause is chemicals and drugs.
Studies show that ingestion of pyrinimil, a poison used
to kill rats, can trigger type 1 diabetes.
So can the prescription drug pentamidine, used to treat
pneumonia.
Example 5 The last cause is cows milk.
Cows milk contains a protein similar to a protein found
on beta cells.
Exposure to cows milk during infancy may increase the
risk of type 1 diabetes (Diabetes Research Institute).
Body Paragraph 2 (9 Sentences)
There are many different procedures that can be taken
for the diagnosis of diabetes.
A series of light flashes, each at a different wavelength
is used to excite various proteins in the eye, each
according to a particular length and the proteins emit
fluorescent light.
The pattern of light emissions reflects the distribution
of carious proteins, which changes according to
various psychological conditions (Scientific American
Medical 22).
This new method is based on synchronous fluorescent
spectrometry, which combines a detector with a light
source to measure the intensity of light emitted by
proteins in the eye from each wavelength shown into
the eye.
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A computer then compares the patient’s peaks and


valleys of such measurements with corresponding
spectra form normal and diabetic eyes.
Any one of the following three tests shows the diagnosis
values for diabetes: a measurement of fasting plasma
glucose, a blood test done after not eating for 8 hours,
showing more than 125 mg/dl, and a oral glucose
tolerance test after the person drinks a sugar solution
containing 75 grams in glucose in which the blood
sugar levels is more than 199 mg/dl at 2 hours
(Matinas 28).
Two abnormal test results, using any of the three tests
done on two different days, are needed to make the
diagnosis for diabetes.
A screening test consisting of 50 g oral glucose
followed by a plasma glucose determination 1 hour
later.
A special test is needed for the diagnosis of gestational
diabetes (Stenger 2 A value of greater than 140 mg, 1
hour after the 50 g load indicates the need for larger
tests.
Body Paragraph 3 (26 Sentences)
Second type (Topic sentence) The second type of diabetes that will be talked about
will be type 2 diabetes, or non-insulin dependent
diabetes
90 to 95 percent of people with diabetes have type 2
diabetes (Romeo).
Example 1 Type 2 diabetes produce insulin but the cells in their
bodies are insulin resistant, which means they don’t
respond properly to the hormone, so glucose
accumulates in their blood.
Insulin resistance increases as weight increases and
physical activity decreases.
All I know is that their most recent album features a
guy on the cover receiving a lobotomy by machines.
Example 2 Many people with type 2 diabetes have sedentary
lifestyles and are obese
Some people with type 2 diabetes must inject insulin,
but most can control the disease through a combination
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of weight loss exercise, and prescription oral diabetes


medication.
Example 3 Scientists are not really sure what causes type 2
diabetes but they do know that it runs in families.
Example 4 Some risk factors for type 2 are genetics, age, and race
(Greenberger 113).
Example 5 The age that type 2 mostly affects is people that are
over 30 years old.
Example 6 The race that type 2 strikes mostly is Native Americans,
African Americans, and Hispanics.
Example 7 Another risk factor is women who have had gestational
diabetes or women who have given birth to babies
weighing 9 pounds or less.
Example 8 A common risk factor is the use of certain drugs.
These drugs include thiadize, diuretics, and steroids
that may contribute to type 2 diabetes.
Body Paragraph 5 This paragraph tells how patients and their families are
affected by type 2 diabetes. (5 Sentences)
Example 9 Physically this disease has affected the patient by
causing blurred vision, and neuropathy in his feet, and
also a tingling feeling in the tips of his fingers (G.
Gorton).
Neuropathy is the destruction of nerves which means
that you cannot feel anything in that area, in this case
his feet.
Emotionally it has affected the patient, because he fears
amputation of his limbs if it will be needed.
Otherwise it has not affected him.
Economically it has not really affected the patient
because he is with a good insurance company, which
pays for all of his expenses.
Socially it has affected the patient because he cannot
go out and eat heavy foods or have hard liquor with his
family or friends as often.
The patient has been using traditional treatment for his
disease.
He does not take any insulin injection or any other
shots and only takes one pill per day.
Emotionally the family feels sorry for the patient, that
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he is not able do all the fun things everybody else does


