Claires Clear

Writing Tips
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 Claires Clear Writing Tips
Claire is the face of the European Commissions Clear Writing campaign. As her name (meaning
clear in French) suggests, she is an expert on clear writing. Here she presents some detailed practical
tips to help EU staff avoid common pitfalls and draft more clearly. These tips on writing in English
expand upon the guide How to write clearly, which is available in all official EU languages.

Contents
Seven key questions................................................................................................................................................................................... 3
Focus on the reader .................................................................................................................................................................................. 4
Keep it short and simple (KISS)........................................................................................................................................................... 5
Cut out excess nouns................................................................................................................................................................................. 9
Be concrete, not abstract .................................................................................................................................................................... 10
Prefer active verbs to passive........................................................................................................................................................... 11
Beware of jargon....................................................................................................................................................................................... 12
Take care when using abbreviations, acronyms and foreign expressions............................................................. 14
Beware of false friends (faux amis)............................................................................................................................................. 16
.........False friend: actual......................................................................................................................................................................... 16
.........False friend: assist at.................................................................................................................................................................... 16
.........False friend: control....................................................................................................................................................................... 17
.........False friend: delay........................................................................................................................................................................... 18
.........False friend: dispose of................................................................................................................................................................ 19
.........False friend: element..................................................................................................................................................................... 19
.........False friend: elaborate................................................................................................................................................................. 20
.........False friend: eventual/eventually........................................................................................................................................... 21
.........False friend: expose....................................................................................................................................................................... 21
.........False friend: foresee...................................................................................................................................................................... 22
.........False friend: project....................................................................................................................................................................... 22
.........False friend: punctual/punctually........................................................................................................................................... 23
.........False friend: report......................................................................................................................................................................... 23
.........False friend: respect...................................................................................................................................................................... 24
.........False friend: sensible..................................................................................................................................................................... 24
Tips on usage (grammar, vocabulary, punctuation)............................................................................................................. 25
.........Take care when using adjectival/adverbial phrases................................................................................................... 25
.........Take care with the word which............................................................................................................................................. 25
.........To use or not to use a comma?............................................................................................................................................... 26
.........What is the right word or expression?................................................................................................................................ 27
Test yourself!............................................................................................................................................................................................... 29
Acknowledgements and further guidance................................................................................................................................. 30

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 Seven key questions

First things first. Before you start writing, imagine what questions your reader might ask.

A clear, well-structured text should answer these seven questions:

1. What is being done?

2. Who is doing it (to whom)?
3. When is it being done?
4. Where is it being done?
5. How is it being done?
6. Why is it being done?
7. How much is involved (resources, time, etc.)?

So:

Dont write this:

At the appropriate stage, the necessary steps will be taken and sufficient funds
committed to tackle the problems arising in several Member States.

Why? Because it is vague and uninformative, and therefore uninteresting. It provides no clear
answers to any of the seven questions.

Instead, write this:

Over the next six months, the European Central Bank will provide the governments
of Ireland, Spain and Portugal with a loan of 10 billion from the emergency fund
to help them tackle their debt crisis.

Why? Because it is specific, clear and informative.

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 Focus on the reader
Who are you writing for? Involve them by addressing them directly (you is underused).
What do they need to know? Use the seven key questions approach described previously.
What will really interest them? Give them only the information they actually need. Leave out as
many details of EU procedures and structures as you can, unless these are essential for your reader.

Dont write this:

The institute will engage with its key stakeholders: the European institutions
(European Parliament, the Commission and other European Agencies, such as the
Fundamental Rights Agency, EUROFOUND, EU-OSHA), relevant agencies in the
Justice and Home Affairs cluster and the Member States, to take advantage of
synergies.

Instead, write this:

The institute will engage with its key stakeholders EU institutions and agencies,
justice and home affairs organisations, and Member States to take advantage of
shared expertise.

Dont write this: Try this instead:

It is unadvisable to be in control You should not drive if you are
of a moving vehicle when suffering tired.
from fatigue.

Demonstrate the relevance of the Show how your proposed project

proposal to the needs and
constraints of the target groups
and final beneficiaries.
This part of the Grant Application
Form is intended to allow the
Applicant to describe certain
aspects of the project which could
not be specifically addressed in
Part B. The Applicant should set out
the work plan by subdividing it into
steps.
will meet the needs and constraints
of the people it is intended to
benefit.
This part of the grant application
form allows you to describe aspects
of the project which could not be
dealt with in Part B. You should set
out your work plan and subdivide it
into steps.

