Hillary Clinton strode into history books Thursday night with a call
for Americans to rally behind her. “Join us” was a refrain as she
moved toward the end of her speech — and toward what promises to
be a divisive campaign to become the nation’s first female President.
She tried to take all of these concerns straight on, praising Sanders at
the start of her address, embracing the party platform she had been
pressured by progressives to adopt, and admitting her shortfalls at
connecting in the past to voters. “Now, sometimes the people at this
podium are new to the national stage. As you know, I’m not one of
those people,” Clinton said. “The truth is, through all these years of
public service, the service part has always come easier to me than the
public part. I get it, that some people just don’t know what to make of
me.”
She did little to help answer that one. Instead, she offered a broad
vision of helping all Americans with her specific ideas of how to do it.
“It’s true. I sweat the details of policy,” she said. Moments later, she
contrasted that with Trump, whose positions are often hard to pin
down. “No wonder he doesn’t like talking about his plans,” she said,
before dryly adding, “You might have noticed, I love talking about
mine.”
“Don’t believe anyone who says ‘I alone can fix it,’” Clinton warned.
“Those were Donald Trump’s words in Cleveland. They should set off
alarm bells.”
For the better part of four nights, the speakers had taken their turns
hammering Trump as a self-serving huckster, an alleged billionaire
who is running for President only to make his brand bigger, and an
enemy to women, immigrants and workers. They also tried to
humanize a sometimes distant public figure with anecdotes about her
personal life and her behind-the-scenes political work.
But the biggest lift was Clinton’s own speech. She kept working at it
all the way into Thursday. After making a surprise appearance with
Obama late Wednesday, she went back to her hotel to keep working
on the latest draft of the address. Aides were frustrated with her
insistence on specifics over rhetoric, details over drama, but it was
typical Clinton. “Why keep it simple like, ‘If you see something, say
something’ when ‘If you see something suspicious, please alert the
proper authorities’ is much better?” one aide joked.
She seemed to yield to advisers, and the speech had some memorable
one-liners, and some rhetoric that can be repurposed for the
speeches she gives every day. As usual, it was grounded in facts and
specifics.
“Some of you are frustrated. Even furious. You’re right. It’s not yet
working the way it should,” she said.
Here were the highlights: “A country where the economy works for
everyone, not just those at the top” (a line I heard three different
Clinton operatives offer word for word at panels and briefings before
the speech). … “When there are no ceilings, the sky's the limit.”… “My
primary mission as president will be to create more opportunity and
more good jobs with rising wages right here in the United States”
(this was a line borrowed from no less than ... Michael Dukakis). In
its rhetoric, it was a model of what not to do in so consequential a
speech.
Stealing quotation
Here were the highlights: “A country where the economy works for
everyone, not just those at the top” (a line I heard three different
Clinton operatives offer word for word at panels and briefings before
the speech). … “When there are no ceilings, the sky's the limit.”… “My
primary mission as president will be to create more opportunity and
more good jobs with rising wages right here in the United States”
(this was a line borrowed from no less than ... Michael Dukakis). In
its rhetoric, it was a model of what not to do in so consequential a
speech.
No theme
Above all else, a speech must contain a central theme, one that
provides a frame of reference for the message. Every line of
JFK’s 1961 inaugural sets the table for “ask not what your
country can do for you.” Every line of Martin Luther King’s
famous speech at the Lincoln Memorial drives toward the
affirmation that “I have a dream.” Here, as Churchill said of
the pudding, it had no theme.