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I'm missing out on a lot in college. The other day some people I like were sitting in the cafeteria listening to music and talking. I would have given anything to stay and not have to go to work. I almost called in sick' I used to get invited to parties, I don't much anymore. My friends know I'm noigoing to be able to make it, so they don't bother. I can't sleep late on weekends or watch TV during the week'

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Steve, a typical American, stays home on workdays. He logs onto his e-mail. Evenings, he Iistens to his iPod, watches a DVD, or surfs the lnternet.

On many days, Steve doesn't talk to any other human beings, and he doesn't see any people except those on television. Steve is imaginary, but his lifestyle is very common. More and more, the inventions of modern technoLogy seem to be cutting us off from contact with our fellow human beings.

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