Zavaleta Venedicto 1

Alicia

Batty

English 101

30 May 2017

Reflection

The Essay being revised is my visual rhetoric essay. The essay is about a mural in

Crenshaw. My essay has all required sources, supporting and well-developed ideas and is

organized so that it is easy for the reader to read and understand. My first paragraph gives some

information about the mural and artist, what I needed to fix was my in-text citation. I notice my

second paragraph was a tad bit long, which I thought to shorten but I made the decision to leave

it as it is because I wanted the reader to be very intrigued by the mural they could not see but had

to envision. With that being said my essay needed some changes and correction. The first thing I

fixed was my MLA formatting and My MLA citations, due to that fact that they were non-

existent. I made sure the in-text citations had the authors name not the entire article name, date.

Reading my essay several times I realized I did not cite one of my source so I made sure to

include that in my revised essay. In my revision process, I decided to get rid of small sentences

and phrases, but I also added and paraphrased some sentences differently. I realized that revision

and editing is extremely important. Through my editing I didnt realize some of the grammar

errors I made, thats something I need to work on when writing my essay. I believe my revised

essay has better formatting and is clear to understand with fewer grammar mistakes, overall a

cleaner essay. This revision will help me in my future when writing and revising further essays, I

will know what to revise how to revise it and what to look for in my revision and editing process.