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by Trevor Roberts
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Int roduce Evidence
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Self Aware
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proposal essay.docx
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prove your point. T hat said, you have a f ew issues
of organization and style here. First, you have
several mega paragraphs here. I have marked a f ew
places where you might want to consider breaking up
your ideas. Remember that each time you shif t your
f ocus, you need to start a new paragraph.
Furthermore, you of ten times ref er to yourself and
the rhetorical moves that you are about to make in
your paper. Of ten times the more ef f ective way to
do this is to simply make the claim. When you revise
f or your f inal paper, you will want to do so with this
in mind. I look f orward to your next paper.
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T ake some time to introduce this quote. By building the author's ethos, you also build your own.
Comment 1 | Unit y
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QM Introduce Evidence | Dev/Sup
T ake some time to introduce this quote. By building the author's ethos, you also build your own.
T ake some time to introduce this quote. By building the author's ethos, you also build your own.
P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. You may want to revise it using the active
voice.
Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.
T ry not to make your essays self aware In other words, simply make the claims rather than
saying HOW you will make the claims.
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Comment 4 | St yle
Any quote over three lines should be block quote f ormatted. consider paraphrasing this inf o.
QM you | St yle
Sp. T his word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proof read your work.
Missing "," Review the rules f or using punctuation marks.
Text Comment. is
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Sp. T his word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proof read your work.
T ry not to make your essays self aware In other words, simply make the claims rather than
saying HOW you will make the claims.
T his paragraph has a lot going on. You need to split it up.
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T ry not to make your essays self aware In other words, simply make the claims rather than
saying HOW you will make the claims.
Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word. Consider using the article the
T ry not to make your essays self aware In other words, simply make the claims rather than
saying HOW you will make the claims.
PAGE 5
Sp. T his word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proof read your work.
Article Error You may need to use an article bef ore this word.
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QM Good | Format
Good
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RUBRIC: WRITING ASSIGNMENT RUBRIC
UNIT Y Scale 5
DEV/SUP Scale 4
SCALE 6 elaborates that response with well-chosen examples and persuasive reasoning,
excellent
SCALE 5 elaborates that response with appropriate examples and logical reasoning
SCALE 4 elaborates that response with acceptable examples and sensible reasoning
SCALE 6 conf orms to an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, using
organizational patterns to demonstrate the relatedness of ideas and enhances the
power of the argument
SCALE 5 conf orms to an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, using
organizational patterns to convey the argument
SCALE 4 conf orms to an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, using
organizational patterns to illustrate the argument, f its
SCALE 3 deviates f rom an organizational pattern that f acilitates reader understanding, so that
organizational structures may detract f rom the argument
SCALE 2 lacks an organizational pattern which f acilitates reader understanding, lacking
ST YLE Scale 4
SCALE 6 displays a sophisticated style that ref lects aptly chosen words and rhetorically
ef f ective sentence variety
SCALE 5 displays a readable style that ref lects well-chosen words and ef f ective sentences
SCALE 4 displays a style that ref lects appropriate words and sentence variety
SCALE 3 displays a style that ref lects imprecise word choice and little sentence variety
SCALE 2 displays a style that ref lects at least one of the f ollowing: simplistic or inaccurate
word choice; monotonous or f ragmented sentence structure, inappropriate
SCALE 1 displays a style which creates a disconnect between sound and sense, one in which
language word choice and syntax obscure meaning, unacceptable
SCALE 3 may deviate f rom the conventions of Standard Written English by displaying
occasional major errors in grammar and usage or f requent minor errors
SCALE 2 repeatedly deviates f rom the conventions of Standard Written English by displaying
many repeated errors in grammar and usage
SCALE 1 consistently deviates f rom the conventions of Standard Written English., displaying a
pervasive pattern of errors in word choice, sentence structure, grammar and usage,
unacceptable
FORMAT Scale 6
SCALE 6 exhibits mastery of the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat. masterf ul
SCALE 3 may deviate f rom the conventions of manuscript citation manuscript citation and
f ormat.
SCALE 2 repeatedly deviates f rom the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat.
SCALE 1 consistently deviates f rom the conventions of manuscript citation and f ormat.
unacceptable