UPM-CALC/SEM2/2015-16/CEL2106/WORKSHEET-WEEK11

Worksheet - Week 11
Below is a sample of a motivational letter. In a group of three, edit the underlined
clauses/sentences to make the letter more effective and persuasive.
No. 380 Lot 321
Jalan 45/104
40460 Shah Alam
Selangor, Malaysia
10th May 2016
Admission Office
Faculty of Mathematics
University of Berlin
Rue de Pont
Tuilleries Jardin
67397 Paris, France
Dear Sir/Madam,
Motivational Letter for Scholarship
I was very glad when I saw this scholarship opportunity and with this letter, I would
like to express my gratitude to the Alumni Foundation of UoB for this programme. I
am a graduate of the University of Sarajevo with a degree in mathematics (Hons.).
Since I have quite a strong academic background in mathematics, (1) I think a
Master in Advanced Mathematics is good for me. My ultimate goal is to work with
research based organisations in the applied mathematics sector as well as in local
universities in order to improve research and human resource capacity building
through training.
(2) It is rather difficult for me to further my studies as I have no money to fund myself.
Therefore, I will be very grateful to be provided with a scholarship to improve my
education and career prospects. (3) In the future, I will be able to apply the
knowledge gained in my education in my home countrys public sector or in a
university.
(4) Nevertheless, this scholarship will give me a chance to interact with other
academicians all over the world. Networking of this nature is very important for the
integration of different ideas and perspectives pertaining to diverse global issues.

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(5) Worry not as I will utilise the scholarship properly. I believe that being a student in
your department would not only empower my career development, but would give me
the framework to develop my potentials fully. Moreover, I feel that as a Masters
student at your university, I can benefit from the numerous challenging career
opportunities.
Once again, I will be very grateful if you are able to give due consideration to this
application. I look forward to a favourable reply.
Yours sincerely,

Mary Wang
Answers:
1. A Master in Advanced Mathematics will enable me to improve and to further my
academic research and skills in Mathematics.
2. Alumni Foundation of UoB for a Master in Advanced Mathematics will surely be a
great financial aid for me to further studies as my family background is poor.
3. Studying the Master in Advanced Mathematics will open the platform to apply my
acquired knowledge and skills in my home countrys public sector or in a
university.
4. Furthermore, this scholarship will greatly enhance my connections with the other
academicians globally for the research in advanced mathematics.
5. If the scholarship is given to me, it will used to further improve my knowledge in

advanced mathematics and to serve the community if possible.