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TarahAniya
Mrs.SheilaYuasa
ExpositoryWriting1
7December2015
WalkingtheLineofOnlinePrivacy
InrecentdiscussionsofonlineprivacyregardinganupcomingsitecalledPeeple,a
controversialissuehasbeenwhatcrossesthelineofconsentandprivacy.Thissiteaimstocreate
areviewsystemforindividualpeoplemuchlikewhenoneisonlineshoppingforaproduct.On
onehand,somearguethatwhatthissitepromotesishonesty,andthatitwillhelppeopletogetto
knowapersonbeforetheyevenmeetthem.Fromthisperspective,privacyisnotaverybigissue
becausethereviewsthatarepostedarejustcollectedandcentralizedpublicknowledgethat
allowsyoutoseewhosomeoneiswithoutmakingamillionphonecalls.Thiskeepsinmindthat
thesitewillbefilteringoutanyprivateinformation.Ontheotherhand,however,otherscontend
thatthiscreatesanenvironmentwhereinformationaboutpeoplewillbeunconsentuallyposted
onlineforanyonetosee.InthewordsofDewey,anexpertonthistopic,Itsinherently
invasive,evenwhencomplementary.Anditsobjectifyingandreductiveinthemannerofall
onlinereviews.Accordingtothisview,Deweyapparentlyassumesthatthistypeofsystemwill
createanenvironmentwhereitfeelslikeyouareconstantlybeingjudgedandfaulted.For
instance,ifyouaresomeonewhoisveryselfconscious,thiscouldbedisastrousforyour
confidenceinpublic.Insummary,then,theissueiswhetherthePeeplesitemodelwillactually
behelpfulorsimplyviolatethepersonalprivacyofindividuals.


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Myownviewisthatthistypeofsiteisanoutrageousviolationofpersonalprivacy.
ThoughIconcedeDeweysclaimthatbanningbadbehaviors(profanity,sexism,privatehealth
conditions,etc.)willhelptofilteroutinformationdeemedtoopersonal,Istillmaintainthatthis
sitesmodelcrossesthelineofhavingaconsensualonlinepresence.Deweymentions
theexampleofhowonlinereviewsareonlygivenbypeoplewhoeitherloveorhatewhatis
beingreviewed,whichIfindvalidbasedonmyownexperiencewithstatisticsbecausein
conductingasurvey,thisiscalledvoluntarybias,anerroneouswaytoaccuratelyrepresentwhat
mostpeopleactuallythink.Althoughsomeparentsmightobjecttotheideaofbanningthese
typesofwebsites,Iwouldreplythatwhilethereispotentialforittobegood,thesetypesofsites
thatwalkthelineonprivacytendtocausemoreharmthangood.Ultimately,whatisatstake
hereistheconstitutionalfreedominAmericatobeincontrolofyourpersonalprivacy.

Imagineeveryinteractionyouveeverhad
suddenlyopentothescrutinyofthepublic
(Dewey1).

Thisquoteutilizespathostomakealasting
effectonthereader.Thereaderisprompted
toinstinctivelythinkofalltheembarrassing
orbadthingstheyhavedoneintheirlifetime,
andhavingthatexperienceavailabletothe
public,whichswaysthemtoagreewiththe
authorthatthesitePeepleviolatespersonal
privacy.

Thatjustificationhasntworkedoutsowell,
though,forthevariousedgyappsthathave
trieditbeforeAfteratsunamiofcriticism
creepy,toxic,genderhateinaprettier
packageLuluaddedanautomatedoptout
featureLulufurtherrelentedbyletting
usersrateonlythosemenwhooptin(Dewey
7).

Thisquoteusesanexampleofanappwitha
similarconceptthatfailedmiserablybecause
oftheprivacyconcernsassociatedwithit.
ThisswaysthereadertobelievethatPeeple
willhaveasimilarfate,andreinforcesthe
factthatthereareglaringprivacyconcerns
withthesite.


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Vocab
Vehement(adj.):
Showingstrongfeelingforceful,passionate,orintense
asCordraywillreassureyou,inthemostvehementterms(Dewey3).
Hewasvehementabouttellingusnottoforget.
Theyvehementlyshoutedtheirhatetowardeachotheracrosstheroom.
Dystopian(adj.):
Describesanimaginarysocietythatisasdehumanizingandasunpleasantas
possible
Itsaweirdlydystopianvisiontodelivertoastrangeratasportsbar(Dewey8).
Hedescribedadystopiansocietyjustontheoutskirtsofwheretheyhadtraveled.
Therewasapossibilityofaverydystopianoutcomeifeverythingwentterriblywrong.