Criterion Undocumented 0 Minimal 1 Basic 2 Proficient 3 Advanced 4 Comments

Unacceptable Unacceptable Acceptable Acceptable Acceptable

Idea The statement Statement Statement Using Using sound Adv 4:

Development does not address expresses the logically generally assumptions
Goal: after graduation have sufficient knowledge to continue
the author’s views author’s views develops the sound and arguments,
education/career
about the about the author’s views assumptions the statement
purposes of purposes of about the and logically -shape at young age//lasting impact
education, guiding education, purposes of arguments, develops the
educational guiding education, based in author’s views Your philosophy for teaching is very evident in this paper, as is
principles, educational guiding practical about the your main goal. I felt you supported this very well. I loved that
understanding of principles, educational experience, purposes of you included how students can teach others what they’ve
learning, and/or understanding of principles, the statement education, learned. You might want to consider students as group
the most learning, and/or understanding logically guiding facilitators.
appropriate the most of learning, develops the educational
strategies for appropriate and/or the most author’s views principles,
teaching. The strategies for appropriate about the understanding
statement is teaching, but is strategies for purposes of of learning,
incoherent or ambiguous or not teaching. education, and/or the
extremely brief or connected. guiding most
However, the
contains major educational appropriate
statement is not
logical principles, strategies for
always
inconsistencies. understanding teaching.
consistent
of learning, Statement
and/or
and/or the includes sound
convincing.
most ethical or
appropriate psychological
strategies for arguments and
teaching. not just
practical ones.
Illustrative No illustrative Supporting Examples in Supporting Specific Prof 3:
Examples examples are examples are support of points examples from examples from
Food representing culture – great example and impact on
included. inadequate or of are relevant but the writer’s the writer’s
students then and how it relates to future
unclear general or not experience are personal
relevance. based in specific and experience, Your example of writing essays and structuring sentences was a
experience. pertinent. academic work, good supporting detail. My only comment here is that it was
or field specific and pertinent but didn’t stand out in a vivid way.
experience
illustrate points
in a vivid or
memorable
way.

Quality of The statement is The statement, The statement is The statement In addition to Prof 3:
Writing very difficult to though understandable is clear, well being clear,
1,009 words met the requirement. 1 reference. Not double
read because of its comprehensibl plus two of the organized, free well organized,
spaced. I F needs to be corrected. Other than that I found no
style, usage, e, has obvious following: from errors of free from
errors.
mechanics, or problems in two mechanics and errors of
1) organized,
organization. of the following usage, and mechanics and Flow – for me the flow was choppy. Just by rearranging a few
areas: style, 2) free from written in an usage, and paragraphs I thing you’d have a fantastic product.
usage and errors of appropriate written in an
mechanics, or academic appropriate Has a unifying theme.
mechanics and
organization. usage, style. academic style,
the statement:
3) in an
appropriate 1) has a single,
academic style. unifying theme
and

2) is strongly
suggestive of
the writer’s
voice.
Additional
I enjoyed reading your paper. GREAT!! Rough draft. Total:
Comments

Reviewee: Cameron Gentile Date: 9/16/18

Evaluator: Amy Durand Date: 10/5/18