Essays for the certificate of Proficieny in English (ECPE) Some psychologists claim that people inherit most of their

personality traits from thei parents. Do you think this is true? Give specific examples from your own experience to support your viewpoint. Some phychologists claim that people inherit most of their personality from their parents and I agree to some extend. When babies are born, they show their personality .The way they behave ,the way they cry or even when they are hungry , the way they ask for food shows or give us an indea of how his/her personality is going to be. From the very beginning you can listen people making comments like he is sweet, shes got bad temper, she wants to control everybody , etc. Some of these sweet, bad-tempered, controller babies happened to be different when they grow up. They grow up in an environment and the tent to do what they see. There are children who have problems at school .They fight ,say bad words, dont have respect for their teacher nor their peers. They show an aggressive personality but sometimes they dont want to have those kind of reactions. Renzo is a very intelligent and sweet boy who has problems at school. If teachers treat him with love , pacience and respect, he produces good work and has no problem with his friends , but if somebody pushes him as an accident he reacts violently. We have had interviews with his parents and we found out that his mother treats him the same way he treats people at school. Therefore, this boy might have a lovely personality but because of this influence and example of his mother he reacts differently. On the other hand we have children who have parents that are quite aggressive and the children are sweet, delicate, kind. Therefore I can conclude saying that we born with our own personality but life might change it , sometimes for better and some for not. As adults we have to be aware of this and as we live in a society we need to know how to control our personality. We need to know how to behave in different situations .If you need to be polite be polite. Commentary on essay This is very typical of a C level essay.
The opening paragraph gives a poor first impression. Copying directly from the prompt is an indication of a weak writer who does not have a broad enough vocabulary to use his own words to rephrase the essay question. There are also a number of different grammatical errors such as subject-verb agreement , missing prepositions, and incorrect tense choices. The vocabulary is adequate but not always appropriately used .The organization is also generally controlled and the paragraphs are in a logical order. Overall this essay shows that the writer can express his/her ideas but lacks the language resources to make points effectively.