The history of governmental establishment in different countries including the U.S.

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opinion, has been an example of continuous struggle of creating a powerful yet relatively riskless 247 words (from the first word of introduction to the last
word of conclusion)
government and to keep people’s rights and liberties protected and taken into account. During the Specific Client's requirement (...Your essay should be
at least 250 words long...) is not met.

New Deal era the United States of America underwent significant reforms related to the protection Commented [2]: Language (read Academic writing
style in the Guide)
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of liberties of every citizen. Federal reforms were aimed to provide solutions for the Great academic writing style
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Depression (Fishback 384). It is of paramount importance to mention the fact that before the New please! in the Guide)
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Deal era the power of the federal government was much more significant, while regional state
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federal governments had to fulfil all the programs initiated in the capital. This is too wordy
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The separation of power along with the mechanism of checks and balances is called to The word 'federal' is used incorrectly, while this is a
very important term in this paper.
minimize the abuse of power, corruption, and oppression, and establishing political branches that Commented [6]: Client’s Requirements (read Task
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limit and control each other while being accountable to the voters. The system of checks and in the Guide)
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"...you should make use of key terms ... from the
balances is used by different branches of the government to oppose each other in regards to the readings assigned"
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federalism" are not used in the text.
specific responsibilities the branches have in relation to the citizens of the US. In sequence,
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different institutions of the government share power, so that no institution has total control of all the Awkward sentence. No same/parallel structure in this
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power. Thus, the system of checks and balances protects our liberties, because every policy or Commented [8]: Language (read Clear ideas only! in
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affected by this decision. Commented [9]: Language (read Link words in the
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Do you think that the protections that we derive from
federalism and the separation of powers/checks and
balances are worth the costs that we have to pay?
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ARE WORTH the costs OR NOT.
Instead, only the benefits of checks and balances are
described.
The task is done incorrectly=is failed. Hence, this is an
F paper.
 Works Cited

Fishback, Price V. "New Deal." Banking Crises. Palgrave Macmillan, London, 2016. 241-250.