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Student Sample: Grade 3, Narrative This narrative was produced in class, and the writer likely received support from the teacher. n th DIT WAS arm, mg puppys Were, sleo pin: on the 1 ER eo. che @ Ghd a sipters Lasre getin oe rc oe 7 @n oF 4 ed, vead achapter trom ay. Woe ren Gook. When L fin shat the chapter Ltuened out my lamp. L vuldn't gore sleep. weak int the living room aur ery mom geting Ceady) fo Walh out the'door. 1 asked “uhere are you gone “lust per adrive she replied. “She had aworrred exspressan gehen fees new Sombhing was wrenge Thought mag ée if L went ontside and played with my pyppys would forge’ Bbouk moms Worvied ekseressoN and go ty sleep, hen L opened The Sack, door excpected MY PUpPys Maggi an Tucker to jump up gn mee They dideh” combat alle L called) they shill didn't comes Mew TE Knew somthing vras wrongs LZ went and woke up my oad he gaid moms got rt under conical E thought mea hed taken +hem fo thetv et because $omthing Was really wrong. Dad wouldal? fel me ant dng Ber T. went te my room ao Cred» Thats all L remberid about that Owe hep Oy PuppysBanawoy ht because L fil ashkeps 42 next 3, 4 i poorpies worried 4 y S I. nea EL deel Aolanie pes Lote and my mom made & snatch for Steré vy asked od 8 Ugo eee he eu er eyes starte ‘fil ere és as she meme ce 4 esh ovn With S words\L. dan + ne pene burst, inte tebcseSadid Le ed me. we nevey £i'ne the m hs HITS See they will have then Oomes Dident outside and sat 1amoms rocking Charre L cried Some more. Mom Came out of up. She Sat doin and motioned me by Waving her ha ro come andsiton her lape Tis ent Over and cried on her hhoulde re Hf ter donee thet night we weat leping for them) woe Leulda't Find them My dad after geek eegh da a the peord sy osee? picked Them wpe They di nittla eve. a over them leaving because wom Says We can get A pepPys very soor. Annotation The writer of this piece + establishes a situation and introduces the narrator. ONE night when the air was warm, my puppys were sleeping on the back porch... «| turned out my lamp. | wuldn’'t go to sleep. .. . | saw my mom geting ready to walk out the door. ... She had a worrled exspression on her face. | knew somthing was wrong. = organizes an event sequence that unfolds naturally and uses temporal words and phrases to signal event order. © When | opened The back door I excpected my puppys Maggie and Tucker to jump up on me. They didn't come at all. called, they still didn’t come. Now | knew something was wrong. + uses dialogue and description of characters’ actions, thoughts, and feelings to develop ‘experiences and events or show the response of characters to situations. c Lasked “where are you going"? “Just for a drive” she replied. She had a worried exspression on her face. © knew somthing was wrong. © went to my room and cried. 9 The next day | still worried. | worried all through schoo). 0 Her eyes started to fill with tears as she answered my question with 3 words, “I don't know,” she burst into tears. So did |. She hugged me. © went outside and sat in moms rocking chair. | cried some more. © I've got over them leaving because mom says we can get 2 new puppys very soon. + provides a sense of closure. © Ive got over them leaving because mom says we can get 2 new puppys very soon. + demonstrates growing command of the conventions of standard written English (with ‘occasional errors that do not interfore materially with the underlying message).

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