Name: TYPE HERE

Date: March

Term 2 Image Prompt

Here are 2 examples of student best work. These submissions were chosen to
showcase some of their finest work. They have had one week to write the story and
additional time to edit and refine their work.

Letter To Santa Dec 12

Victoria , Macneil
Aspen View 44 A Ave 3917
Drayton Valley, Alberta

(780) 241 0306

Postal code
Vjm2252@edu.wrsd.ca

December 12, 2016

Santa Claus
123 Candy Cane Lane
North Pole, Canada
H0H0H0

Dear Santa

My name is Victoria Joanne Macneil , I am 10 years old. I have a few questions about
Christmas. Which reindeer is your favorite? Do any of the reindeer have kids? What is your
middle name?

To be honest Santa , I am not sure how Ive been this year. Please let me know how you
think how I have been. ;)

If I have been a good girl this year can you please get me this. This year I would like a instax
mini 8 polaroid camera, PS: pale pink please for case and camera. I would also like a case
for it please. And a pale pink watch with a face on it.
Laura Cull would like a puppy for Christmas , Hailey would like film for her instax mini 8
polaroid camera and Paxton would like a Goose Bump book. Can you please give them this
if you dont have lots of kids to deliver presents to.

Even if I dont get the presents I was asking for, I will still be happy. No matter what it
doesnt matter , all that matters is that my family is all together.

Sincerely Vicky ;)

Superman??? Jan 30

In the hospital Bella gave birth to a handsome boy with blond hair and name was
Bilbo. Bilbo was extraordinary, he had to have ropes knotted to his waist. This was
because if he wasnt tied down he would float away. Because of his very unusual talent
he was put in the circus.This was a problem because of there was nobody there he
would float into outer space. He had to constantly have at least 7 people to hold him
down. They went to the hospital to get him look at him. The doctor said, that there
was nothing that he could see that was wrong with him. Then his mother showed him
the rope and let go. All the sudden Bilbo floated up and hit his head on the roof. The
doctor said, that it was a medical mystery. His mother had some thinking to do and
she decided that she was going to do the procedure. Within the next month he would
go into surgery. It was the day he had his surgery and something unfortunate
happened. On the table Bilbo at the age of 4 had just died and we would never see him
again. There is only one person now with this disease in the world.

Rubric rating submitted on: 3/4/2017, 1:58:37 PM by mark.kinzel@wrsd.ca

4 3 2 1

Content Details of the story Details of story are The story is There are few
Your score: 3 are established, clear and make predictable. Some details or
specific and sense. The story is details may be descriptions. Does
consistent. The generally irrelevant or not flow from
story flows and straightforward from unnecessary. Tends beginning to end,
makes sense. beginning to end. to follow familiar illogical sequence.
Supporting details Writing generally patterns or ideas. Does not get
are consistent and holds the readers May keep the reader's attention
 help to develop interest. reader's attention.
story. Writing holds
the reader's
attention

Origination The story has a The story follows a The story has a The story has no
Your score: 3 beginning, middle logical sequence beginning, middle clear beginning,
and end. There is a with a beginning, and end but can be middle and end.
connection between middle and end. difficult to follow. There are some
events, setting, and There is a There is some actions or events
characters. connection between connection between but are illogical or
Characters are well events, setting, and events, setting, and hard to follow. Lacks
described and characters. Story characters. Story connection between
developed. There is beginning beginning briefly events, setting, and
a well described establishes describes characters. Does
setting. There is a characters and characters and not describe
clear and well setting. There is a setting. There is a characters or
defined story clear and well story problemthat is setting, may just
problem or plot that defined story connected to the give character
flows logically. The problem or plot. The characterbuthas an names. There is a
story problem or story problem or abrupt ending. story
plot is connected to plot is connected to problembutthere is
the character. the character. Story no character
Events, actions, has a logical ending development. Story
details, and/or that resolves the ending does not
characters are story problem. makes sense or is
consistently missing.
maintained. The
ending resolves the
problem and
satisfies the reader.

Sentence Structure Sentences are well Sentences include Simple sentences, Basic and poorly
Your score: 4 formed and flow one complete which do not include constructed
smoothly and vary thought. They begin descriptive sentences, that
in length. They with capitals and language. They often don't make
begin differently use appropriate end generally begin with sense and are
with the correct use marks. They are capitals and use repetitive in
of capitals and have logical, and make appropriate end construction.
appropriate end sense. marks
marks

Vocabulary Words are well- General words are General words are Words chosen are
Your score: 4 chosen. Phrases chosen and used chosen and are often wrong and/or
are purposeful. correctly. Words and used incorrectly at misused. Phrases
Avoids overusing phrases help times. Words and are misused or
words. Words and explain and phrases are simple missing
phrases are used to describe. and/or do not
create imagery describe well.
(mind images)

Voice The story has a The story has The story has some The writing contains
Your score: 3 definite personality personality and personality, but it is little or no
and highlight how shows how the hard to identify the personality. There
the character thinks character thinks and writer. The tone is is no evidence of
and feels. feels. The tone fits apparent in some tone in the writing.
The tone fits the the purpose and parts of the writing. The author tells
purpose and audience. The The author does about feeling
audience. writing is lively, more telling than without showing it.
The writing comes expressive, and showing feeling. The author does not
to life and is very engaging. The The author cares seem to care about
engaging. author cares about most of the time the topic or the
The author is the topic and about the topic and audience.
invested into the audience. audience.
story can cares for
the charactes and
that shines through
in the writing.

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