How does the writer try to share her experiences of being at the
race?
Answer:
The writer, Emma Levine has tried to share her experience of being at a
"donkey race in Karachi" in her travel writing piece as mentioned in the
blurb.
Levine has made humour a major element since the beginning of the
extract. The use of humour is exemplified when the write compares this
race to the famous cartoon animations, "Wacky Races". At this point, she
tries to involve the Western culture with that of the Eastern one, by adding
a pinch of Western aspect in a quite humorous and indeed an interesting
manner. Your point about humour is accurate, though slightly repetitive
and a touch vague. To improve: comment on the light-hearted mood of
chaos and cartoonish, unreal element. Link to other quotations that show
the light-hearted, and positive mood (see mark scheme - in the first bullet
point)
Emma shows the time she waits for the race to start with lots and ltos of
curiosity and enthusiasm. The dialogues used are evidences to the team's
anxiousness. For instance, when the team discusses, "We'll open the car
boot ... that's no problem." The dialogues verily highlight the amount
of curiosity they have for the race to start. The use of direct speech gives
a realistic feel to the situation. The waiting time is again accentuated
when the writer adds in, "We waited ... brow of the hill, ...".
The hyperbole made by the word 'eternity' exaggerates and hence
emphasizes on the long time they waited for the race. She shares every
aspect of the experience. This is very good (see mark scheme, bullet point
4)
As soon as the race starts, the writer gives a descriptive feel in the text,
for example: "we spotted two ... in their wake". The description provided
suggests to me that it allows readers to picturize the exact scene in their
minds. This, ultimately adds to their interest and they easily understand
what the writer is sharing with them, her experience. This is a vague
comment and I feel the examiner would want something more specific
(see bullet points seven, eight and nine below)
Emma also gives a bit of facts and useful information which maybe
unknown to some readers, so as to maintain a feel of reality to the text.
An exceptional example is where it says: "... the Kibla donkey ... 40kph".
The use of beneficial and exotic facts brings up the undoubtedly true point
in the readers that the writer has a really good and tight grasp on the
subject. This, consequestly, lends credibility to the text. Ultimately, the