Readability test

Ask yourself:

Would your friends understand it?

Are all instructions clear?

Can it be easily and accurately translated?

Is there enough white space (e.g. short paragraphs,

bullet points where possible)?

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 Keep it short and simple (KISS)
To achieve greater clarity:

split long sentences (and paragraphs) into two or three shorter ones;

cut out unnecessary words using active verbs where possible can help you do this;

replace overly complex phrasing with simple, everyday language;

use bullet points for lists of facts or information;

avoid ambiguous expressions.

Dont write this:

It furthermore seems appropriate to enable a preliminary regime with a control on

the volume of products that are placed on the market using this procedure with
their conformity assessment based on the results of initial compatibility studies.

Problem: long sentence (38 words) containing a lot of ideas; jargon (regime), incorrect usage
(control)

Instead, write this:

There should be preliminary arrangements for limiting the volume of products

placed on the market. Their conformity should be assessed on the basis of initial
compatibility studies.

Solution: two shorter sentences (27 words) with one idea per sentence, fewer nouns

Dont write this:

The final amount of the grant will depend on the implementation of the action in
accordance with the terms and conditions of this Agreement. It will be determined
at the time of the payment of the balance and will correspond to the lowest of the
amounts calculated under Article 10.

Problem: verbose (50 words) and over-complicated

Instead, write this:

The final amount of the grant depends on the action meeting the terms and
conditions of this Agreement. The amount is calculated when the balance is paid. It
corresponds to the lowest of the amounts calculated under Article 10.

Solution: three shorter sentences (39 words) with one idea per sentence, plain language

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Dont write this:

Strengthening of cooperation between national authorities further needs

improving, as well as its intensity.

Problem: too many (abstract) nouns; impersonal, awkward grammar

Instead, write this:

National authorities need to work together more closely and more regularly.

Solution: more verbs, simpler grammar

Dont write this:

The breach, by the beneficiaries, of their obligations pursuant to Article 1, may, if

appropriate, lead to any of the measures provided under Article 6.

Problem: ambiguous and wordy; passive construction

Instead, write this:

If a beneficiary breaches its obligations under Article 1, the Commission may apply
any of the measures in Article 6.

Solution: sentence shortened and restructured; ambiguity resolved by changing beneficiar-

ies to the singular; active voice used and both agents named

Dont write this:

It goes without saying that our volunteers love their work.

Problem: wordy, redundant jargon at the beginning of the sentence (it goes without
saying). This kind of thing is called throat-clearing.

Instead, write this:

Our volunteers (clearly) love their work.

Solution: cut out words that are doing no work or adding little meaning to the sentence

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SIMPLIFY! Resist the temptation to use long words and expressions short, simple ones
are often the clearest.

This will contribute to improving This will help improve the situation.
the situation.

Indeed, this will facilitate the This will help the Commission to
monitoring of the trend by the monitor the trend.
Commission.

The wider political dialogue gave Wider political dialogue enabled

national parliaments the possibility national parliaments to play a role
to play a role in shaping policy at in shaping EU policy.
EU level.

The reason I am working for DG I am working for DG DEVCO because

DEVCO is because I am interested in I am interested in the EUs relations
the EUs relations with developing with developing countries.
countries.

The number of women in There are fewer women than men in

management positions is lower in management positions.
comparison to the number of men.

Here are some simple alternatives to help you make phrases more concise:

with reference to
with regard to about
on the subject of
in relation to

accounted for by the fact that

due to the fact that because
for the reason that
in view of the fact that
owing to the fact that

in case (that)
in the event that if
provided that
on condition that
where/when

To make texts clearer and more concise, use if wherever you can to express a condition.

If the temperature in your office this summer exceeds 30C, you may work from
home. (not On condition that )
If you work from home, remember to transfer your calls from the office to your
private line. (not In the event that )
If you decide to work from home, please inform your line manager. (not In case )

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 Readability test

Ask yourself:

Have you used the shortest phrase?

Is all the information relevant?

Are any words or expressions redundant?

Is there any unnecessary repetition?

Are there any ambiguities?

And finally

Does the language sound natural?

S
KIS

Keep it short and simple!