(R. Gorton).
Spiritually it has affected the family by trying to do
everything they can for the patient to make him feel
more comfortable.
It is important for family and friends to help the patient
feel as comfortable as they can and not to feel left out.
Body Paragraph 4 (9 Sentences)
Third type (Topic sentence) The third type of diabetes is called gestational diabetes
and it only develops in women that are pregnant
Nearly 135,000 women develop gestational diabetes
each year..
Example 1 Typically it clears up on its own after women have
delivered the baby (Grisewood and Dempsey 508).
Example 2 Studies have shown that about 40 percent of women
with gestational diabetes go on to develop type 2
diabetes within 15 years.
All pregnant women should be tested for gestational
diabetes between their 24th and 28th week of
pregnancy.
Keeping your weight down, eating healthy, and
exercising regularly may help prevent insulin
resistance and the development of diabetes.
There are 3 risk factors for gestational diabetes.
Example 3 The first one is genetics, which runs in families
(Parkers 159).
Example 4 The second risk factor is obesity because it increases
insulin resistance.
Body Paragraph 5 (5 Sentences)
Example 5 The third risk factor is race or ethnicity. Hispanic
Americans, Native Americans, and African Americans
are at an increased risk
There is really one cause of gestational diabetes.
Pregnant women produce various hormones essential
to the baby’s growth (Williams 67).
Example 6 This cause is hormones.
Pregnant women produce various hormones essential
to the baby’s growth (Williams 67).
However, these hormones may also make it hard for the
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mother to properly use insulin, causing insulin


resistance.
Body Paragraph 6 (12 Sentences)
Regular exercise is crucial to the management of type 1
and type 2 diabetes.
Exercise increases cellular insulin sensitivity, which
can help the patient reduce the dose of insulin or oral
medication (CNN).
It decreases the risk of cardiovascular disease, by far
the leading killer of people with diabetes.
It burns calories, which helps with weight control, and
it has an anti-depressant mood elevating effect, which
improves self-esteem (Tips on Coordinating Exercise).
But exercise can also increase risk of hypoglycemic
crises.
Aggravated ketoacid can cause bleeding into the eye on
those patients with proliferative retinopathy.
So, while diabetics should exercise regularly, they also
need to exercise prudently (Mason 62)
Everyone with diabetes respond individually to exercise
Beyond the need to exercise, no generalization applies
to everyone all the time
Too much exercise is not too good for your body either.
You need to have breaks where you can rest.
The patient always needs to check their blood sugar
and blood pressure before and after each time the
patient exercises. They cannot let the glucose be too
low and not too high.
Concluding Paragraph (8 Sentences)
Summary of the essay This paper discussed types 1 and 2 diabetes and
gestational diabetes, their causes, diagnosis,
treatments, and how they affect the patient
The first type of diabetes that has been talked about is
type 1 diabetes and steps that can be taken to diagnose
diabetes.
The second type of diabetes is type 2 diabetes and how
it effects the patient.
The third type of diabetes is gestational diabetes and
how exercise can help control diabetes.
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(Topic sentence) Now you have recognized what diabetes is and what the
categories are that it is classified in.
Summary of the essay : solution I believe that diabetes is not a harmful disease if it is
taken care of.
Future Statement If patients ignore the fact, or do not know that they
have diabetes and keep on eating foods that they are
not supposed to and are not exercising, they will not get
too far before a really serious injury occurs to them.
Future Statement I know a lot of people that have had diabetes for years,
but they just watch what they eat, and either inject
insulin into their bodies or take some kind of pill, and
they are fine.

THESIS STATEMENT

Basically the thesis statement is appear early in the essay and it conveys two kinds of
information which is topic and viewpoint.

Topic : Many of us do not clearly know

Viewpoint : what diabetes is and the different categories that it is classified in.

