Conciseness
Concreteness
Conciseness
Conciseness is
Redundancy
Repeating words, phrases, ideas and character
traits
If we are going to see the movie on opening night, we
will have to get there early. We have to get to the movie
early because its opening night.
Faulty repetition (Tautology)
saying the same thing twice
Past history
Safe haven
Conciseness Problems
Eliminate redundancy/verbosity.
Reduce faulty repetition.
Make every word count
More Concise
Words and phrases that can often be
pruned away to make sentences clearer
kind of definitely
sort of actually
type of generally
really individual
basically specific
for all intents and particular
purposes
Change phrases into single words
Wordy
The employee with ambition...
The department showing the best
performance...
More Concise
Reword unnecessary infinitive
phrases
Wordy
The duties of a clerk are to check
all incoming mail and to record it.
A shortage of tellers at our branch
office on Friday and Saturday
during rush hours has caused
customers to become dissatisfied
with service.
Reword unnecessary infinitive
phrases
More Concise
Omit words that explain the
obvious or provide excessive detail
Wordy
I received your inquiry yesterday. Yes,
we do have...
It goes without saying that we are
acquainted with your policy on filing
tax returns, and we have every
intention of complying with the
regulations that you have mentioned.
Omit words that explain the
obvious or provide excessive detail
Concise
Make the complex simple
A chronic disposition to inquiry
deprived the feline carnivorous
quadruped of its vital quality.
Persons deficient in the faculty of
determining values move with
impetuosity into a realm which
purely spiritual beings view with
trepidation.
Tips for Conciseness
Dull Vivid
house cottage,
good sales mansion
figure P24 million in
the newspaper sales
Philippine
Computer Daily Inquirer
soon Apple
by Tuesday,
February 2
Concreteness Exercise
Rewrite the following sentences to make
them more concrete and specific.
The movie earned a lot.
There are indications that our economy
will improve after the political exercise.
There was a breakthrough made by the
R&D department.
I saw your picture in the newspaper.
Hes our best employee.
Oral Lecture
Voice Projection
Voice Projection
Slurring
Lisping
Stammering
Over-enunciation
Exercise on Emphasis and
Inflection
I did not say he stole the money.
I did not say he stole the money.
(If you didnt, who did?)
I did not say he stole the money.
(What did you say then?)
I did not say he stole the money.
(Who did steal it then?)
I did not say he stole the money.
(How did he get it then?)
I did not say he stole the money.
(What did he steal then?)
Exercise on Enunciation
He hires poor men.
He hires foremen.