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 Cut out excess nouns
A sentence full of nouns is hard to read. If you can, use verbs instead. The result will often be a shorter,
simpler and more dynamic text.

Do you need all these nouns?

The intention of the Commission is the reinforcement of the monitoring of the

development of these policies and thus the assurance of the continuation of the
implementation of the agreed strategies by the Member States. (35 words 11
nouns)

Try verbs instead:

The Commission intends to monitor these policies closely, to ensure that Member
States continue implementing the agreed strategies. (18 words 4 nouns)

Do you need all these nouns?

There is a need for an intensification of Community efforts aimed at the prevention

of the pollution of the coastlines of Europe through the accidental spillage of oil.
(28 words 10 nouns)

Try verbs instead:

The EU must do more to protect Europes coasts from oil spills. (12 words 5 nouns)

Dont write this: Try this instead

Tourism expenditure by Europeans Europeans aged 65+ spent 33%

aged 65 or over grew by 33% in more on tourism over the past five
the past five years. years.

The establishment of shelters We need to urgently set up shelters

and strengthening of health and boost health services in areas
services in areas where there is where displaced people are staying.
a congregation of displaced
persons are our priority.

Your employment contract confers Your employment contract entitles

on you an entitlement to full you to full pay for a month if you
remuneration for one calendar fall ill.
month in the event of your
medical incapacitation.

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 Be concrete, not abstract
Replace vague and abstract expressions with concrete language. The text will be clearer, more meaning-
ful, and often shorter too.
Do you need all this abstraction?
It is a matter of necessity that
citizens be aware of the division of
competences among European
institutions and Member States.
The principle of the liability of
Member States for breach of EU
law plays an important part in
consolidating the protection of the
rights conferred on individuals by
EU provisions.
The confidentiality of the
information exchanged pursuant to
the Agreement must be preserved
by the beneficiary.
The vast majority of our assets will
be out in the public space.
(Police press briefing on security in
London)
Abstract language
negative evolution (of the economy)
remunerated employment
hierarchical superior
employment destruction
human capital development
specificities
commonalities
orientations towards actions
ensure the universal availability of
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Try being more concrete:
People need to know who does what
in the EU.
Member States can be taken to
court if they break EU law, and this
helps ensure that citizens rights
are protected.
The beneficiary must not disclose
information exchanged under this
Agreement to third parties.
Most of our officers will be on
patrol on the streets.
Concrete language
(economic) downturn, decline, slump
paid work
boss, line manager
job losses
training for staff
specific features/characteristics (of x)
shared or common aspects/themes/
goals
guidelines for action
ensure that everyone has access to
 Prefer active verbs to passive
Sentences are usually clearer and simpler (and shorter) if the verbs are in the active form rather than
the passive.

Dont write this: Try this instead:

It has been decided by the The Commission has decided to ban

Commission that smoking in its smoking in its offices.
offices should be banned.

The setting up of the advisory These measures will help Member

service by the Member States and States set up the advisory service
the use of the service by farmers and will help farmers use it.
will be supported by these
measures.

Name the agents of each action if possible, and put the actions in the order in which they
occur.

Dont write this:

Its decision on the allocation of EU assistance will be taken subsequent to receipt

of all project applications and the Award Committees meeting.

Instead write this:

1. When all the applicants have submitted their project applications,

2. the Award Committee will meet
3. to decide
4. how much EU aid it will grant to each.

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 Beware of jargon
Jargon is vocabulary used by groups of insiders or specialists to communicate with each other. Make
sure that any document you want outsiders to read is as jargon-free as possible. If you do have to use
jargon terms, explain them when you first use them.

Dont write this: Try this instead:

EU customs legislation must be EU customs legislation must be

applied in a convergent and applied consistently.
harmonised way.

The IAS is reviewing our SNE The Internal Audit Service (IAS)
employment modalities. is reviewing our arrangements
for employing seconded national
experts.

Dont write this:

In order to achieve our overarching goal to eradicate never events, we will need to
engage and collaborate with organisations and bodies across the healthcare
spectrum, to not only ensure the initiatives we develop are accessible and
achievable, but also that they can be used as standard practice across the
healthcare system.
(National Health Service, England report summary)

Instead, write this:

Never events are serious patient safety incidents that should not be allowed to
happen. To prevent these arising, we need to work with a wide range of healthcare
groups and organisations to develop realistic and achievable initiatives that can
become standard practice across the healthcare system.

