TONE OF VOICE
WRITING TOOL
CONTENTS
Jot down the audience youre writing to, the benefits (not features) to the
audience of that product/service, and the action you want them to take.
Difference between benefits and features:
Feature: These shoes are water resistant!
Benefit: Your feet wont get wet and will stay warm during inclement
weather
Step 2
Determine the media you are using because youll modulate the voice based on
formality. Add the formality you chose to your list from Step 1:
Step 3
Read over the audience profile and the key messages to this audience, plus
a little more in-depth about the pillars to decide which one makes the most
sense for your copy (see appendix). Jot down the key messages you want to
use for this audience.
Step 4
Now that you have an idea of what you want to say and some key phrases and
messages, just start writing! Write sentences and paragraphs even if they are
not perfect at first. In fact, when you first start writing a draft, dont try to edit as
you write. Just write, even if its you writing out loud to yourselffor example,
writing something like: I dont know why I cant get started with this project.
Its not that hard. I should be able to say this easily. All I want to say is that I
appreciate the job hes doing for the department but that his inability to arrive
on time to meetings discredits him. What I really am trying to say is this etc.
etc. Once you get into the revision stage, you can edit!
STEPS 5, 6, AND 7 ARE EDITING STEPS:
Step 5
Is it active? With active voice, the subject performs the action of the
sentence; in passive voice, the action and its object move to the front. The
active voice is always preferred. For example, instead of saying The shirt
that John is wearing is red you would say John is wearing a red shirt. Do
you see how the verb comes first instead of the noun (wearing as the verb
vs. shirt as the noun)?
Is it interesting? Not only is using to be and its variations one of the surest
ways to write in passive voice, it also doesnt hold its own against other
verbs. Choose big, bold words to express an idea not only more engagingly
and precisely.
Does it sound like our pillars i.e. dynamic, pioneering, and precise: does
it sound like the leader of a company? Would it inspire you to join a cause?
Could you imagine a person actually saying this? As a reader, would you
walk away feeling like you learned something? Could a reader summarize
our message in a few sentences? Do we sound proud of the role we play in
industry? Do we sound inspired and encouraging? Can you tell that were
optimistic about the future of industry?
Step 6
Insert some on-brand words (please keep in mind that these arent the only
words you can useI would suggest using these and then also using your
thesaurus to find synonyms for them): Ahead Strive Hone Inspire Reach
Explore Learn Discover Ultimate Guide Rigor Heights Innovate Impact Move
Power Partner Possibilities Progress Lead Act Forward Upward Agile Ambition
Step 7
When you use bullets, do not put periods at the end, even if they are full
sentences:
Susie, these shoes are amazing and a must-have addition to your winter
wardrobe:
Youll never want to take them offthey are extremely comfortable and
warm
Theyre best worn without socks for extra warm toes
Step 8
Speak confidently
PIONEERING
Dont
Be frenetic/frantic or disorganized
DYNAMIC
PRECISE
Precise
Be specific
Clarify
Support assertions
Dont
Pioneering
Dont
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Challenges
- Staying current with the industry as the
rate of change increases and design
becomes more global
- Shortage of new personnel needed to
replace the ageing workforce of the
mobility engineering profession
- Reduced budgets as corporations are
expected to do more with less
- Government regulations sometimes
mandate difficult technical achievements
- Circumstances demand improved
communication with non-engineers, as
senior managers are increasingly recruited
from non-technical areas
Needs
- Quick access to quality sector-specific
technical information that is reliable,
affordable and easy to find
- Access to standard engineering research
papers, along with a high demand for
application research results
- Forum to interact with other engineers for
idea sharing, discussion and momentum
building
- Lifeline to engineering experts to get
needed answers, quickly
- Personal recognition within the industry
and increased publication opportunities to
enhance reputation and prestige
Communication considerations
- Professionals must be motivated to
volunteer, engage and get involved
- Paper and electronic formats are
consumed equally
- Curated content is increasingly valuable,
as information becomes more abundant
- High-quality content is readily available
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Practical
Knowledge
Powering
Innovation
Collaborative
Network
Simple and
Straightforward
Serve as a
comprehensive source
for high-quality technical
standards, engineering
research and application
testing knowledge
developed by
engineers, for
engineers
Cultivate an intimate
understanding of the
needs of mobility industry
professionals to ensure
the content of our
knowledge library is
relevant and useful
Nurture a community of
mobility engineering
professionals and
provide a forum for you
to share ideas, identify
prospects and
opportunities, and
build your professional
network
Establish you as a
leading expert in your
field and a force for
improving the knowledge
base of the profession
through your association,
membership and
volunteer work with SAE
International
Maintain a repository of
knowledge that is the
first place your peers
look for engineering
experts and citable
material for their own
research.
