IDEALIZED WOMEN
THE PROBLEM
beauty.
feeling criticized, they start to feel insecure about themselves and many of them even start to have a low
self esteem. Because of all this pressure that popular culture imposes, many American Women and girls
They start to feel overweight, start to use tons amount of cosmetics, start to dress differently, and even
present cosmetic surgeries. What worries me the most is that this idealized beauty is an increasing
problem. It is invading the lives of girls at an early age, and the parameters that women take just to attain
the look imposed by society, is incredible. As time passes, the pressure is rising, and body image is
The concern of all women affect their economic well being. Many of them start to spend infinite amount
of money in cosmetic products and even alter their physical appearances through surgical measures that
may have dangerous health risks. But DON’T WORRY, I have great solutions!
THE COSTS
Women that want to be perfect, and look like a victoria secret angel model, spend tons amount of money
till they reach their goal. Once they do one surgery, they want more and more surgeries because they feel
prettier and better. The hidden truth is that they don't look as a beauty queen… they look less natural and
In the world, women spend a total of 7 billion just in COSMETICS! As plastic surgeries increase, also
non surgical procedures to change appearances increase drastically every year. Also, as time passes, girls
start to spend money on this procedures at a younger age because each time society is imposing more
pressure which causes woman to feel uncomfortable. In 2008 for example, young girls from ages 18 to 24
were given a survey, were the results were that 69% were in favor of surgeries.
I consider costs is not a problem. Why don’t men start to spend the same amount of money in cosmetics
as women? Men should also care about being beautiful! I wouldn’t want to marry a men that has a bad
physical appearance. Men, being kind, respectful, truthful, sincere, and friendly is important, but being
BEAUTIFUL is even more important! If you have a bad physical appearance, I have the solution. Just
start to spend money in surgeries and you will look prettier and better.
Seeing more data, in 2007, 11.7 million cosmetic surgical and non surgical procedures were performed in
the US. If we compare the 11.7 million, to ten years before, we can see an increase of 500% ! I am proud
because women are starting to obtain the image imposed by society! We should not just look how we
want to. The people that are different don’t stand out. We should break this bubble and just be like
everyone else!
WORKPLACE DISCRIMINATION
A study made, shows that having a good physical appearance can affect on work payment. People that
looked great earned 5% more money and people that looked less prettier, earned 9% less money than the
others. People in the workplace are also discriminated by their weight. People that are thin are hired, and
people that don't look thin, are fired many times! Its time to change our physical appearances and get
the end, women will look great and have great opportunities in life.
uncomfortable in what they eat and even their weight affects their
emotions, their happiness.. Another study showed that 13% of women just
young girls from ages 15 to 19, about 40% are diagnosed eating
53% of them have a normal weight and want to lose more. At least
not ALL women are horrible, some of them decide to diet and look
not beautiful how you are! Just do more surgeries, you’ll look
much better.
People that
Pieces of data
In 2008 for example, young girls from ages 18 to 24 were given a survey, were the results were that
Seeing more data, I was impacted because in 2007, 11.7 million cosmetic surgical and non surgical
If we see young girls from ages 15 to 19, about 40% are diagnosed eating disorders. In overall 67% of
women are dieting to lose weight and 53% of them have a normal weight and want to lose more and
more.
At least not ALL women are horrible, some of In this part of the proposal, I used an
UNDERSTATEMENT, to make this problem
them decide to diet and look better. seem less than it really is. We can see that 67%
women are dieting and 53% of them have normal
weight and want to lose more weight. Im just
using a comedic understatement, because i'm
adding humor to a serious situation.
Once they do one surgery, they want more and In this part, I used a LITOTE, which is an
ironical understatement in which an affirmative is
more surgeries because they feel prettier and expressed by the negative of its contrary. In this
case when I say “they are not a beauty queen”, i'm
better. The hidden truth is that they don't look as a saying they “are ugly”. You can see that i'm using
an intentional understatement that gives an
beauty queen… they look less natural and many ironical effect.
Many of them start to spend infinite amount of In this part, I used HYPERBOLE which is an
exaggeration that makes you see things more
money in cosmetic products and even alter their important than what they really are. In this case
i'm exaggerating when I say that women spend
physical appearances infinite amount of money. Its obvious they don’t
use ALL their money in cosmetic products.
“you´re going to be alone forever with that body”. In this part, I used an invective which is an
insulting or abusive language to express blame or
severe disapproval. In this part, my intention was
to show how society imposes this way of thinking
and is just abusive to women. When women hear
this phrase said by society: “you're going to be
alone forever with that body”, start to diet and do
stupid things just to fit in society.
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