Thesis Statement : Many of us do not clearly know what diabetes is and the different categories
that it is classified in.

The author expressed his thesis statement as a debatable claim, which is the author debate about
most the us did not the diabetes category and how is it classified.

TOPIC SENTENCES & SUPPORTING DETAILS

Many of us do not clearly know what diabetes


is and the different categories that it is
classified in.”

Type 1 diabetes are a The second type of The third type of


family history of the diabetes that will be diabetes is called
disease, the white race talked about will be gestational diabetes
and being at an age less type 2 diabetes, or and it only develops
than 20. non-insulin in women that are
dependent diabetes pregnant.
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Topic Sentence Supporting Details


Body paragraph 1 The author point out the supporting details by
giving fact

Type 1 diabetes are a family history of the Half the people diagnosed with type 1 diabetes
disease, the white race and being at an age are under the age of 20.
less than 20.
One of the causes of type 1 diabetes are
genetics.

Another cause is viruses.

Another cause is chemicals and drugs.

The last cause is cows milk.


Body paragraph 3 The author point out the supporting details by
giving fact

The second type of diabetes that will be talked Type 2 diabetes produce insulin but the cells in
about will be type 2 diabetes, or non-insulin their bodies are insulin resistant, which means
dependent diabetes they don’t respond properly to the hormone, so
glucose accumulates in their blood.

Many people with type 2 diabetes have


sedentary lifestyles and are obese

Scientists are not really sure what causes type


2 diabetes but they do know that it runs in
families.

Some risk factors for type 2 are genetics, age,


and race (Greenberger 113).

The age that type 2 mostly affects is people that


are over 30 years old.

The race that type 2 strikes mostly is Native


Americans, African Americans, and Hispanics.

Another risk factor is women who have had


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gestational diabetes or women who have given


birth to babies weighing 9 pounds or less.

A common risk factor is the use of certain


drugs.

Physically this disease has affected the patient


by causing blurred vision, and neuropathy in
his feet, and also a tingling feeling in the tips
of his fingers (G. Gorton).
Body paragraph 4 The author point out the supporting details by
giving fact

The third type of diabetes is called gestational Typically it clears up on its own after women
diabetes and it only develops in women that have delivered the baby (Grisewood and
are pregnant. Dempsey 508).

Studies have shown that about 40 percent of


women with gestational diabetes go on to
develop type 2 diabetes within 15 years.

The first one is genetics, which runs in families


(Parkers 159).

The second risk factor is obesity because it


increases insulin resistance.

The third risk factor is race or ethnicity.


Hispanic Americans, Native Americans, and
African Americans are at an increased risk

This cause is hormones.


Concluding Paragraph The author point out the supporting details by
giving fact

Now you have recognized what diabetes is and The first type of diabetes that has been talked
what the categories are that it is classified in. about is type 1 diabetes and steps that can be
taken to diagnose diabetes.

The second type of diabetes is type 2 diabetes


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and how it effects the patient.

The third type of diabetes is gestational


diabetes and how exercise can help control
diabetes.

STRENGTH AND WEAKNESS

Strength Weakness
 The author sort the category in same  The author did not mention how to
paragraph and easy to reader to solve the problem for the type 3 essay
understand the type and the category  Most of the word that using by an
 The author also mention again the author is hard to understand because
thesis statement at the end of the there are more science term in the essay
paragraph in concluding paragraph
 The author support the essay by enclose
the evidence
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Diabetes and Type

Diabetes is little or no ability to move glucose out of the blood into the red blood cells. Nearly 16
million people have diabetes in the United States, which narrows it down to about 1 out of every
seventeen people. About 2,150 new cases are diagnosed each day. Many of us do not clearly
know what diabetes is and the different categories that it is classified in.