The sentence in italics can be omitted if the reader is familiar with the term never events or
if it has been explained earlier in the text.

Jargon English

blue-sky thinking clear/visionary thinking

deliverables results, benefits or outcomes

keep in the loop keep informed

human capital people and their skills

active labour market policies job creation schemes or measures

modalities arrangements, procedures

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Clear explanations of jargon can be found in:
EU jargon in English and some possible alternatives
http://ec.europa.eu/ipg/content/tips/words-style/jargon-alternatives_en.htm

Definitions of technical and legal terms relating to EU activities can be found in:
the online Europa Glossary
http://europa.eu/legislation_summaries/glossary/index_en.htm

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 Take care when using abbreviations, acronyms and
foreign expressions
Too many unfamiliar abbreviations or foreign words can make a document incomprehensible. Latin is
used much less frequently in English than in some other languages. Not only does it make a document
appear very formal, but it can alienate and annoy readers if they do not understand Latin.

Dont write this:

The information transmitted by the NAO and AA cf. the above deadlines is analysed
by DG AGRI J.5 auditors au fil de leau, as further described below. (guidelines)

Instead, write this:

The national authorising officer and the Audit Authority (AA) submit information in
accordance with the above schedule. This is analysed by DG Agricultures auditors
as set out below.

Dont write this:

The Contractor has been convicted of an offence concerning its professional

conduct by a judgment which has the force of res judicata.

You could write this:

The Contractor has been convicted of an offence concerning its professional

conduct by a final judgment, not subject to an appeal.

This is better still:

The Contractor has been convicted of an offence concerning its professional

conduct by a court whose decision is final and not subject to appeal.

Example used with thanks to Gayl Russell and Louise Mills (Clear Legal Writing presentation)

ESA ESA ESA ESA

ESA ESA ESA ESA

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 Latin English

inter alia including, partly, for example, among

other things, in particular

prima facie at first sight, on the face of it

de facto in reality, in effect, actual

circa about

ex ante upstream, prior, advance

ex post downstream, subsequent

ex post facto after the event, retrospectively

in toto completely, as a whole, entirely

ipso facto therefore

post hoc after this

mutatis mutandis with the necessary modifications

Many of the acronyms and abbreviations used in European Commission documents are
defined in the:
Interinstitutional Style Guide (Main Acronyms and Abbreviations)
http://publications.europa.eu/code/en/en-5000400.htm

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 Beware of false friends (faux amis)

False friends are pairs of words in two languages that look similar, but differ in meaning.

False friend: actual

The English word actual looks as if it means the same as the French actuel, Dutch actueel, German
aktuell, Italian attuale and Portuguese atual. But it doesnt. The English translation of all these
words is current or topical. The English word actual means real or true.

Dont write this:

The ban on the import of live, captive birds was very actual in May.

Instead, write this:

The ban on the import of live, captive birds was very topical in May.

Be careful if you write this:

Car drivers should state their actual registration number.

Why? Because you are implying that unscrupulous drivers might give a false number.

Instead, write this:

Car drivers should state their current registration number.

False friend: assist at

To assist at is a literal translation of the French assister and similar expressions in other Romance
languages, but it doesnt mean the same thing. To assist means to help while assister means to
attend.

Be careful if you write this:

The Director-General will be unable to assist at the September meeting.

Why? Because you may insult your Director-General by suggesting that he wont be able to help at
the meeting.

Instead, write this:

The Director-General will be unable to attend the September meeting.

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 False friend: control

To control is a literal translation of the French contrler, German kontrollieren and similar words in
other languages, but the meaning is not the same in many cases.

When used as a verb, the English word control has at least two meanings:

1. to exercise power over or to be in charge or command of something

2. to limit or to restrict something

You can write this:

It is the responsibility of drivers to ensure that they are in control of their vehicle
at all times. (i.e. in command of the vehicle)

Militants now control large parts of northern Syria. (i.e. exercise power over)

The purpose of this directive is to control pollution emissions. (if the directive aims to
restrict emissions, not just monitor them)

The central bank raised interest rates in order to control inflation. (i.e. in order to limit
inflation)

Room temperature is controlled automatically by a thermostat.

However:

Dont write this:

When you cross the border, customs officers will control your car. (No they wont: you
will still be at the wheel, controlling your car.)

