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Alexis Sanchez

Professor Batty

English 101

31 March 2017

Ethnographic Reflection Essay

Overall, I believe that this essay really showcased how I improved after my last essay. I

added in more transition words this time and for example in the second body paragraph included

imagery about Vallarta that included sensory details which helped my argument of how Vallarta

is truly a home to many Mexicans. However, there is still room for improvement. Such as, there

are a couple of typos. More specifically, in the conclusion and intro that I need to look over.

From the feedback I got from Miss Batty she advised me to look over it a couple more times

which I did with Collete, a friend who is not part of Puente, and read it out loud myself. There

were just basic typos such as writing some words twice and some small spelling and spacing

mistakes. Again I struggled with the MLA on this one, but I fixed the header, works cited page

and properly emphasized it. I also made sure the citations were proper and fixed the awkward

spacing. I also cut unnecessary sentences down a bit. I flat out just took out any sentences I

thought were receptive. Like I noticed that I repeated that Mexican's feel a sense of community

way too much and I condensed it to one sentence. Overall I feel my sentences are more concise. I

also used a variety of more transitions words and pointing words. I fixed my quote sandwiches. I

will try to be more concise with my words. For example, in the last paragraph, I repeat how

Vallarta celebrates culture rather than other companies in two sentences. I also expanded to the

conclusion a bit to further answer to so what of the argument.

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