The first type of diabetes that will be discussed is type 1 diabetes and steps that can be taken to
diagnose diabetes. The second type of diabetes that will be talked about will be type 2 diabetes
and how it effects patients. The third type of diabetes is gestational diabetes and how exercise
can help control diabetes. This paper discusses type 1 diabetes, type 2 diabetes, and gestational
diabetes, their causes, diagnosis, treatments, and how they effect the patient.
The first type of diabetes that will be talked about will be type 1 diabetes or insulin-dependent
diabetes mellitus. People with type 1 diabetes don’t produce insulin and need regular shots of it
to keep their blood glucose levels normal (What is Diabetes, Type 1). Almost half of the people
with this type of diabetes are aged 20 and younger (Bernstein 167). That is why type 1 diabetes
was once called juvenile onset diabetes, but the name has been dropped because it also strikes
young adults. Type 1 diabetes accounts for only about 5 to 10 percent of the disease. The vast
majority has type 2 diabetes. Risk factors for type 1 diabetes are a family history of the disease,
the white race and being at an age less than 20. Half the people diagnosed with type 1 diabetes
are under the age of 20. One of the causes of type 1 diabetes are genetics. Scientist suspect that
heredity plays a major role in type 1 diabetes and researchers have found several genes that
appear to increase the risk of type 1 . Another cause is viruses. Type 1 diabetes often strikes
shortly after a viral infection. The viruses that cause this are mumps, German measles, and a
close relative of the virus that causes polio. Another cause is chemicals and drugs. Studies show
that ingestion of pyrinimil, a poison used to kill rats, can trigger type 1 diabetes. So can the
prescription drug pentamidine, used to treat pneumonia. The last cause is cows milk. Cows milk
contains a protein similar to a protein found on beta cells. Exposure to cows milk during infancy
may increase the risk of type 1 diabetes (Diabetes Research Institute).

There are many different procedures that can be taken for the diagnosis of diabetes. A series of
light flashes, each at a different wavelength is used to excite various proteins in the eye, each
according to a particular length and the proteins emit fluorescent light. The pattern of light
emissions reflects the distribution of carious proteins, which changes according to various
psychological conditions (Scientific American Medical 22). This new method is based on
synchronous fluorescent spectrometry, which combines a detector with a light source to measure
the intensity of light emitted by proteins in the eye from each wavelength shown into the eye. A
computer then compares the patient’s peaks and valleys of such measurements with
corresponding spectra form normal and diabetic eyes. Any one of the following three tests shows
the diagnosis values for diabetes: a measurement of fasting plasma glucose, a blood test done
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after not eating for 8 hours, showing more than 125 mg/dl, and a oral glucose tolerance test after
the person drinks a sugar solution containing 75 grams in glucose in which the blood sugar levels
is more than 199 mg/dl at 2 hours (Matinas 28). Two abnormal test results, using any of the three
tests done on two different days, are needed to make the diagnosis for diabetes. A special test is
needed for the diagnosis of gestational diabetes (Stenger 2). A screening test consisting of 50 g
oral glucose followed by a plasma glucose determination 1 hour later. A value of greater than
140 mg, 1 hour after the 50 g load indicates the need for larger tests.