Enhance communication
skills by providing
access to high quality
editors and support
staff
Enable you to get your
work published and
then distributed to other
engineering
professionals in your
industry
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Challenges
- Like many of their peers, loan repayment is
a major concern
- Many lack practical, on-the-job experience
- Professional network is largely
underdeveloped
- Soft skills, such as resume writing,
communication skills and basic
management practices, may not be as
advanced as those of their peers from
other areas of study
Needs
- Employment, often in the form of their
first engineering job
- Affirmation that their chosen career
path is the right choice
- Opportunities for hands on learning
- Opportunities for networking
- Mentoring and career advice
- Flexibility in accessing content
Communication considerations
- Flexibility and options are of the utmost
importance
- Cost is a primary concern
- Short attention spans necessitate brief,
effective communication
- This audience seeks out tailored
communications, with information
specifically relevant and practical to them
- Multilingual communications are
increasingly important as membership
becomes more global
- Increased use of videos to communicate
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Practical
Knowledge
Powering
Innovation
Collaborative
Network
Simple and
Straightforward
Bring together
promising young
professionals and
seasoned practitioners
to help build your
professional network
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3. Academia: Profile
This audience consists of engineering professors who instruct students and, more importantly, publish papers. Some of these individuals may have
become very familiar with SAE International through advising students in SAE International sponsored programs, such as the Collegiate Design
Series (CDS). The audience also includes department heads who are not only concerned with personal advancement, but also with enhancing the
standing of their department to compete for students, talent, grants and government research funding.
As researchers and professors, publication is extremely important. It serves as the primary factor in tenure decisions, salary level, career
advancement and industry acclaim. Additionally, the quality and frequency of publication are the primary drivers of institutional reputation and
prestige.
Challenges
- Takes significant time to get work
published and disseminated to appropriate
audiences
- Need to bring acclaim to the institution
through their individual efforts
- Getting credit for the work that they do
- Institutions must attract high-profile talent
in a competitive market
Needs
- Recognition and commendation through
publication
- Qualified students and promising post
doctoral candidates
- Access to a large network of global
mobility professionals
- Access to the best career opportunities
- Access to a reliable and extensive library
of knowledge
Communication considerations
- Likelihood of citation and peer review
drives publication submissions
- Opportunities must be seen as high-profile
and high traffic
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Practical
Knowledge
Powering
Innovation
Collaborative
Network
Simple and
Straightforward
Focus on commercially
relevant technology
means your work is
used by the industry
and you get recognition
Leverage a robust
network of peer
reviewers, helping
your papers and
studies move from
manuscript to
publication, faster
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Challenges
- Constant deadlines add an increased level
of pressure
- Working with fewer resources but
expected to deliver high quality content
- May lack knowledge of SAE International
- Accuracy is of the utmost importance
- Messages must be concise to gain traction
- Chosen topics must be made interesting
and accessible to
non-engineers
Needs
- A single repository of knowledge to save
time
- Quick, reliable and straightforward
answers and information
Communication considerations
- May not be aware of all that SAE
International has to offer
- Prefer on-demand content that can be
delivered instantly and cheaply
- Topics and messages must remain onbrand with SAE International
- Need to be concise and to the point
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Practical
Knowledge
Powering
Innovation
Collaborative
Network
Simple and
Straightforward
Enable deeper
understanding of issues
and encourage
constant improvement
across both the mobility
industry and mobility
engineering profession
Foster a network of
collaborators, including
industry experts and
other leading
organizations
Supply knowledge
backed by 100 years of
industry leadership
Test and verify our
information so you can
rely on its accuracy
Facilitate access to
industry experts, written
standards or other
needed facts quickly
Use resources to
empower industry
experts to solve industry
challenges, and continue
to improve on that work
to unlock future
