Racial Profiling Self Edit

Your job today is to mark each step on your draft. Use different color highlighters, pens, pencils.
You will turn this in with your final draft on Friday.

1. Circle your creative title.

2. Label the type of introduction you used.

3. If you used a quotation or a dictionary definition, make sure that it is parenthetically notated
in the introduction AND it is included in your Works Cited page.

4. Highlight your thesis with three colors: topic/reason 1/reason 2

5. Is your thesis the LAST sentence of the introduction? If not, draw an arrow and note that
you need to change it.

6. Highlight your topic sentence with same colors for topic and reason 1.

7. Highlight your evidence for reason 1.

8. In the margin, label how many lines of commentary you have per evidence.

9. Circle the parenthetical citation for the evidence. Look on your Works Cited Page. Is the
word in parentheses the first word in the citation? If not, fix it.

10. Label TR above the transition word or phrase you used between evidence 1 and evidence
2.

11. Look at your concluding sentence for body paragraph 1. Highlight the wording for the
topic/reason 1.

12. If your concluding sentence sets up the next paragraph, cross it off, and change it.

13. Complete numbers 5-11 for body paragraph 2.

14. Label your four pieces of evidence 1,2,3,4. (If you have more, label all of them).

15. Do you have at least three sources for your evidence?

16. Do you have different sources in each paragraph? (No repeats in same paragraph!)

17. Are all sources in the Works Cited page, including any citations in the introduction?
18. Highlight your restated thesis in the concluding paragraph with the three colors you used for
number 3.

19. Is your restated thesis the first sentence of the concluding paragraph? If not, make a note in
the margin to change it.

20. What is your call to action?

21. Is the last sentence of the entire paper connected back to the introductory hook? Explain, in
the margin of the conclusion, what the connection between the hook and the last sentence is.

22. Look at your Works Cited page. Label your scholarly article in the margin.

23. Label your current news event in the margin.

24. Label your third source in the margin.

25. If you have additional sources, label them in the margin.

26. Circle your Works Cited title.

27. Alphabetize your entries in the margin: a,b,c,d etc.

28. Highlight the first word in the citation. Is it the same information that is in the parenthetical
citation in your paper?

29. Is the second line of the citation indented?

30. Do you have any extra spaces between the entries? If so, make a note in the margin to
change it.

31. If you used a source of the Web, did you include your access date? If not, make a note to
add it.

32. Do you have the correct four line MLA heading?

33. Is your date written in the proper format? Day month year

34. Is your last name and page numbers at the top right hand corner, inch margin?

35. Is the first letter of each word in your title capitalized?

36. Review your paper, and cross out all of the following words: you, I, me. Revise.
37. Review your paper, and circle all passive voice verbs: is, was, were, are. Revise the
sentences.

38. Review your paper, and circle verbs that have helping verbs: was going, had helped, etc.
Get rid of the helping verb and make the verb the action. (Instead of was going went; instead
of had helped helped; etc).

39. Check your commas. Are they supposed to be periods? (run ons)

40. Now, get your chromebook and REVISE REVISE REVISE.