The second type of diabetes that will be talked about will be type 2 diabetes, or non-insulin
dependent diabetes. 90 to 95 percent of people with diabetes have type 2 diabetes (Romeo). Type
2 diabetes produce insulin but the cells in their bodies are insulin resistant, which means they
don’t respond properly to the hormone, so glucose accumulates in their blood. Insulin resistance
increases as weight increases and physical activity decreases. Many people with type 2 diabetes
have sedentary lifestyles and are obese. Some people with type 2 diabetes must inject insulin, but
most can control the disease through a combination of weight loss exercise, and prescription oral
diabetes medication. Scientists are not really sure what causes type 2 diabetes but they do know
that it runs in families. . Some risk factors for type 2 are genetics, age, and race (Greenberger
113). The age that type 2 mostly affects is people that are over 30 years old. The race that type 2
strikes mostly is Native Americans, African Americans, and Hispanics. Another risk factor is
women who have had gestational diabetes or women who have given birth to babies weighing 9
pounds or less. A common risk factor is the use of certain drugs. These drugs include thiadize,
diuretics, and steroids that may contribute to type 2 diabetes. This paragraph tells how patients
and their families are affected by type 2 diabetes. Physically this disease has affected the patient
by causing blurred vision, and neuropathy in his feet, and also a tingling feeling in the tips of his
fingers (G. Gorton). Neuropathy is the destruction of nerves which means that you cannot feel
anything in that area, in this case his feet. Emotionally it has affected the patient, because he
fears amputation of his limbs if it will be needed. Otherwise it has not affected him.
Economically it has not really affected the patient because he is with a good insurance company,
which pays for all of his expenses. Socially it has affected the patient because he cannot go out
and eat heavy foods or have hard liquor with his family or friends as often. The patient has been
using traditional treatment for his disease. He does not take any insulin injection or any other
shots and only takes one pill per day. Emotionally the family feels sorry for the patient, that he is
not able do all the fun things everybody else does (R. Gorton). Spiritually it has affected the
family by trying to do everything they can for the patient to make him feel more comfortable. It
is important for family and friends to help the patient feel as comfortable as they can and not to
feel left out.

The third type of diabetes is called gestational diabetes and it only develops in women that are
pregnant. Nearly 135,000 women develop gestational diabetes each year. Typically it clears up
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on its own after women have delivered the baby (Grisewood and Dempsey 508). Studies have
shown that about 40 percent of women with gestational diabetes go on to develop type 2 diabetes
within 15 years. All pregnant women should be tested for gestational diabetes between their 24th
and 28th week of pregnancy. Keeping your weight down, eating healthy, and exercising
regularly may help prevent insulin resistance and the development of diabetes. There are 3 risk
factors for gestational diabetes. The first one is genetics, which runs in families (Parkers 159).
The second risk factor is obesity because it increases insulin resistance.

The third risk factor is race or ethnicity. Hispanic Americans, Native Americans, and African
Americans are at an increased risk. There is really one cause of gestational diabetes. This cause
is hormones. Pregnant women produce various hormones essential to the baby’s growth
(Williams 67). However, these hormones may also make it hard for the mother to properly use
insulin, causing insulin resistance.

Regular exercise is crucial to the management of type 1 and type 2 diabetes. Exercise increases
cellular insulin sensitivity, which can help the patient reduce the dose of insulin or oral
medication (CNN). It decreases the risk of cardiovascular disease, by far the leading killer of
people with diabetes. It burns calories, which helps with weight control, and it has an anti-
depressant mood elevating effect, which improves self-esteem (Tips on Coordinating Exercise).
But exercise can also increase risk of hypoglycemic crises. Aggravated ketoacid can cause
bleeding into the eye on those patients with proliferative retinopathy. So, while diabetics should
exercise regularly, they also need to exercise prudently (Mason 62). Everyone with diabetes
respond individually to exercise. Beyond the need to exercise, no generalization applies to
everyone all the time. Too much exercise is not too good for your body either. You need to have
breaks where you can rest. The patient always needs to check their blood sugar and blood
pressure before and after each time the patient exercises. They cannot let the glucose be too low
and not too high.

This paper discussed types 1 and 2 diabetes and gestational diabetes, their causes, diagnosis,
treatments, and how they affect the patient. The first type of diabetes that has been talked about
is type 1 diabetes and steps that can be taken to diagnose diabetes. The second type of diabetes is
type 2 diabetes and how it effects the patient. The third type of diabetes is gestational diabetes
and how exercise can help control diabetes. Now you have recognized what diabetes is and what
the categories are that it is classified in. I believe that diabetes is not a harmful disease if it is
taken care of. If patients ignore the fact, or do not know that they have diabetes and keep on
eating foods that they are not supposed to and are not exercising, they will not get too far before
a really serious injury occurs to them. I know a lot of people that have had diabetes for years, but
they just watch what they eat, and either inject insulin into their bodies or take some kind of pill,
and they are fine.

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