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Fuentes, Andrew

English 101

Professor Batty

29 May 2018

Visual Rhetoric Revision Reflection

My Visual Rhetoric essay was the first essay I have ever done in my English 101 course.

With being my worst essay score I received earning a 28 out of 50. Since it was my first essay I

still needed to get used to writing papers and understanding the structure. I felt the need to do a

lot of changes that I felt would improve my essay to earning a better score. The things that I

change on my essay were changing the order of my essays, adding information, and fixing my

grammar errors. I feel those mistakes are what affected my essay the most.

The ordering pattern on my essays were all over the place in my original essay. I went the

same pattern as my thesis statement so the reader knew in what order I was going to write my

essays. I first started with talking about the art because when visualizing the mural you obviously

see the images. Some of them are very common images so most know what they represent. Then

I started talking about the ways the lines were drawn on the mural because I felt they gave either

the emotion of the image giving what you should be feeling. I finally then talked about the colors

of the images because that is what gives the image the character such as making it scary or

strong. I added better topic sentences for my paragraphs so the reader know what the paragraphs

were about.
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When revising my old essay it did not have enough evidence to back up my arguments.

So I provided the story “Still Water Saints” by Alex Espinoza because there was a lot if chicano

related things in the story that I was able to help prove my ideas. I added more quotes from the

“Picture This: How Pictures Work” by Molly Bang because I also noticed more signs on the

mural that the book said that were strong signs have a deep meaning behind it. So I provided

some more information to help support my arguments on my specific things within the mural

itself.

Rereading my original I had a lot of errors making my arguments not make sense. When

making the paragraph changes I reworded my paragraphs using different words to make it sound

more clearer. I also fixed bad quotes by either fixing errors within the authors statement and

quoting their names. Another error was my mla format I didn’t really apply it into my paper

because I did not know the proper way. It will make my Visual Rhetoric essay look professional

and will catch a reader's attention on the thoughts I expressed on “The Virgin Seed Mural”.

In conclusion I feel by fixing all these errors I will have a better score because of the

improvements made within the essay. I improved all things I felt affected my score such as the

organization of my paragraphs, adding additional evidence to help support the arguments I

wanted to prove, and by improving my grammar mistakes with involving the proper mla format

to make my essay look professional.