Instead, write this:

When you cross the border, customs officers will inspect your car.

Control can be used as a noun in: border control, customs control, passport control.

Dont write this:

Employee expense claims are randomly controlled by the tax authorities.

Instead, write this:

The tax authorities check a random sample of employee expense claims.

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Avoid using control in the following examples.

Use the highlighted words instead:

The environment agency has launched a weather forecast model that can monitor
smog levels in the air.

Appointment will be approved once the applicants qualifications have been verified.

The purpose of this report is to evaluate the agencys performance in 2014.

The pricing regulations limit the volume of product that may be imported and sold.

Nurses supervise the healthcare of the children on the ward under the direction of
paediatricians.

The main objective of the research is to assess the nutrient content of meals.

Is there any way to check that the data on my hard drive has not been corrupted?

False friend: delay

Delay looks as if it means the same as the French dlai, but it doesnt mean the same thing at all.
The French word dlai refers to a period of time or a time limit or deadline. In English, if something
is delayed, it means it is late, postponed or held up, i.e. the time limit has passed.

Be careful if you write this:

The payment delay is three months.

Why? Because you are saying that the payment is three months late!

Instead, write this:

Payment must be made within three months.

Why? Because this makes clear how much time you are allowed before you have to pay the bill.

Dont write this: Instead, write this:

What is the delay for implementing How long does Greece have to
the reforms in Greece? implement the reforms?

The translation delay is 15 June The deadline for the translation is

2014. 15 June 2014.

The driver did not respect the The driver did not meet the
delay for delivering the IT deadline for delivering the IT
equipment. equipment.

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 False friend: dispose of

To dispose of is a literal translation of the French disposer de and similar expressions in other
Romance languages, but the meaning is completely different. Disposer de means to have something
or to be equipped with, but to dispose of means to get rid of something.

Be careful if you write this:

DG MARE will dispose of Danish interpreters at the conference in Copenhagen.

Why? Because this means that DG MARE will be removing Danish interpreters from the conference.

Instead, write this:

DG MARE will have Danish interpreters at the conference in Copenhagen.

Dont write this: Instead, write this:

All airports must dispose of All airports must have facilities for
facilities for people with impaired people with impaired mobility.
mobility.

All planes dispose of oxygen masks. All planes are equipped with oxygen
masks.

False friend: element

The English word element resembles the French lment, but the meaning is not the same in many
cases. Elment means part, constituent or component (of a structure/problem). In English, it is an
essential or characteristic part of something abstract, or more specifically a chemical element or one
of the four elements: earth, water, air, and fire.

Dont write this: Instead, write this:

Article 290 of the TFEU states that
the legislator may delegate to the
Commission the task of
supplementing or amending certain
non-essential elements of this
Regulation.
Article 290 of the TFEU states that
the legislator may delegate to the
Commission the task of
supplementing or amending certain
non-essential parts of this
Regulation.

New elements have been added New items have been added to
to the action plan, which has been the action plan, which has been
updated. updated.

The various elements of the budget The various components of the

are analysed below. budget are analysed below.

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 False friend: elaborate

To elaborate is a literal translation of the French laborer, but it does not mean the same thing.
French laborer means to draft, draw up, prepare, produce, formulate, write up or develop.

En cours dlaboration means being drafted, prepared or drawn up.

Dont write this: Try this instead:

The website design was A group of consultants designed

elaborated by a group of the website.
consultants.

We will conduct the survey when We will conduct the survey when
we have elaborated the we have drafted the questionnaire.
questionnaire.

The parties agreed to cooperate in The parties agreed to cooperate in

elaborating new planning rules. drawing up new planning rules.

Guidance is in the course of We are preparing guidance to help

elaboration to help food food businesses understand the
businesses understand the new new requirements.
requirements.

The English verb elaborate means to go into more detail or expand upon something.

You can write this:

Your mission report does not explain why you took three days to travel from
Amsterdam to Brussels. Please elaborate.

She elaborated on the main ideas in her dissertation.

The adjective elaborate is used to describe something that is detailed or complicated.

You can write this:

That sounds like a very elaborate plan for such a simple task.

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 False friend: eventual/eventually

The English word eventually looks like the French ventuellement and the German eventuell, but it
does not mean the same thing. French ventuellement and German eventuell mean possibly.
In English, eventually means certainly or later on.

