Hanging quotations occur when entire sentences of quoted text are not “attached” to one of
your sentences. It’s a good idea to avoid these, because quotations need to be part of your
prose, and part of your sentences. Here’s an example of a hanging quotations from your
paper:
“But to others, so-called suburban sprawl and its tidy subdivisions are rapidly chewing
up one of America's most cherished assets open space” (Cooper).
First, you can easily add a signal phrase to the sentence, like this:
According to Ortiz and Ramirez (2008), “the power hitters are the foundations of a
strong batting order” (p. 55).
You can also introduce it with another sentence, but instead of using a period at the end of the
“introducing” sentence, you’ll use a colon. Here’s an example:
I often wondered about who sits in the expensive box seats behind home plate:
“These are generally sold to private companies and other corporate clients who want
to reward employees and impress potential customers” (Henry, 2008, p. 43).
Whatever you choose, just make sure that all quotations are “attached” to your sentences.
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I didn’t see problems or issues with the transitions at this stage, so I don’t have any
suggestions for revision at this time.
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Valerie Vinay
June Olson
10 December 2008
Often people wonder what their lives will be like down the road. Are they going
to have a successful life with no flaws or is it going to go downhill at some point? Many
people do not think about certain topics such as development. It may not be affecting
them, but to many others development could be destroying them. Development has many
different meanings. It could mean that new shopping malls, highways, houses, etc are
being built. The real meaning of development is; the unrestrained increase of urban
development. Development has its ups and downs. Just like many other topics there are
advantages and disadvantages. This is just the beginning of urban sprawl! Have you ever
wondered what was once in the place where you are standing right now? Maybe it was
nothing at all. Maybe developers wanted to spice things up. The advantage of urban
sprawl is that the community gets to experience new things. It is like the saying, “out
with the old in with the new”, but with every advantage there are many disadvantages
that go along with it. A huge disadvantage could be that new shopping mall everyone’s
raving about, is going right on top of your precious home. It is not so great when you are
forced out of your home. What is funny is that does not really matter to anyone else.
Their not being affected so who cares, right? No, not who cares, people buy these homes
who is experiencing something similar. This is exactly how the paper and interview went;
[Valerie, I have some ideas about the thesis statement and introduction. Please see
my comments above.]
This is not an ordinary paper. [Try not to refer to the paper in the paper.] I
guess you can call it a real life situation. Everyone goes through hard times, right? It
seems as if the state of Arizona is giving more than enough problems to Arizona
residents. I mean it’s not just Arizona. What I am talking about is development/urban
sprawl! What kind of development? All kinds of development are destroying homes,
animals, people and history. The beauty in wildlife and the forest are being taken down in
a blink of an eye. Developers are building highways that are destroying people’s homes.
They are building homes that are destroying beautiful forests, for what? For people to
live on is why it’s being destroyed? What people do not understand is that pretty soon the
United States is going to be full of houses, shopping malls, etc. History and beauty will
be destroyed for development. What’s even crazier is that I know someone who is
experiencing this now. She lives in a ritzy area where she never thought development
would take over. Her problem is that a highway is being built right where her beautiful
home stands. I recorded an interview with a close family friend of mine. This is exactly
how it went:
for it!
Me: Well in my English class I had to do some sort of project on my research topic,
which is development.
Me: Most definitely! First off, how is development affecting where you live and your
Ann: The development where I live has affected me so much. It really doesn’t seem like
it should be too big of a deal. I have had to find new resources to get to work. You
wouldn’t believe how much it does affect a person. I have not had enough time to figure
out where the hell I’m supposed to go. The economy has gone to you know what! I am
going to get minimum pay for my house. I was so mad because now I basically lost assets
on my house. My profit value of the house is definitely not going to be paid in full.
Me: Wow that really takes a toll on a person. Have you ever argued against your house
Ann: Of course I have argued against my house being taken from me, who wouldn’t? My
kid’s home, where they grew up, is being taken away from me. I am not the only one who
is upset about this. My neighbors are being affected also. Many of them got lawyers, but I
took my way to fight against this. I have gone to several county meetings and argued
straight to the enemy’s face about what they are doing. They have heard my peace and all
they care about is their stupid property. They do not take into realization that, hello, their
has been in affect for several years and hasn’t been released to the public until recently.
Developers were even building houses where the highway would go because no one had
any idea. The steps we have already taken have done nothing. No one wants to hear about
the people, the ones who live in these houses! The only thing they care about is
Me: You have good insight on this topic. This is such good information. How much
Ann: Apparently not enough! If they would’ve warned us five years ago when the plan
came up in discussion, I would’ve never kept investing. I would have put my money
Me: It’s funny how the government can just do this to people. Has this caused problems
Ann: Like I said in the beginning, I have lived in this same house for 10 years; my kids
basically grew up in this house. I built this house here for a reason; it wasn’t a popular
place and I wanted to get away from possible development where my last house was. It
affects me money wise; there is history in this house and my whole life. [Please see my
Ann had great insight. She is really affected by development. In a blink of an eye,
your house could be taken. It’s funny because no matter what you say or do you really
cannot stop development. The world is a crazy place and it is hard to stop destruction.
