Table of Contents
Be
Concise....................................................................................................................
3/15
Writing Lard: what it is, what causes it, and how to stop doing
it ............... 4/6 Cut unnecessary repetition.................................7
Bury dead phrases..................................................................................8
Revive near/death phrases..................................................................9
Check if modifiers are unnecessary.................................................10
Check level of specifics and detail ................................................................
11/14
Be
Precise.....................................................................................................................
15/20
Jargon ...........................................................................................................
16/18
Precise terminology and definitions................................................19
Use precise terminology correctly...................................................20
Be Direct
...................................................................................................................... 21/46
Use Strong Nouns ........................................................................................
22/25
Use Strong Verbs..........................................................................................
26/28
Use Mostly Active Voice (but know when passive voice is a better choice)
......................... 29/37 Use the Topic Position
................................................................................. 38/40
Use the Stress Position ................................................................................
41/46
Final Advice on How to Improve Your Prose Style.........................47
Be Concise
To be concise means
using only the words
necessary
to meet audience
needs and your purpose
for writing to them.
We l ove lard.
About word
counts and page
length guidelines.
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introduced a new
alternative ch oices
mix together never before none at all
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Such as:
Actually,
Really,
Basically,
Very,
Definitely
Somewhat,
Kind of,
Probably,
Extremely,
Practically.
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Using an unnecessary
level of specifics and
detail isnt lard because
in some
contexts, these would be
needed.
Lard is never
necessary except in
pies.
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2
To determine if specifics
and detail are at the
right level, you need to
think about audience
and your purpose for
writing.
Example:
A mailing address is specific and
contains the details necessary for
someone to send you mail or a
package.
The specifics and details of a
mailing address, however, would
not be enough to identify
property in a mortgage contract.
Be Precise
To be precise means to
use technical
terminology
(jargon) appropriate to the
audiences knowledge.
Examples of Jargon
Impedance buffer
Unity-gain amplifier
Binary fission
Chemical kinetics
Facultative anaerobe
Ionic bone
Instead, translate
difficult
concepts for non-specialized
audiences by writing (and
speaking) in plain English.
Agglomerate:
small particles bonded into an integrated mass
Aggregate:
coarse particles such as sand or gravel
Hydraulic cement:
cement that bonds by a reaction with water
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Be Direct
Strong nouns
Strong verbs
Stress position
Weak nouns:
Weak:
This study shows . . .
The proposed research involves
Strong:
This study demonstrates . . .
The proposed research compares . . .
Using To Be Verbs
To be verbs are
passive
A positron is a
positively
charged
electron.
Active Voice
Passive Voice
is the better choice.
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Active voice means the subjec t of a sentence is doi ng the acti on.
Passive voice means the object bei ng acted upon is the subject and who is
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Why is
this so hard???
Lets see if I
can make it easier.
An easy way to
determine if you
are writing in
passive voice.
But,
sometimes
you need to use
passive voice.
In technical and
scientific prose,
passive voice is
preferred when what
was done is more
important than who is
doing it.
ETC.
I n that an effort to identify a sp ecific control circuit resp onsible for the f
Wh at is this idiot
tryi
tellwm
B
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autose
e e?
could
There is opposition to
vaccinating children by
parents who believe
vaccines contain harmful
additives.
Who is doing what?
Answer: Parents
oppose.
Reasonable
Be
voice with inanimate
objects. Avoid the Dr. Frankenstein effect.
The osc illoscope
measu red t he voltage.
V=
V
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Use Topic
The beginning of a
sentence or paragraph
sets up the topic, so it is
referred to as the topic
position.
Readers use the topic
position, to get a sense
of where the sentence or
paragraph is going to
take them.
If you dont write a topic
sentence, readers will
get lost or confused.
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Use Stress
I f you w ere the intended reader, would you know what the
writer wanted you to think ab out, understand, and/or do with this
My writing is
clear. I am awes
re sp
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li ke this, y ou
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