Be careful if you write this:

European airspace will eventually be closed by volcanic ash next month.

Why? Because this means that it will definitely be closed next month.

The Green Party will eventually come into power.

Why? Because this means that they will definitely come into power one day, which might not
be what is meant.

Instead, write this:

European airspace will possibly be closed by volcanic ash next month.

The Green Party will possibly come into power.

For the same reasons, eventual is often misused.

Dont write this:

Please send eventual enquiries on the products by email to the address below.

Instead, write this:

Please send any enquiries on the products by email to the address below.

False friend: expose

To expose is a literal translation of the French exposer, but it does not always have the same mean-
ing. A particular problem arises with the reflexive form of the verb. In English, to expose oneself has a
specific meaning: to expose ones naked body in public. The French sexposer may be used to refer to
an artist exhibiting work, or to a person explaining or expounding arguments.

Dont write this: Instead, write this:

A Belgian artist will expose himself A Belgian artist will exhibit his
in the Berlaymont. work in the Berlaymont.

The President exposed herself to The President set out her views to
the European Parliament. the European Parliament.

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 False friend: foresee

To foresee is a literal translation of the French prvoir and similar expressions in other Romance
languages, but it doesnt always mean the same. To foresee means to predict or forecast the future,
usually involving a crystal ball.

The French terms prvoir/ prvu are often used to refer to the provisions laid down in legislation. In this
sort of context, the best straight equivalent is provide for.

In other contexts, prvu can mean planned, considered, scheduled, envisaged or anticipated.

Dont write this: Instead, write this:

Article 15 foresees some exceptions Article 15 provides for some

to the general rules. exceptions to the general rules.

The necessary funds have not been The necessary funds have not been
foreseen in the budget. provided in the budget.

Finland has implemented the Finland has implemented the

foreseen fiscal measures. planned fiscal measures.

The office move is foreseen for the The office move is scheduled for the
end of the year. end of the year.

To avoid possible bankruptcy, we To avoid possible bankruptcy, we

could foresee restructuring the could consider restructuring the
business. business.

This is the correct way of using foresee, meaning predict or forecast:

The fall of Troy was foreseen by Cassandra.

False friend: project

The French projet does not always translate as project in English. For example, projet de budget
means draft budget and projet de loi means bill or draft law.

Dont write this: Instead, write this:

The budget project provides for The draft budget provides for
considerable investment in considerable investment in
research. research.

The Ministry of Health issued its The Ministry of Health issued its
opinion today on a project opinion today on a draft regulation
regulation establishing a Code of establishing a Code of Ethics.
Ethics.

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 False friend: punctual/punctually

The English word punctual looks like the French ponctuel and the German punktuell. However,
punctual means on time; it never means sporadic, occasional or localised, as in the other
languages.

Dont write this:

I have only made a few punctual changes.

Instead, write this:

I have only made a few changes here and there.

This is the correct way of using punctual and punctually:

Please arrive punctually at the meeting.

The train leaves at 06:58. Please be punctual.

Why? Because this means Please arrive on time.

False friend: report

The English verb to report looks as if it means the same as the French reporter, but the meaning is
completely different. Reporter means to postpone to a later date, or to carry over money in accounts.

Dont write this: Instead, write this:

DG HR has reported the application DG HR has postponed the

deadline to 15 December. application deadline to 15
December.

A sum of 5 million was reported A sum of 5 million was carried

from 2013 to 2014 for new over from 2013 to 2014 for new
projects. projects.

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 False friend: respect

To respect is a literal translation of the French respecter, but it is not always used in the same way.
The English word means to value or honour someone or something. The French respecter means to
meet (a deadline), observe (principles and rules), comply (with rules) or uphold.

Dont write this: Try this instead:

You did not respect the deadline for You did not meet the deadline for
completing the report. completing the report.

Please respect the rules. Please observe the rules.

This is the correct way of using respect, meaning value or honour:

The company has an obligation to respect human rights under its Code of Ethics.

I respect his courage in standing up to the bullies.

False friend: sensible

Sensible is a literal translation of the French sensible and the German sensibel, but it doesnt mean
the same. The French and German words mean sensitive, but the English word means reasonable.

Be careful when you write this:

This is not a politically sensible decision.

Why? Because you are saying the decision is not reasonable, which is probably not what you mean!

Instead, write this:

This is not a politically sensitive decision.