Urban sprawl has become an issue that has affected many lives. It may have great
assets, but with every great asset there is a disadvantage. The cost of development can
shoot through the roof, which causes many cities such as phoenix to suffer. [Remember
to capitalize the titles or proper nouns, such as place names like Phoenix.] Not only is
it expensive, but it is causing people more money to help its development and to keep it
active. By building more the city is losing more. History is being taken away from
because of new fancy high tech buildings. These new developments are putting the
homes of people at risk, which causes them to have to pick up and leave. With new
development comes run down buildings because of the financial state of Arizona. The
sprawl of this can affect not only people, but the history and animals around it. Today’s
development has upset the equilibrium in finance, environment and human lives. [These
are good points! Keep them in mind as you work on the thesis. ]
Just like people, animals need homes, but with the rapid growth of development animals
and wildlife are slowly diminishing. “But to others, so-called suburban sprawl and its tidy
subdivisions are rapidly chewing up one of America's most cherished assets open space”
(Cooper). The exquisiteness of open space is that any single person can go and cherish
the amazing land that has produced such tremendous beauty. Most people see wildlife
roaming the plains of forests, country land, or just big open spaces. People often go to
visit these places to escape the world they live in. These utopian places will diminish as
time unveils. Development will soon destroy what was once someone else’s home
(wildlife). There are people out there who are willing to fight against open spaces being
taken away. It makes survival of certain wildlife species difficult. It is difficult because
they are trying to find breeding ponds, hibernation sites, feeding locations, or finding a
nesting area. That is not possible when they are being killed or pushed away from their
habitat.
These new developments are putting the homes of people at risk, which causes
them to have to pick up and leave. In the novel Deliverance by James Dickey, the main
realizes that different areas are sometimes meant for the people that live there at that
point in time and not to be touched. These issues should be looked over when developers
try to take over land that should not be touched for various reasons. ”Property-rights
advocates and other critics say the government should not force home and business
owners to turn over their property to other private parties” (Jost). People have to face the
horrendous news each day; their homes are being taken away. [You use the semicolon
perfectly here!] Farmers who not only live on their land, but work on their land are not
only losing their home, but their jobs also. That puts a lot of risk on everybody and the
unemployment rate could increase around the farm lands. In Ahwatukee, Arizona many
fear for the new highway being built. The highway being built means many have to get
rid of their homes and find somewhere else to live. Not only do they have to move out,
butthe highway is going right on top of their once owned houses. Many wonder why a
random highway is being built? The highway is being built so people do not have to drive
farther around South Mountain. They can drive right on through and get to their
destination quickly. Although it may save time on getting to work or school or anywhere
for that matter, it is affecting the people who live right there. This is not fair to people
who have worked hard to make a living and to establish where they are living. There is
not much they can do about it, but to keep fighting for their rights. Anyone put in that
highways, houses, etc for expanding developments instead of maintaining the existing.
The more development the government plans to create the more in debt they are going to
become. Homes and businesses start to spread farther apart and the government is meant
to provide for spaced services. With every problem the government has a solution.
“Owners of these dispersed developments seldom pay the full government costs of
serving them, forcing the rest of us to subsidize them with higher taxes at the local, state
attach it to one of your sentences. ] It is not fair to higher taxes because the
government feels there needs to be new infrastructures. Money is a huge factor in any
places, which is not good. It causes job opportunities to spread over a great area and also
forces governments to direct more funds towards new development instead of focusing
on existing problems. “And a lot of times commercial uses such as shopping centers yield
higher taxes than residential uses, which consume more city services” (Cooper). No one
realizes the long term personal costs and risks of maintaining remote properties. Property
taxes start to rise because they have to cover service costs and fuel costs. Transportation
costs for children are much higher as well. The economy at this point in time has gone
into recession. With all the extra costs and taxes the government is going to run the
people down and there is going to be no more money. People are not going to be able to
pay their bills, let alone their taxes. Without the money from the taxes the development
that is in process or is already up and running will soon diminish to nothing. Even when
the economy is at its all time low, it does not seem to matter.
Sprawl is created to attract more people to bring in more money. On the real side
though, it is creating more money problems and health problems. Sprawl increases more
traffic, which leads to major increase in air pollution and smog. It is not only a threat to
public health, but wildlife health as well. By creating more air pollution it becomes water
pollution. These very things are creating water pollution; construction site erosion, fuel
spills, oil leaks, paint spills, lawn chemicals, pet wastes, etc. “More than 60 urban areas
are not within the Environmental Protection Agency’s (EPA) guidelines for carbon
dioxide or round level ozone” ( ). The pollution is getting worse as time releases and
has affected smaller communities outside these higher density pollution metropolitan
areas. People are suffering from the pollution that the development is bringing. By
building more, it attracts more tourism and people to live in these areas. By doing so it is
increasing the air pollution, which has risks to the human body. “As a by-product of
increased air pollution, the number of people suffering from chronic respiratory illnesses
has increased to about 20,000 to 40,000 cases annually with the number of premature
deaths from “cardiopulmonary causes linked to particulate air pollution” at around 64,000
per year”( ). It really tares down the respiratory system. If the government keeps
building and keeps attracting more people to the new developed areas, soon everyone
In conclusion, urban sprawl has a major impact on not only the people, but the
wildlife as well in many factors. It is diminishing the natural habitats of wildlife. It also
destroys a large amount of our natural resources. The financial status of sprawl greatly
affects everyone around and can cause people great stress. [You have strong and clear
reasons here! Remember these as you develop your thesis.] There are ways that
everyone can come together to help though. Sprawl can be managed. There needs to be
environmentalists, and citizens can bring change in land use and development.
Communities can grow proficiently by building away from natural wildlife resources and
by using existing infrastructure. If cities can come to realization of good transportation
planning, it can have a great impact. If the city wants successful revival it involves
keeping financial resources in a lively city and investing in downtown and inner suburb
areas. It is very important that we help stop unnecessary development because our
economy cannot afford to build new things that are not needed. Although new buildings
etc sound nice we have to think about the cost effect and what it could be doing to the
people and buildings around it. People need to be more educated about development
because then they may then want a voice in development. It takes time and consideration,
but with the help of everyone the residential and commercial areas can turn out to be safe
and healthy.
Work Cited
<http://http://studentwebs.coloradocollege.edu/~j_fritts/final_project/index.html>.