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 wordy--either battle or debate

criteria is the wrong

word. I'm

not sure what you

mean.

wordy: try, "Lawmakers have analyzed the differences

between individuals' rights and . . ."

wordy: try, "we are approving murder under ..."

wordy: try This article compares . . .

explain--what are these?

 neither of these are pro-life positions--the opposition
you're making is unclear here.
specify

alphabatize list
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

78
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/100

Text Comment. wordy--either battle or debate

Text Comment. criteria is the wrong word. I'm

not sure what you mean.

QM Editorial Thesis
For an editorial, you need a thesis statement that 1) limits and predicts the rest of the paper, 2)
includes a debatable claim, 3) acknowledges prominent counterarguments, and 4) provides a
major reason to support its debatable claim. A thesis should answer a question, rather than ask
one. T ry using the Sheridan Baker thesis machine, which I've posted on T itanium.

QM Concise
Practice our sentence revision techniques here and throughout your report (e.g., reduce
prepositional phrases, use vigorous verbs, etc.).

Text Comment. wordy: try, "Lawmakers have analyzed the dif f erences between individuals'
rights and . . ."

Text Comment. wordy: try, "we are approving murder under ..."

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QM Audience's needs
Always consider the education and experience of your readers when you write. If you are writing
to general audience, you will need to def ine scientif ic words or terms and concepts that are
specif ic to your f ield. Likewise, you will need to explain any background to which you ref er. On
 the other hand, a specialized audience may f ind such def initions and explanations unnecessary.

QM apa mla ref list

Use Purdue OWL to discover the proper content and f ormatting of these entries.

Text Comment. wordy: try T his article compares . . .

QM Audience's needs
Always consider the education and experience of your readers when you write. If you are writing
to general audience, you will need to def ine scientif ic words or terms and concepts that are
specif ic to your f ield. Likewise, you will need to explain any background to which you ref er. On
the other hand, a specialized audience may f ind such def initions and explanations unnecessary.

Text Comment. explain--what are these?

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QM apa mla ref list

Use Purdue OWL to discover the proper content and f ormatting of these entries.

Text Comment. neither of these are pro-lif e positions--the opposition you're making is
unclear here.

Text Comment. specif y

QM specif ics add

sentences are always helped by specif ic details. replace general terms with specif ics.

Text Comment. alphabatize list

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RUBRIC: ANNOT BIBLIO RUBRIC

RHET FOCUS Developing

Write f or a specif ic audience and purpose.

ABSENT OR BELOW Audience's needs are of ten not recognized: terms and ideas need explanation and
BASIC language needs adjustment f or the audience. Purpose (to persuade reader that
sources are appropriate f or this editorial) isn't clear or achieved.

DEVELOPING Shows some attention to audience's needs, sometimes def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to persuade reader that
sources are appropriate f or this editorial) may be unclear at times, and it may not be
achieved convincingly.

PROFICIENT Usually shows attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and ideas
and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to persuade reader that sources
are appropriate f or this editorial) may be implied, but it's clear and achieved.

ADVANCED Shows sophisticated attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to persuade reader that
sources are appropriate f or this editorial) is clear and achieved with style.

ET HICAL RES Developing

Using the appropriate majors customary citation style, ethically cite and communicate inf ormation f rom a
variety of discipline-appropriate sources.

ABSENT OR BELOW Omits or uses discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
BASIC marks incorrectly. Drops quotations and ideas into text without introducing source.
Frequently uses irrelevant or unpersuasive sources or relies exclusively on one
source.

DEVELOPING A f ew errors in discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
marks. Of ten includes sources without introduction in cases when introduction is
necessary and discipline appropriate. Sometimes relies too heavily on a single source
or uses irrelevant or unpersuasive sources.

PROFICIENT Correctly uses discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
marks. Usually introduces each source f ully (as necessary and discipline-appropriate)
reader knows who did the research or communicating, f or whom, and why. Use of
sources is usually diverse, relevant and persuasive.

ADVANCED Correctly uses discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
marks. Introduces each source f ully (as necessary and discipline-appropriate)
reader knows who did the research or communicating, f or whom, and why. Use of
sources is always diverse, relevant and persuasive.

PERSUASION Developing
Compare, evaluate, synthesize, and communicate caref ully, objectively, and persuasively the relative merits
of alternative or opposing arguments, assumptions, and cultural values. Integrate this evaluative work into
a persuasive argument.

ABSENT OR BELOW Annotations to the working title and thesis are unclear, and their relevance,
BASIC timeliness, balance, and authority may be questionable or unclear. Alternately, the
writer may not have written the three required sentences f or each source.

DEVELOPING Annotations are related to the working title and thesis, but their relevance, timeliness,
balance, and authority may be questionable or unclear.

PROFICIENT Annotations usually persuade reader that the listed sources support the working title
and thesis and are relevant, timely, balanced, and authoritative.

ADVANCED Annotations persuade reader that the listed sources support the working title and
thesis and are relevant, timely, balanced, and authoritative.

ORGANIZ AT ION Prof icient

Organize, f ocus, and communicate ones thoughts clearly and ef f ectively to address a rhetorical situation.

ABSENT OR BELOW Organizational devices (working title and thesis, summary sentences, headings) are
BASIC missing or unclear. T hree-sentence annotations are not coherent.

DEVELOPING Organizational devices (working title and thesis, summary sentences, headings) f it
the prompt, but may be vague, too broad, or inconsistenly or illogically linked. T hree-
sentence annotations may not be coherent.

PROFICIENT Clear, specif ic organizational devices (working title and thesis, summary sentences,
headings) f it the prompt and tie ideas and topics together. T hree-sentence
annotations are coherent.

ADVANCED Clear, specif ic organizational devices (working title and thesis, summary sentences,
headings) f it the prompt and tie ideas and topics together logically and seamlessly.
T hree-sentence annotations f low logically and seamlessly.

LANG & DESIGN Developing

Recognize, evaluate, and employ the f eatures and contexts of language and design that express and
inf luence meaning and that demonstrate sensitivity to gender and cultural dif f erences.

ABSENT OR BELOW Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors impede readability. Lanuage may ref lect
BASIC a gender or cultural bias. Design may be unconventional and inef f ective.

DEVELOPING Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors of ten impede readability or otherwise
distract f rom meaning. Lanuage may occasionally suggest a gender or cultural bias.
Design may be inconventional or inef f ective.

PROFICIENT Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors are f ew and do not distract f rom
meaning. Lanuage respects gender and cultural dif f erences. Design is conventional
and ef f ective.

ADVANCED Outstanding control of language, including ef f ective diction and sentence variety.
Lanuage respects gender and cultural dif f erences. Design is conventional and
ef f ective.