This is the correct way of using sensible meaning reasonable:

Lets be sensible, your 50-page mission report is far too long. Im sure you could
trim it.

For our walk along the Moselle, please wear sensible shoes.

Additional examples of false friends, with detailed explanations, can be found in:
Misused words and expressions in EU publications
http://www.eca.europa.eu/Lists/ECADocuments/EN_TERMINIOLOGY_PUBLICATION/EN_
TERMINIOLOGY_PUBLICATION_EN.pdf

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 Tips on usage (grammar, vocabulary, punctuation)

Take care when using adjectival/adverbial phrases

This is unclear!

Rules were adopted on packaging toys as recommended by the Consumer Council.

(What had the Consumer Council recommended? Packaging toys? Packaging them in a
certain way? Or rules on packaging?)

Make it clear!

Put the adverbial phrase as recommended by next to the action to which it applies.

As recommended by the Consumer Council, rules were adopted on packaging toys.

This is unclear!

Parliament made a number of changes to the law on access to information request-

ed by the OSCE (Organisation for Security and Co-operation in Europe).

(What had the OSCE requested? Information? Or access to information? Or the law on
access to information? Or changes to that law?)

Make it clear!

Put the adjectival phrase requested by next to the noun to which it applies.

Parliament made a number of changes, requested by the OSCE, to the law on access
to information.

Or make it an adverbial phrase instead, and put it in the right place:

As requested by the OSCE, Parliament made changes to the law on access to

information.

At the OSCEs request, Parliament changed the law on access to information.

Take care with the word which

This is unclear!

The President announced a far-reaching reform of the electoral process, which was
followed by a decision to reduce the number of MPs.

(Did the decision follow the electoral process? Or did it follow the reform? Or did it follow the
Presidents announcement?)

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 Make it clear!

The President announced a far-reaching reform of the electoral process. Following

this reform [or the elections or the announcement], the President [or Parliament or
the Government] decided to reduce the number of MPs.

This is unclear!

Parliament adopted a new version of the law on local elections which had been
widely criticised by election experts.

(What had been widely criticised? The local elections? Or the law on local elections? Or the
new version of that law?)

Make it clear!

Parliament adopted a new version of the law on local elections, as the old law had
been widely criticised by election experts.

To use or not to use a comma?

With a comma

The government adopted new rules on the inspection of farms, applying stricter
hygiene standards.

This means that the new rules apply stricter standards to the inspection of all farms.

Without a comma

The government adopted new rules on the inspection of farms applying stricter
hygiene standards.

This means that the new inspection rules apply only to farms that apply stricter standards.

With a comma

Air quality in schools is important because children, who are particularly vulnerable
to pollutants, spend most of their time in school environments.

This means that all children are vulnerable and all children spend a lot of time at school.

Without a comma

Air quality in schools is important because children who are particularly vulnerable
to pollutants spend most of their time in school environments.

This means that certain (vulnerable) children spend a lot of time at school.

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 What is the right word or expression?

exclude and exempt

Excluded from means not permitted to; exempt from means not required to.

Dont write this:

The areas listed shall be excluded from the energy efficiency requirements.

Instead, write this:

The areas listed shall be exempt from the energy efficiency requirements.

Dont write this:

Requests for exclusion from the rules shall be submitted within one year of the
entry into force of this regulation.

Instead, write this:

Requests for exemption from the rules shall be submitted within one year of the
entry into force of this regulation.

This is the correct way of using exclude:

Expatriate Scots were excluded from voting in the independence referendum.

in case of and in the event of

In case of is most often used in a set phrase: in case of emergency, [do X] its used when giving
instructions to people. In the event of is more often used when referring to a situation that might occur.

Dont write this:

The labour market has been applying the flexicurity model that combines flexible
hiring and firing rules with a generous social safety net in the form of income
compensation in case of unemployment.

instead, write this:

The labour market has been applying the flexicurity model that combines flexible
hiring and firing rules with a generous social safety net in the form of income
compensation in the event of unemployment.

This is the correct way of using in case of:

In case of fire, do not use the lift.

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 with a view to and in view of

With a view to means with the intention of, while in view of is similar to as a result of.

Dont write this:

In 2013, Poland set its legislative procedure in motion in view of adopting new
national rules to address the weaknesses identified in the Action Plan.