challenges and
opportunities
Pledge to enable
answers and dig
deeper to improve best
practice
Connect engineering
professionals,
academia and students
with each other to
encourage collaboration
and build networks with
the best and brightest
minds
Create communities
that allow industry
experts and students to
share knowledge and
continue to move the
industry forward
Encourage innovation
by growing a knowledge
eco-system that is
always up to date
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Challenges
- Want to be seen as a valuable employee
that excels at his/her job
- Definition of what is expected of
employees to help achieve the companys
goals is insufficient
- Lack of engineering background makes
communicating in technical language more
difficult
- Employees contend with siloed thinking
that stems from the organizations
structure
- The successes of individual business units
are currently prioritized over the success of
the overall organization
- Budget cuts, and resulting job security
concerns, threaten morale
- Culture and business planning is evolving,
necessitating a change in current practices
Needs
- Recognition and affirmation from
managers, and the company, that they are
contributing to SAE Internationals success
- Guidance on what the organization
expects of them and how to behave in an
on-brand manner
- Permission to go against traditional
thinking and behaviors to act in a more
collaborative manner
- Reassurance of job security
- Organizational focus to more easily
establish goals and objectives
- Guidance from senior management on the
direction of the organization and a clear
articulation of the role of each business
unit
- Direction for individual business units
- Definition of organizational priorities
Communication considerations
- SAE International must be explained
holistically to engage and energize
employees
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Practical
Knowledge
Powering
Innovation
Collaborative
Network
Simple and
Straightforward
Provide a platform
enabling leading experts to
solve industry challenges,
and continue to improve on
that work to unlock future
challenges and
opportunities
Contribute to a team,
organization and industry
working towards a
common objective
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Challenges
- Crafting, evaluating and implementing
practical policies
- Diversity of regulatory bodies and
overlapping authorities prevents a unified
standard development process
- This audiences work is often inherently
political
- Election cycles dramatically affect priorities
and budgets
Needs
- Experts that can be trusted
- Industry consensus and standards to make
decisions
- Unassailable facts, figures and analysis
from a neutral party
Communication considerations
- Regulators may have limited (or no)
awareness of SAE International
- Procurement restrictions impact
communication effectiveness
- Audience may require testimony, as well
as individual or group certification
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Practical
Knowledge
Powering
Innovation
Collaborative
Network
Simple and
Straightforward
Generate resources
that are relevant to
the commercial
needs and
considerations facing
the mobility industry
today
Foster a network of
engineering experts
that have deep
experience and can
successfully work
with diverse teams
to build consensus
and arrive at the best
possible solution
Deliver unvarnished,
unspun truths that
serve to develop and
improve upon the best
solutions
Focus on advancing
commercially viable
technology to
advance personal
and commercial
mobility
Work with leading
industry experts and
professionals to
ensure that
information is rooted in
real-world, practical
applications
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7. Librarians: Profile
Librarians typically manage large institutional libraries. They often hold advanced degrees and are tasked with purchasing and maintaining
knowledge resources for an institution.
This non-technical group faces reduced budgets, shifting business models and increased demands from department heads and managers. A lack
of knowledge often leads them to seek nonexistent solutions or unsustainable price points.
Challenges
- Reduced budgets
- Deeply embedded resistance to
subscription based content
- Communicating in a technical world
Needs
- Customizable content
- Piece-meal pricing
- Bulk buying discounts
Communication considerations
- Roughly 66% purchase SAE International
content through a reseller
- Audience has little knowledge of the value
of SAE International content to their
constituents
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Practical
Knowledge
Powering
Innovation
Collaborative
Network
Simple and
Straightforward
Provide multi-sector
coverage, featuring
flexible access to the
materials users need
Serve as an
important
connection to the
industry for your
institution
Provide access to
leading industry
experts and
professionals
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