Project 2 - Peer Review(To Liuyun Liang)

By: Yuzhao Zhong

Prompt:(0-7): 7
How well does the writing answer the assignment prompt?

The writing is pretty organized and logical in describing the community. The writing provides
the vivid profile and real pictures. Also, the essay uses at least two secondary resources to
support her main points. The page and format both meet the criterions under the draft 1
requirements.

Does the writer follow the role of a reporter?

Yes, because according to her claims like that her friend, Zhao, did the three-component droplets
with different concentration in different temperatures experiment, and her own feelings which
are referred to this community, we could see she really follows this role.

Does the profile portray a specific perspective of community?

Yes, she writes the community: the researchers who devoted their lives to doing chemical
experiments at the laboratory in the University of Arizona. This is pretty obvious.

Does the writing focus on a specific community?

Yes, her writing focuses on the chemical researcher community in University of Arizona. It is a
community, and this community is very specific like the phrases, chemical researcher, U of A.

Research: (0-7): 7
Is information from research & interviews effectively integrated? Does research enhance
the individuals perspective of their community?

Yes, like when she claims that most other schools have strict rules about chemical experiments,
and she cites quotations, then she also writes that her friend has a better condition in doing
experiments. The combinations are effective.
Yes, she has her own feelings and emotions on describing the community. She is curious about
this community and she knows their hard but enjoyable life in experiment.

Does primary and secondary research provide helpful information and unique insight into
the community?

Yes, the secondary resource like Ibrahim, Nor Hasniza could help readers know the different
situations between her rules and other schools rules, understanding their procedures easily.

Does the information enhance the writing?

Yes, the information like that there are advanced techniques and equipment in U of A could
promote the reliability in stating the community.

Context: (0-7): 7
Is there sufficient contextual information for this audience to understand the individuals
community?

Yes, the beginning and ending are well organized in understanding the community, providing the
chemical researchers background.

Are the profile and community essay clearly related?

Yes, the interviewee is the person in the picture and lots of ideas are from her statements.

Does the writing provide helpful, relevant context for readers to understand this
community?

Yes, the contexts like the first introduction paragraph and some backgrounds in the second
paragraph. The contexts could help us know the environment and hardships in doing chemical
experiments.
Is there a unique, clear connection between the community essay and the profile?

Yes, many ideas like that three-component droplets with different concentration in different
temperatures experiment has a clear connection between the essay and profile.

Organization: (0-7): 7
Is information focused and organized?

Yes, the information just focuses on the chemical researcher life in U of A. It follows the logical
sequence in claiming.

Are the community essay and profile focused and developed in a logical, purposeful, and
engaging way?

Yes, both of them are well organized in declaring the chemical researcher community in U of A.

Is the organization suitable for the rhetorical situation?

Yes, the rhetorical situation is really well organized.

Are there clear connections between all ideas?

Yes, I think all the ideas are clear connections. Maybe there is a little improper areas.

Conventions: (0-7): 6
Do the profile and community essay follow genre conventions?

Yes, the profile has brief introduction and pictures. The community essay has all the
organization, citations, interview information and academic secondary resource.

Is writing revised to be clear and precise?

Yes, the writing revised is to be clear and precise.

Are the conventions (point of view, formality, and layout/design) consistent and appropriate
for the genre?

Yes, they are pretty proper.

Is writing clear, cohesive, concise, and precise as a result of thorough proofreading?

Yes, I think the whole essay are profile are related and clear in chemical researcher community,
whereas it needs to add more information and explanations in their life. Like it could show what
they do and overcome some difficulties in reality. But this is also good under in draft 1.

Citations: (0-7): 6
Is all information accurately cited?

According to my knowledge, most information is accurate. I think the in-text citations use like
(last name, year) form, so it do not have to appear the first name.

Are all in-text citations present and formatted in correct MLA format where needed?

Yes, the MLA style is used correctly, but this just focus on the in-text citations forms.

Is a Works Cited page present with all entries formatted correctly?

Maybe I think it needs the new citied page finally.

Total Points: 40/42