Instead, write this:

In 2013, Poland set its legislative procedure in motion with a view to adopting new
national rules to address the weaknesses identified in the Action Plan.

This is the correct way of using in view of meaning as a result of:

The committee decided to consider the security issue at a later meeting, in view of
the packed agenda.

ensure, insure and assure

These three words are sometimes confused.

Ensure means to make (something) certain.
Insure refers to making arrangements to obtain financial compensation in the event
of an accident or loss.
The most common meaning of to assure is to inform (somebody) positively.

Dont write this:

Fishing opportunities should be distributed among Member States in such a way as

to assure each Member State relative stability of fishing activities.

Instead, write this:

Fishing opportunities should be distributed among Member States in such a way as

to ensure that each Member State enjoys relative stability of fishing activities.

This is the correct way of using insure:

All household items should be insured for their full replacement cost.

This is the correct way of using assure:

Airline staff assured passengers that there would be no significant disruption

despite the strike by air traffic controllers.

Assure can also mean to make certain or safe but in this sense it is mainly used in the
passive or adjectival form.

Be self-reliant and your success is assured!

Rest assured that we will do all we can to find your missing luggage.

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 Test yourself!

1) The police will find the thief eventually.

This means:

A) The police will never find the thief.

B) The police will certainly find the thief, but it may take some time.
C) It is possible that the police will find the thief, but not certain.
D) We hope the police will find the thief.

2) The introduction of supplementation of remuneration for staff representation

Whats wrong with this title?

A) Supplementation should have a capital s.

B) Introduction should have a capital I.
C) Remuneration is Eurojargon.
D) Too many words (nouns) ending in -ion.

3) It was decided by the Commission that it had not been proved that the directive had been
disregarded by the Member State in question
Whats wrong with this sentence?

A) Nothing.
B) Member State should not have capital letters.
C) Too many passive constructions.
D) Proved should be proven.

4) There was a payment delay of three months.

This means:

A) It was permitted to wait three months before paying.

B) The payment was made three months late.
C) It was compulsory to wait three months before paying.
D) EU law allowed three months before paying.

5) Which of these texts would you use in a public awareness campaign against drinking and
driving? Why?
First text:
The consumption of alcohol before driving is a major cause of fatalities on Europes roads
and it is vital that the EU take action to raise awareness of the danger it poses.
Second text:
Drink driving kills thousands of people in Europe every year. You could be next. Want to
stay alive? Dont drink and drive!

A) First text, because it stresses the role of the EU.

B) Second text, because it directly addresses the reader.
C) First text, because the tone is more serious.
D) Second text, because it specifies the number of people killed.

Answers: 1) B; 2) D; 3) C; 4) B; 5) B

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Acknowledgements and further guidance
This brochure was produced by the Editing Unit in the European Commissions Directorate-General for
Translation. It is the second publication in the Clear Writing series. A French version is also available.

Illustrations by Zeta Field, Directorate-General for Translation, European Commission.

Useful guidance

The English Style Guide, a handbook for authors and translators working in English for the European
Commission
http://ec.europa.eu/translation/english/guidelines/documents/styleguide_english_dgt_en.pdf

The essential guide to drafting Commission documents on EU competition law

http://goo.gl/XJiO6

Misused words and expressions in EU publications

http://www.eca.europa.eu/Lists/ECADocuments/EN_TERMINIOLOGY_PUBLICATION/EN_TER-
MINIOLOGY_PUBLICATION_EN.pdf

CLEAR ENGLISH - Tips for Translators

http://ec.europa.eu/translation/english/guidelines/documents/clear_english_en.pdf

EU jargon in English and some possible alternatives

http://ec.europa.eu/ipg/content/tips/words-style/jargon-alternatives_en.htm

Europa Glossary
http://europa.eu/legislation_summaries/glossary/index_en.htm

Writing for the web

www.ec.europa.eu/ipg/content/tips/index_en.htm

More guidance on writing specific types of documents is available to European Commission staff
at: https://myintracomm.ec.europa.eu/hr_admin/en/drafting/Pages/index.aspx

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The How to write clearly guide is available in all official EU languages at:
http://bookshop.europa.eu/en/how-to-write-clearly-pbHC3212148/
Those who write clearly have readers, those who write obscurely have commentators.

(Ceux qui crivent clairement ont des lecteurs ; ceux qui crivent obscurment ont des
commentateurs.)
Albert Camus