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Parents have to send their children to the primary school when they are six

years old. My parents did the same as the others so I will tell about my
primary school briefly.
My primary school is in a province about 600 kilometres from the capital.
There were some play-grounds to do the activities with friends and the
grounds for assembling all of the students at 0800 hours to respect the
national flag and sing the national Anthem. I wore the uniform with blue
trousers and white shirt. I studied mathematics, geography, history and
language. My favourite teachers was Nat. She taught me and my friends to
sing many songs. I liked to lay soccer at that time but now I have just to
look because of my age.
These are the part of my life that I love very much because I had a lot of
fun. Just only thought, they make me smile.

Strengths
Weaknesses
Sufficient command of vocabulary and sentence
Mistakes in word choice eg. Just only thought, they make
construction to communicate adequately
me smile.
Correct use of tenses (able to combine past, present and Mistakes in word order eg. I have just to look because of
future correctly) eg. Parents have to send their children to my age.
the primary school when they are six years old. My parents
did the same as the others, so I will tell about my primary
school briefly.
Control of both simple and a longer construction eg. My
favourite teacher was Nat. My primary school is in a
province about 600 kilometres from the capital.
Some ideas show some linking of ideas eg. There were Use of paragraphing is inconsistent eg. the body paragraph
some play-grounds to do the activities with friends and the begins with describing the location and the playgrounds,
grounds for assembling all of the students at 0800 hours to then jumps to describing the uniforms students wear, so
respect the national flag and sing the national Anthem.
the planning of paragraph content is weak. Thus the
Use of some linking devices eg. so, but, and, because eg. content is unevenly developed.
I liked to play soccer at that time but now I have just to
look because of my age.
The reader is able to follow the information easily; main
ideas and some supporting details are evident
Overall assessment:
Satisfactory (Intermediate ADFELPS level 6)